Reviewer: Gigatennisstar Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2018 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 5: Princess for a day

Holy...amazing. Simply amazing. Loved every word. Truly not your typical vore story.

A+ :)

If you want better criticism, like writing criticism, let me know! ;)

Great story, I'll have to read some of your others.

Author's Response:

I'm open to any and all criticism anyone wants to give me. You can even insult me if you want, but don't expect me to respond to it.

Thanks for the comment(s) as in plural. Glad you liked the story. I'm a bit iffy on it myself (there are some typos and grammatical errors) I think some story elements could have been fleshed out, and for a vore story the vore was all at the beginning and fairly brief so I imagine I disappointed those fans. but I don't think it's bad for a shorter one.

Reviewer: Gigatennisstar Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2018 10:41 AM Title: Chapter 1: Swallowed Whole

NotSirk speaks the truth! He is a hack! I'm only on chapter three and I already love this story!

Seriously well done mate! The characters are so real and belieavable, the tension is strong and I LOVE this girls parents, expertly written black people with so much love and caring. You truly lied when you said it wasn't not your typical vore story. Does it have vore? Yes. Is it the conflict of the story? Yes. Is it typical? Far from it. I thought I knew what was going to happen (accidentally saw the first parts of chapter 3) but you've thrown me for a loop! I don't know what to expect now! Obviously there is some dramatic irony at play that we know she and the princess "seem" to be one and the same now which is why her mouth is moving without her but dude! I can't wait to see what happens next! Well done sir, or should i say Sirk!

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04 2018 3:20 PM Title: Chapter 3: Guess Who

I still think those elfs are pretentious. They deserve to be eaten ;)

Seems like somebody is turning into a small elf. So weird. Shouldn't she become enourmous and rampage that other dimension into Oblivion, as is the common theme on this site?

And luckily it seems that my lazy review and a call out have brought some reviews at last!

Thank you for writing!

Author's Response:

Thank you for the comment and the shoutout! This story isn't as popular as some of my others but I'm glad people enjoyed it. 

Reviewer: MadHatter Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2018 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 1: Swallowed Whole

I dunno but I have a strange feeling I know where this story is headed... And look forward to it when it happens lol

 

Author's Response:

Where's it headed? Please clue me in I'm dying to know!

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2018 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 1: Swallowed Whole

I'm usually not too sold on vore stories, even if I may dable in it from time to time... But I must say that I really like what you're doing here. 

Delilah comes out as both fragile and to be pitied, and twisted and unlikeable, and Elixsana is really a kind and yet terribly naive character, both powerful but utterly unable to understand what Delilah was feeling, thus demonstrating a lack of empathy. 

And as chapter 2 explains the title of the story, it really add some kind of cosmic karma to Delilah's actions, but also hint -to me- at some darker undertone from Elixsana part. Once she'll be a giantess among her kind (if it isn't Delilah who will shrink to the elf's size, of course), who says she won't end being a tyrant or something of the like.

Once more, great story and I can't wait to read more !

Author's Response:

Well without playing my hand more than I already have I will say you're very astute in your analysis so far. Is that the right word? "astute"? Let me check......*googling*.......yes astute! Especially your breakdown of Delilah and the princess. It's hard to make Delilah seem smpathetic here considering what she's done while also making Elixsana nice but also an antagonist. I think it's moderately successful, maybe it needs a little more nuance? 

I'm not gonna say much about what's happening. This is a short story so it should be even more clear soon, but like....stop being so smart. Okay? We cool on that?...Okay. 

Thanks for the comment!