Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13 2008 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 1

I read this story with my mind set to "Written Media Critic"

So as a "magazine owner" I would not accept this story. We're too focused on our readers and if we had such a story, people would not buy it and we would not make a lot of cash.

 

Ok, now to review with the mind of "Myself, the bitter reviewer who writes stories and is less bitter now" 

However, as I am not a magazine owner or anything, I can now give you my review of this story.

Ok, so your story was rejected by a magazine. Oh well, who cares, their loss. At least here we understand and respect people (unless they type in all caps and spell you as "u.")

So I think the story was good, but it isn't a masterpiece.

Also you gave out unnessecary details. For example, I don't need to know about the other gangs, because they were not relevant to the story. Unless you were planning on sending a series to a magazine, then adding such details were not needed

Seriously, I hate Neo-Nazi gangs and I hated the stories you wrote that were about them. Nazis are evil. No Hitler was not a great leader, he drove Germany into the ground. He only riled up the people and delayed their economic collapse by a few years.

Nothing great about him. Now then. Putting in great details around the end of the story is not good either. You give us a whole bunch of info which we think will go somewhere, but then we're slapped with a big "The End" and you go "What the hell?"

So there's my gripes, rants and review of the story. Even if the magazine were to be ignoring the vore in it, some of the stuff in the story was not needed