[Report This]Date: September 18 2018 11:14 PM Title: Chapter 4
I wanted to mention also that I like the references to people being accidentally crushed in various accidents, it helps establish that the shrunken people are truly vulnerable at their reduced sizes and not just easy to toss around. More background details and news clips like that, or even brief segues into completely different settings, would help establish the universe in which your story takes place, without requiring Jill and Rachel to do everything themselves. Maybe a woman somewhere manages to steal some restricted tech and rampages at miles tall, maybe an entire city gets shrunk again and again until it's too small to see as someone smothers it underfoot. Maybe someone steals a ray gun that grows with her and both things happen at once! Or something a little more mundane, a local perv gets caught at mouse size spying on his neighbours.
I'm all for multisize, glad you are too! How awesome would it be to rub and suck a giant girl's toes when you're shrunk to 3 or 4 feet tall and slowly getting smaller, while she threatens to make you tinier than a virus. Definitely I agree your story needs more feet, also I suggest more flip flops, anklets, toe rings, foot tats and artistic toenails. Toe rings would be great to explore just like sandals, and it would be awesome to watch the gemstones on someone's pedicure expanding from pebbles to skyscrapers.
I'm personally very picky about shrinking mechanics, for me it can make or break a story insofar as my ability to really get into it. I think the projector concept you have here works great, I can almost imagine it being a real thing in the near future. If you wanted to make something super crazy tiny, you could always shrink it first and then encase it in something else which gets shrunk next, over and over as needed. Or you could grow a sandal to the size of a car and place a micro man on top before slowly shrinking it back down while the owner stands on top. If the projector has some kind of delay mode then it could just zap things and let them gradually dwindle to whatever size, perhaps even without limit in case of a severe malfunction.
I'm excited to see what you come up with next, and I love the way you take your time building up the story and characters. Hopefully I've given you some ideas to think about in case you run into a block, otherwise please keep up the terrific work!
Author's Response: Wow! It sounds like you have a lot of story ideas! You should try writing some of this. I'd be interested to see what you come up with. It sounds like whatever you wound up writing would be right up my alley!
[Report This]Date: September 17 2018 9:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved The Climber, that was one of the first and best GTS stories I ever read back in the early days. I'd love to see more variations in size like there were in the original. Heck if I was a client, I'd be complaining that the whole shrinking process goes far too fast and deprives me of a chance to enjoy and interact with the world growing around me. I think it would be great to see Pete reduced to just half his size for a change, knowing he's now at Jill or Rachel's total mercy and it's only the beginning of the adventure as he goes to town on their feet.
Any chance this company might eventually consider allowing multiple clients sharing a room, live GTS exploration or group tours? I was thinking what it would be like for example if Jill took a bribe to let several guys shrink down together on her flip flops, only for the size ray to malfunction and leave them microscopic. Then she'd need to send Pete on a mission to retrieve them, shrink him down in several stages as she teases him at her feet, while Rachel secretly monitors the whole thing...
Author's Response: This is an exciting review. You might have as much fun reading the story as I have writing it. There will definitely be multiple size roles. That was always my plan. Each of my stories has different "mechanics" for the size role. In this story, there are projectors that alter size, as opposed to people being born big or permanently reduced in size. This story offers me a lot more freedom to play around with different sizes. I don't want to say too much at this point. There's no point in spoiling future chapters. If you read all three stories, you will see the differences between them. I'm not trying to write the same story three times, but yes, they all have lots of foot stuff! :D
[Report This]Date: September 16 2018 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 4
Yes, there isn't enough foot stuff. That's because the chapters are too short. There is simply room for more feet. And like that crushing scene, it's sometimes over so fast
And luckily it seems that their boss is a bit more into feet.
It's a good story and thanks for writing!
Author's Response: There will definitely be longer chapters, devoted to feet of course. That almost goes without saying. The crush scene in the most recent chapter was supposed to be a news broadcast, because of that, it was shorter and more to the point. I try to keep it slightly realistic. Although, discussing this makes me wonder what it would be like for the police when they are investigating a crush fatality. That could be an interesting chapter. CSI, giantess style!
[Report This]Date: September 14 2018 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 4
A fourth story eh? All this talk of not getting stepped on or squashed, makes me want to see that happen more. Curious as to if and how tha could happen though.
Author's Response: Oh trust me, it can happen. ;)
[Report This]Date: September 14 2018 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely love your writing and stories. More feet please!!
Author's Response: More?! Okay... I guess I need to start that fourth story I've been thinking about. Not enough feet is the only unacceptable complaint, at least to me!
[Report This]Date: September 13 2018 1:49 AM Title: Chapter 3
"Not all that spectacular" eh? Despite creating a story that is vividley remembered how ever long later? Great chapter, can't to see where this story goes :)
Author's Response: Maybe I'm too hard on myself. I do enjoy writing. Being able to envision a scene, and then translate it into words is pretty amazing. I know everyone can't do it. Maybe I just wonder how much better my writing could be if I had professional training. But I guess if I were a professional writer, then I would likely not be here. Ha! So perhaps it's better this way. I will continue to torture you with my amateurish writing.
Date: September 12 2018 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is fantastic! You're doing a great job with these.
Author's Response: I do the best I can. I never felt like my writing was all that spectacular, but I do believe my stories offer a certain authenticity.
Date: September 11 2018 8:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thanks for continuing/re-posting. After you posted the first chapter I too kept on looking for the story that it reminded me of, seemed to be nearly identical. Turns out its the same one - but it was a favorite originally, so I hope that you continue it further than before. I really look forward to it. Awesome story and will certainly only get better. Hopefully more interaction with Jill, as well as Rachel of course.
Author's Response: Aye, it will be continued. I took it down a while back, because I honestly thought I would never continue it. I've since changed my mind. I really do enjoy the premise for this story.
[Report This]Date: September 11 2018 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 2
Did you post this story once before? I am certian I've read it before and faved it, but can not find it in my faves anymore. There were a lot more details to the second chapter than I remember this time around. I remember his boss informing him that she saw all the events unfold through a security camera from her office and was super pissed. Don't remember anymore of the story after that though. All in all loving the story and eagerly looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Shhhhh! I didn't think anyone would remember. :D
[Report This]Date: September 10 2018 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good setup, interested to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks for the positive review! I have to apologize, my update is late. Things came up as they often do, but I will post the new chapter tonight, like for realsies this time.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2018 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great start!
Author's Response: Be sure to read The Climber by Ann too! It's such a great little story.