[Report This]Date: July 01 2018 8:43 AM Title: Chapter Three
Hopefully Melanie isn't quite as cruel to Kimberly, given the latter is much kinder than Scarlet. I do enjoy how Melanie's cruelty tends to be more mental even though she has obvious and insurmountable physical advantages over her captives. She seems unaware of her own mild sociopathy, but in a fascinating way. Even though I prefer gentle themes, Melanie's depth has me hooked, fearful she'll sway toward homicidal, hopeful she'll exhibit hints of conscience, and all the while eagerly awaiting the next chapter to find out what she'll do.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're continuing to enjoy the writing so much~ Thank you for the review! Melanie is certainly fascinating, if nothing else.
[Report This]Date: June 29 2018 10:51 AM Title: Chapter One
You are the best :)
Author's Response:
I've actually checked, and you are the best.
[Report This]Date: June 29 2018 10:23 AM Title: Chapter One
This is the cutest thing ever!!! I love this kind of character, she's so cute but creepy in a hot way... The kind of girl I'd melt at. I'm the kind of girl who'd probably stutter and be frozen and all flushy at being called cute. I love this idea because it's so flexible you could take any girl anyone suggests.
I do wish there was a bit of a speed up to her actually doing things to the girls, but her power high descriptions are both relatable and adorable~ I can't wait to see more!
Author's Response:
Melanie is amazing, and she's creepy in a lot of ways, not just the hot ones. She's shamelessly my exact kind of fantasy girl, for the most part.
Thank you for your patience~ I promise this slow start will payoff going forward. I feel that with these types of stories, with Melanie's kind of character, developing bonds with the cast and taking time to digest Melanie's personality is crucial. The fear and passion get stronger when it's involving characters you care about. Thank you for review, I promise things get even more exciting soon~
[Report This]Date: June 29 2018 8:15 AM Title: Chapter One
Skilled writing, interesting plot, characters with personality, inherent conflict. You've got a winner with this story. I love the depth of Melanie's character and can't wait to read more.
Also, if you have any other writing on other sites you'd like to share, I'd be interested in reading!
Author's Response:
What a fantastic review. You're way too nice! I'm very happy to hear that people are appreciating Melanie. I'm proud of her.
I don't actually have a lot of writing elsewhere. I mostly write privately but I do have a couple stories that I might possibly post here. It means a lot to know that you really enjoy my writing, it encourages me to open up and post publicly more often!
Date: June 29 2018 8:13 AM Title: Chapter Two
I meant *fair game btw lol
[Report This]Date: June 28 2018 10:51 PM Title: Chapter Two
I'm loving this story!
Author's Response:
I'm loving this review! Thank you thank you.
Date: June 28 2018 10:12 PM Title: Chapter Two
Man I loved loved loved this chapter too!! Really loved the difference in character of Melanie and how she confidently and cruelly dominated the shrunken Scarlett but was timid and overly excited when she shrunk Adrian. Not entirely sure what you meant in your response to my first review but I’m really really looking forward to seeing Melanie torment and be cruel to some of her toys (which I’m assuming she’s mostly gonna be careful with Adrian for the most part but I’m sure the others are Dark game 😉). Really really love this story so far and hope it goes on for many chapters to be honest!
Author's Response:
Mhmm, Melanie is fun to explore. Making her interactions so different depending on who she's with allows for all sorts of fun parts of her archetype to shine. Thank you again for the review~
Date: June 28 2018 10:01 PM Title: Chapter Two
Impressive start... Really well written. I'm looking forward to the next chapter...
Author's Response:
Impressive review... Really nice and makes me feel good.
Thank you for reading~ I hope you like chapter three as well!
Date: June 25 2018 9:07 PM Title: Chapter One
Man, it’s been a bit since I’ve read a story on here where I can’t wait to read the next chapter so much!! Hope Melanie has a dark side deep within...would be interesting to see her start to take a liking to Adrian as her favorite and start realizing she doesn’t need the others and starts disposing of them, maybe even shrinking more women to torment. Either way, I loved this first chapter!
Author's Response:
You'll be surprised to hear that my plans for Melanie include her assessing herself and making ammends to those she's hurt. That happens in chapter three, and that's followed by 10k words of insightful therapry.
I'm happy to hear you're invested in the story so far! It inspires me to keep writing~
[Report This]Date: June 25 2018 5:47 PM Title: Chapter One
I'm very much looking forward to more of this girl.
Author's Response:
As am I. It's very fun to write her so far and to discover what she'll do next. Thank you for the comment~