Date: July 25 2018 2:57 PM Title: Queen of Battle
I assumed her boot's toe was only an inch or so high; but come to think of it between a thick sole and boot material, I can see her boot's toe section being over 2". Thanks, I have a better visualiztion now that you mentioned 2".
Can't wait to read what she does to her incompetent general(s).
[Report This]Date: July 25 2018 2:21 PM Title: Queen of Battle
I like this empress Fulda. The only mystery is why she even needs an army, you would think every enemy would surrender to her, but oh well bad for them, good for us/Fulda.
And as always, thanks for writing!
Ehhhh my reviews are starting to become a bit bland, I think I need to improve. Are there maybe any things you would like to know from me about your stories? I could add that from now on.
Author's Response:
It would be unbecoming of an empress to fight her own battles, even if she can crush the army underneath her boots she can't be everywhere : )
I know I'm not perfect, and if there's anything you think I can improve I'd love to hear it. Outside of that, stuff like readability, pacing, usefulness of descriptions are all things I want to hear about, even if it's good stuff so I can focus more on it. Absent that you're free to tell me how great I am, too ; )
Date: July 25 2018 11:13 AM Title: Queen of Battle
Very VERY nice story! It reminds me of one I read years ago where a wizard spilled a potion on a Queen whose castle was under attack, she then grew and took on the enemy army.
I am confused about how tall she is, at one point the enemy soldiers are not as high as her little toe; but then she picks up a knight and wraps her fingers around him.
I enjoy you writing style, your straight forward descriptions make your story a pleasure to read.
My only real complaint, and this is just me, that Fulda did not shrink the other three gaurds too. Even without a jar, just to shrink them, tuck them away on her person for latter "punishment-enjoyment". Hopefully she'll have a change of mind about their former allegiance before she leaves the thrown room. ; )
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Oh by the way, I too have a story about a woman, actually a group of independent women, fighting an army. One day I'll post it as it is not yet finished; but it's nothing like your great story.
Author's Response:
I'd be interested in reading that story, it sounds great!
I'm not sure where you got that size reference from, they were consistently about or a little smaller than the toe of her boot, making them about 2" tall relative.
Unfortunately she can't shrink everyone, just people who have particularly raised her ire. If she shrank everyone who annoyed her I would never leave the keyboard :P
I look forward to reading your story when it's posted! And thank you for your kind words, I try to make it as easy to visualize as possible and sometimes worry that I go a bit overboard, but it sounds like I'm right in the sweet spot. Thanks for reading and reviewing!