Definetly going be keeping an eye out for your next work if its as wonderfull as this and your other works. That goes doubly so if its a continuation of this story.

Loved it from beginning to end. I'll look forward to seeing more of the characters in the future.

It’s really Gripping and I like it alot! Not a lot of futanari stuff and I’ve finally found it! Just an advice if you could get some rude cruel behavior by the Girls cuz I really like it!

Author's Response:

Glad you like it so far. There might be a bit of cruelty coming but this story's almost over so probably not much before the end. I hope that's okay. 

I think the formatting went arwy in this chapter, making it a little hard to follow. Overall though, it was enjoyable enough. The following line was curious:

“And I’m not letting you die because you’re stubborn!” She snapped back. “It’s the law!”

What's the law? Will this be explained? How could he die? So many questions!

I wasn't sure before, but now I know !

This story takes place in the Dark Multiverse, only it was Izzellah who peered at the dark and ended created this world of nightmares for Minors. There is no escape from the Cockpocalypse !

More seriously, poor Rembrandt can't see to catch a break. He's either the street urchin bad girl or the welthy and corrupt heiress pining for his ass, litteraly, and not one friend to help him.

Will he manage to preserve his anal virginity through the end, or will he be wooed by Crystal's impressive skills in Dick Fencing ? 

Another awesome chapter. Rembrandt's mother is totally crazy, but I like it. I also like how she's literally a bitch to Crystal and yet love her son enough for her to be okay with biker-girl and him being together.

Concernign Rachielle, I wonder who is taller and stronger between her and Crystal. Clearly, Rachielle come from a lot of money, so I would suspect her to be smaller than Crystal and less brutal.

But on the other hand, she terrify Rembrandt more than anything else, so either she's small but incredibly volatile, or she's actually as tall (or taller) and big (or bigger) below the waist than Crystal, so Rembrandt fear would be all the more logical then. 

I can't wait for the two futa to meet, really !

A NotSIrk unleashed and I hadn't even noticed it! Shame on me! 

You should have PMed me on DeviantArt man ! 

I really like the relationship between the protagonist (Remmy), the obstacle (Jericho), the antagonist (Crystal) and the antogonister (it's a word now ! - Rachielle). 

I hope than when Crystal and Remmy's former "owner" fill meet, someone will pop in to utter a "Let them fight" as Remmy goes all worried !

Junie appearance is never described (as far as I know) which was a bit frustrating. Overall it was a nice chaptewr to read, even with the various time skips. Now, when Rembrandt says:

“You wouldn’t be the first.”

Is that a hint at family issues?

Here:

Than it was forced

I think you mean “then” not “than”. You would use “than” in a statement such as:

“I want more than that.”

“Then” is normally used to describe something in sequence.

Here:

“She’d went topless today.”

It may be better to simply state that she wasn’t wearing underwear/bra because topless implies (at least to me) she’s not wearing any clothes above her waist.

Here this sentence seems unfinished:

“...side of Rembrandt’s face with her fingers and then nuzzled his cheek with her.”

With her what exactly?

Hi, just saw your new update and wanted to drop by and say some stuff.

Most of my favorite writers are gone and now we are stuck with you, which, still a good thing that you upload some decent quality stories. As I search some believability in strories and this perticular fetish is making most of the stories such a challenge. Hence there are such a small group of people writing what I enjoy about a story with believability, even if it's such an imposible fetish to exist in real world, consistency of the rules you build your world around, relatability of the characters even if they dont have human standards and of course good word forging helps alot. Don't downgrade your writing with simplified versions of your sentences, I'm not saying this because of this story but another author started his new story with his standard quality sentences and some person said its too confusing to read who is talking so place the name of the character speaking infront of the paragraph, now I have hard time reading it not because its too confusing but story simply feels ugly.

Sorry for the rambling.

Now you gave us some informa- no you just throw us some information to chew while you're writing the next chapter (I hope you keep this one alive for some time). Having little information can be a good thing while you reveal new things in chapters to come but having a main character too oblivious (even if you have reasons) puts him in a non-desirable position, he seems clueless to events going on around him even if the is living in this world for some years. He knows about school bullies but not their ambition which this girl explains later.

You said this story isnt in your confort zone so you used your previous work's template (a clueless school student explores new stuff), while I dont mind it much its better to explore new teplatates and dont get this as a bashing I just dont want you to get too repetitive (still we are in the second chapter it may be too early to make assumptions).

I also want to address the descriptions, you brutally showed us this girl is alot stronger than our MC and he is somewhat puny. After that you dont give much description. After rereading some I realised that you give much more description about the jock and nothing about the girl after their first encounter and I honestly forget about the scar or the body shape in general. What I mean is you can try subtile descriptions, like when she carried him how wind passes him realise the speed of the movement or how gracefull she was or how he get a feel of her while they are so close proximity. I know you mentioned she was athletic and we can deduce some of them but it still adds to the description or reminds us and make a lasting impression (still it is better to not to bore the reader with too much description like some authors).

Lastly this is a futa story and I still dont know why penis size is a rule of thumb on this fetish but if you combine this two in particular that is some "monster" on her and I hope you dont break the immersion of this story or the MC in half with that.

P.S: You may think some of the stuff writen above is obvious to you but I wrote those for any one to read and understand where all this coming from. Also futa is my one of my numbered fetishes which I have hard time understanding in itself, what I'm trying to say is THANK YOU for writing this one and hope you go somewhere with all these.

There's some nice plot development. Not often do people make an effort with that. I understand this is a fetihs story, but it's good to know some thought has been put into it.

I'm not really sure what else I can say. I hope I can help you out of your comfort zone. I hope the next installment isn't too far into the future.