[Report This]Date: December 05 2018 4:29 PM Title: Prologue
Well Nicole did an awesome job against the Tongs, tell me why she didn't stay with the government (keep your friends close your enemies closer...). She could of been do that to AQ, and other terrorists and having just as much if not more FUN. Other then as you state the government doing a mass caustiely event to kill her their isn't a whole lot they could do. If she was a hot a lawyer as you say, she should of played the game, gone into politics and became first president then empress (her strength, beauty and ablities it would of been so much simpler). Now the Government has a reason to two track(PR and really trying to find out how to kill them) it rather then PR with low-end/low-key research on how to kill them.
Just a couple observations, good story, thank you!
Author's Response:
Well, as I will explain in further chapters, Nicole suspected that the government was working to get increased control of her, which is the reason she left. She knew she would be used as a tool, but also that they would keep researching on her, which is what she wanted to avoid. She actually has a plan on how to prevail, but it required getting out of the control of the FRU.
I'm glad that you like the story. I hope that you will continue enjoying it!
[Report This]Date: December 02 2018 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 4
Decent story so far.
Why does everyone look for the kentic kill? The government needs to take a page out of 'the Rock' and use some VX or organic Hg on Nicole, her metalosism and mass might up the dosage needed , but consider a gram can kill dozens a shot glass worth should be able to put her six feet under.
Both substances appear to be what the body wants, so it takes it in without any defenses. Wont matter how dense the skin is or defenses against poisons that the body attempts to fight, it looks like something the nerves need to transmit so they take it in, unless Nicole kills all her nerves and removes them (unless you go with insanity level 10+ Plot armor) Nicole shakes, quakes, shimmies and DIES after being exposed. Those compounds are ninja's with your key, pin and look like your best friend, by the time something is wrong you have recieved a leathal dose.
Evolution doesn't happen in a vacuum, prehaps having been exposed to the flare and regularly being exposed to their 'partners' phermones and personal radation, the nurse's and cheerleader's handlers slowly become more durable (and a touch stronger) until the women know they can 'survive' them. At which point the girls have thier way with them, only to speed evolution making them and their seed durable enoungh for progeny...
Just some ideas, decent story, thank you!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Glad that you like it so far.
Nicole is far from immortal, even if her change makes her incredibly tough to kill. This is the reason she has been lying low after escaping, because she knows that she needs more than just her strength to eventuallly prevail. I agree that a chemical or organic component could do the trick, even if her metabolism would require a much, much higher dose than the one needed to kill a normal person. For the government, using the gas while Nicole is in the open would be just too bad on the collateral victims side, so they need to subdue her first and kill her later. More on this later.
As for the possibility of this affecting the girl's partners... that's not the way I envisioned the flare to work so... not gonna happen ;)
Date: November 20 2018 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 3
Top stuff!!! I look forward to seeing more of these beautiful goddesses in action
[Report This]Date: November 04 2018 10:28 AM Title: Chapter 2
Fantastic story Papayoya. Please continue!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I will keep it coming... the story will be long (15-20 chapters), and I have most of it outlined and more than half written, so I think there should be no problem bringing it to the end!