Date: March 01 2010 4:34 PM Title: Chapter 2
Please finish! It was starting to become one of my favorite stories on here but there is no more!
Date: December 10 2007 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 2
I hope that Emily will get out of this situation and be restored.
Captivating and well written.
Date: December 09 2007 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Alex clearly has more issue than a subway newstand. Because, I refuse to believe Emily was as bad as that, for real. And, the fact that I'm even doing this armchair psychoanalysis shows how convincingly you wrote this chapter!
Now, for a couple of cons. First; you keep alternating "Tina" with "Tiny." Is that how Emily mentally refers to Roger's second wife? Is she normally shorter than Emily?
Second; the correct term for a laryngitic-sounding voice is "hoarse."
NOT "Horace!" lol!
Date: December 07 2007 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
Huh! You don't often find a female babysitter kidnapping a shrunken _woman_ in this kind of story.
Interesting innovation!
Date: December 07 2007 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good so far. I can't wait for more! :D