Reviewer: Barachiel Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2020 4:13 AM Title: Giant Pixie

While I’m not usually a fan of seeing a tiny get abused or belittled just because they can, I really enjoyed this chapter. I don’t know if it was the way she manipulated his head with her finger or how she was so dismissive of what he had to say, but I prefer her to Kiri easily.

Author's Response:

Plus, Bushwack does have a reason: she specifically doesn't like him.  The fact that she can just because she's bigger than someone for once might be going to her head, though.

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2020 7:54 AM Title: Sinister Plots

Holding out hope for a happy ending for our protagonist and his new human friends.

Author's Response:

What about his non-human friends?  Don't they deserve a happy ending, too?

Reviewer: Shaker Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12 2020 12:41 PM Title: Hollow Victory

Great chapter! I loved the action feeling of it and fact that our tiny hero managed to achieve his goals, displaying quite a bravery. Female antagonist who catched him was also greatly diplayed, generally while reading this story I really feel how small is our hero and it's great. As in previous review: my favourite story so far.

Also we got some very interesting pieces of world building: elven rulers valuating shrinked humans and also human queen ripping them of their laws, I think that if you would exapnd in future on these plot seeds, it could turn out to some very interesting plot and world history. We also got info of feys known as atomie.

 

I have some, imho interesting idea for a chapter in this story:
- our protagonist is captured/or finds asylum in city (not just a few huts but a real city) of beings as small as him or even smaller (it could happen after our hero shrinking even more but that's not that important).
- he either wants to be saved from this place or wants to lead peaceful life here. In first possible scenario giantesses party comes to save him/or some other giantess comes, maybe even unaware of our hero being there, for example human hating on feys for murdering her shrunken boyfriend/brother/son etc or elf wanting to capture tiny humans. The second variant, I think far more interesting, is Kirinhaluthad manipulating our party to attack and destroy city, maybe knowing that our hero is there or maybe not.
- as this story has strong D&D vibes for me, in D&D quite a lower power spell is enlarge person, making someone two (or if upgraded -three) times bigger. Our giantess party could use this spell amid attack on city, for example seeing that it has some suprisingly powerful magic defences. Seeing the grow inside attacked city would quite epic.
- generally our hero experiences dramatic desctrution of city, especially if Kirinhaluthad  manipulates party to attack town, it would be heart-wrecking for our hero to see his hope for peaceful life and maybe newly made friends literally crushed under feet.

Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you liked it!  I pride myself on being able to give the proper feeling of scale for a shrunken man, particularly around other people.

The story is already outlined, and while it's not rigid it's a firm map for where it's going and don't need further ideas.  I appreciate your interest and enthusiasm, though!

Reviewer: Shaker Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08 2020 8:51 AM Title: Hollow Victory

Another great chapters. Imho chapters with him temporarily shrinking even more are more than welcomed.

Will we see more of Margret? It seems quite strange to me that she is, as Sondra is, on the side of our little hero but doesn't seem to care in most situations.

I generally love the idea with shooting our hero on the arrow, it's brilliant, but (don't take it as a form of critique, just little suggestion) I think that Sondra and Margret should be a little shocked afterwards about such a riskful idea and maybe in future it could lead to more opposition from their side to such an ideas*

Don't get me wrong, I love these ideas for using our tiny hero.

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Margret got sidelined for the past couple chapters since the focus was more on building a bond with Sondra and trying to see what he could do for her, and vice versa.  She'll be back in the future.

Them trying to keep him from getting launched wouldn't have gone well.  They'd talk about him being useless again, and Kiri would break the tie and tell her to go ahead for whatever reason she latches on to, but really because she thinks it's funny.  I just skipped an argument that'd result in spinning the story's wheels for a couple pages and result in the same thing that happened.

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2020 3:31 PM Title: Helping Out

Wow, he still didn't tell on Kirinhalut. I would have cracked under the pressure and told on her already by now I think.

I hope Sondra can begin something against Kirin, but that is probably a futile thought.

Thank you for writing and until next time!

Author's Response:

Don't underestimate the powers of demons, in terms of suggesting and otherwise.

And thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Shaker Signed [Report This]
Date: May 30 2020 12:54 AM Title: Getting Rest

Hello! I instantly warn that thic will be a long one, but I think this is already visible.

Generally, great story. I love fantasy, especially D&D like party scenarios. The idea behind this story is brilliant. Being unwillingly bonded with pact which gives tormentor absolute power over you is truly nightmarish scenario. I really like Kirinhalut's ideas for utilizing this power :) So since chapter one I was thrilled while reading this stoey. I know that it may be not really popular because of fantasy theme, but it still could improve over time so don't give up ur rush this one. I like the rescure party and different personalities of giantesses there and their relations.

I'm really thrilled to see what Kirinhaluthad planned for tiny, but I hope especially for one thing: more shrinking. Our protagonist is already very small but from present one inch, that is 2.5 cm, he could shrink to something like 0.5 cm (0.2 inch). Being over four times smaller would mean:
- that Bush will become gargantuan giantess, shaking ground with her steps from our hero perspective and able to mistakenly step on him
- communication with the rest of party will become definetly more hard. He will be much easier to not be seen, so even without Kirinhaluthad  actions he will be at larger risk of different dangerous unaware scenarios. At a closer look he still will be visible and recognizable, but his speech will be unheard. So either some kind of magic will be used by Sora for communication or Bush will have to act as intermediary.
- if already steps taken by giantesses were lound and earth-shaking, after becoming over 60 times their previous weight from our hero perspective, each step will be now tremendous explosion of earthquake, creating dangerous shockwaves of wind and dust and shrapnel. I'm especially looking at careless elf, who could enfulge hero in disastrous eartquake, or maybe elf-quakes is a better therm? She could just place her foot next to ouer hero and by frantic taping of big toe alone shake ground for our tiny hero. Though I'm not really looking for scenario wih our hero being trapped in shoe: it's a really popular theme recently in different stories.  Also their speech will be very defeaning to our hero, hell, their breaths could form from enough distance disastrous winds.

But that above is just my theory. Generally I would love to see:
- this story going long, it has great potential for many different scenarios and aventures hapenning to our party of giantesses. They could ecounter insect swarm, evil witch, evil real giantess, dragon, all sorts of dangerous encounter scenarios very dangerous for our tiny hero. Relations between characters could develop in intereting ways, maybe elf could change her mind about tiny? Or we could know why she is so reluctant toward him ,even if burden of taking care of him is so little to party.
- I'm cheering for happy ending. I feel that you might have something totally different planned for our hero, but I would just be happy to see happy ending for him after all this torment and dangerous situations. Maybe not happy ending like returing to normal size, but maybe gaining some useful abilities and becoming proper memeber of party? I know this might sound absurd but if he could ragain not size but just strength of original size, he could really be useful. Or maybe Sora could turn him into her familiar, granting him some nice abiities and breaking him from Kirinhaluthad power?
- I like Kirinhaluthad but at one point she could just die or her secret indentity discovered by a party, our hero would then keep continue travelling with party without her? Or maybe she would then fly the party, taking tiny with her, but party will come after her and rescue him?
- Generally I love earthqukes created by mere walking of giantess, tinies experiencing tremendous g-force while being lifted by them, defeaning voices, shadows enfulging tinies in darkness, generally giantess dominating tiny reality by their sheer size alone, keep good job with that :)

 

I know that points above might sound like a "wish fest", but tread them just like suggestions :) I'm eager to see what you will write regardeless of them

Author's Response:

I love it when people are enthusiastic about my work like this!

I always thought that a succubus, if done properly, could be a good psychological villain, and I hope I'm pulling it off.  As a size story, making it so the pact made him physically reliant on her by shrinking him while also giving him unnatural abilities seemed like the natural step.  Admittedly I was put off by the initial tepid reception, but after thinking about it and the work I did setting a foundation I decided to revisit it.

Making him smaller would be fun, but doing it long-term would drastically change the story that I'm telling.  Them being aware of him, though just barely, is a frequent source of conflict, since they have to accomodate him to a certain extent.  His annoying, squeaky voice is a powerful irritant for some of the party members, too, and if they couldn't even hear him that bit of frustration would go away.  Plus, I like writing Bush as a giantess that's relatively easy to interact with, since she hold him like a doll and whatnot.  The multi-size aspect helps keep things interesting for me.  However, this isn't to say he won't be getting smaller at any point, it just won't be a permanent change, I also really like writing from the nano perspective :)

I plan for it to be quite long, so no worries there!  However, I like to keep future plot developments under wraps until they happen, so all I'll say is keep reading.  Unless something comes up that vastly changes my plans, I'm only a quarter of the way through!

Reviewer: toiletplumber Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2019 9:19 AM Title: Hollow Victory

I LOVE tinies being caged and used as jewelry so the first couple of chapters were amazing.  I look forward to seeing how our adventurer interacts with the new adventuring party while also trying to stay out of the succubi's clutches.  

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 28 2018 1:37 PM Title: Demonic Possession

Kirinhalut already abandons her tiny man?  Fulda at least stays with them usually, until death parts them. But hopefully, he will experience some good adventures.

I also like how big and detailed you described Kirinhalut in this chapter, thank you for that.

Also, thanks for writing!

Author's Response:

Fulda's mean, but Kirinhalut is the embodiment of pure evil.  Not exactly the perfect picture of loyalty.  But fortunately for the protagonist, things don't always go her way.

 

Thanks!  I noticed that recently I was starting to lean more toward "well, she's big," and wanted to rectify that with a much longer description of how absolutely gigantic she is for the POV character, and I'm glad it worked.

 

It's a pleasure to write, thanks for reviewing!