Date: October 07 2019 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
Really nice story!
I love the concept and how it is written. I would love to read more of this story. Maybe his sister finds out and gets really cruel?
Please continue the story.
Anyway thanks for the story so far its already one of my favorites.
[Report This]Date: September 24 2019 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
Liking the scenario and the ideas, I also like the idea that these come in different sizes and "requests"
I think the idea of shifting between people the way you are to move scenes is good, gives you some freedom between where the protagonist can be without a lofty "this is how they got there" backdrop, gives it a more concentrated approach to the story and chapters.
I'm assuming the body he's in is some kind of avatar? Gives you some freedom over where or who gets the next avatar should this one be disposed of...
Overall it was a good read, don't let lack of reviews discourage you - most of all have fun with it :) (Hell I dug out this ancient account just so I could leave this review...)
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. :D
I had intended this to be over after the mom chapter, but it seemed to get a lot of readers. So I'm continuing for now.
I like the idea of this being a website business. You have people paying thousands to be injected into this tiny avatars, then you have people being paid to play with toys. The whole thing is very under-the-table, illegal, but when has that ever stopped anyone from doing anything? This means that I can take detour chapters to write about other people living out their fantasies.
And I really like the idea of it not being what they wanted. I feel like that's how it would be in real life. We have this thing in our brains going, 'Ooh, that's so hot, God I want that to happen' but if it actually did, I think we would be in for a surprise. So, a guy wants to be stepped on, and it's hot until it happens, then it's just pain and agony. But there's still that tiny part of him that liked it anyways. That whole, 'What is wrong with me' flickering thought before caving into urges.
Anyways, again, thanks for the review. :D
If anyone has requests, this area would be the place to make them.
Date: September 23 2019 11:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
I am really enjoying this one. That sister and Kelsey reveal was fun, very twilight zone like. I would have liked to see more play with them, but still good. I'm looking forward to seeing more stuff with Sam.
A couple ideas that could be fun would be for Sam to lose him, and someone else find him. Then he's stuck with them until Sam can eject him.
Likewise, if you do more with the sister, I think a good idea would be for Sam to leave him plugged in, the mini body In his room with him, for a night while she goes out, leaving him plugged in as a teasing way to punish him, but his sister comes in the room, sees him non responsive, sees the mini, puts two and two together, and takes him, then you can have the sister playing with him knowing it's him.
Regardless what you do, I'm really looking forward to more
Author's Response:
Good ideas. I have so many directions I can go, it's really more about the readers and what they'd like to see. I haven't been back online til today, havn't wrote anything. Something I was counting on was the idea that even if he gets lost, Sam can 'eject' him. Put it on a timer, like, give him ten minutes to figure out his barings then report back where he is. Could be fun.
Date: September 23 2019 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
Really good stuff. I'd like to see someone follow through on their threat and have a tiny speck sized person live in a wrinkle of their asshole for a day. I also am totally down with the sister being more sadistic - anything goes, dirty shoe soles, snot, spit. . put those tinies through hell.
Author's Response:
I've got a lot of directions I could take this. Do you think the sister is a preferred character?
I'm stuck between her, Kelsey and Sam.
And if more sadistic type stuff is what the audience is into, I can write that.
Date: September 22 2019 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
Great story, great ideas ! I like your style, please do not be discouraged from the possible lack of reviews.
I wouldn't mind his sister being even more sadistic to be honest 😈
Anyway, cheers, and keep it on !
Author's Response:
I had intended this to be a short story. I got a little carried away with it. But yeah, just a few chapters, then bringing it to close.
Now, though? I have some ideas that could keep this going for a while. And I know what you mean about lack of reviews, but that can often feel like.. Let's say 100 people read it and nobody says anything about it, yeah? Kinda makes me feel like 'Oh, I'm shit at this.'
For the time being, I don't have plans to stop. We'll see what happens.
And it may take me a while to get this story back towards the sister, but we'll def see more of her. I might have make some 'what-if' chapters, just to get some cooler scenarios out there.
Thanks for reading!
Date: September 22 2019 12:08 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Wildest Dreams Come True
I thought this was one of the best stories I have seen in a long time. Would love to see more about Kelsey's feet or follow the story of another scenario in the future around the world.
Author's Response:
Thank you, that means a lot!
I didn't proof read this, uploading the chapters as I wrote. I was kind of in that mindset of just wanting to -write- for the sake of writing, you know? Reading back over it now, I got a million typos. Bleh.
Anyways, I really liked Kelsey as a character, and I have plenty more story I could squeeze in here. I think I could bridge her back in with a little plot twist. :)