Date: July 01 2020 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 6 The Return Home - Jane
This is hands down one of the best stories I have read
[Report This]Date: June 18 2019 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 6 The Return Home - Jane
Whew! It’s been a while, but I’m glad to finally catch up on this brilliant story.
I love how Jane let the tinies decide if they wanted to belong with her or her mother. I would easily choose Miss Becker. She is still my favorite character.
I also enjoy how creative you are with how Jane and Miss Becker treat their slaves. The punishments are interesting and I feel like the guy just watching from a distance as these 2 ladies have their way with the men.
I really hope the Miss Becker chapter comes out soon. It might even be my favorite chapter. Just like how Jane kept her friend in her panties, I also would like to see Miss Becker keep someone down the front of her panties for the night. Maybe, all tied up spread eagle as his body is exposed to her flesh.
This is still my favorite story of yours and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Date: April 30 2019 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 6 The Return Home - Jane
This is the best story i ever read on this site! Please dont stop writing it ;-;
Date: October 17 2018 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Really liking this so far on chapter 2 but really good keep it up
[Report This]Date: October 15 2018 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 6 The Return Home - Jane
Hi again, im following your story, and i love it, please continue, he he, if is posible more feet and micro size in some chapter and turn him in an object maybe flip flops or something, sorry my native idiom is spanish, you are in my favourites <3
[Report This]Date: October 14 2018 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
I'm really loving the dominant story and dehumanization of the main charecter. For example your line about shrinking away his anatomy is such a next level mindfuck and I love it. Absolute immaculization. As long as she doesn't kill him, I'm loving the be my slave and you'll learn to love it dynamic. I hope you write more and more frequently. This is a story I keep looking forward to and I certainly anticipate the domination as dehumanization, especially at the feet of a woman
[Report This]Date: October 14 2018 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Responding to the reviewer below, who said, ''I hoped for some different kind of story...with a all loving realtionship and no domination": What a petty excuse to give a story you admittedly liked a half-star rating. Totally unjustified, and ignoring the fact that it's more than possible to show a loving gf/bf connection based on power dynamics (reflected in the vast difference in physical size between the lovers) and the fact that domination needs submission in order to be what it is (and that often in writing stories like that you can represent this D/s relationship in a playful, loving, and realistic way without compromising the violent and domineering side of things in the least) -- ignoring all that, you have to let the author finish the story before expressing your disappointment with the path it's taking.
For what it's worth, I'm loving this story. Only suggestion I'd make, from an author's perspective, would be (in your next story) to consider taking a more detached authorial role. Third person, no present tense except in dialogue, and finding a way to develop and deepen your characters through dialogue and actions (in fetish stories I think plot's far less important than character, and that's natural enough).
Keep going though. I loved your ideas in Rachelle's Sweat Pads, too. Really top notch stuff.
Author's Response:
Thank you, and I mean that in several ways. Your kind defense of my characters relationships is very well taken. I try not to front load my stories with too much ground work; rather I prefer to add and build them up as the stories progress.
As to the perspective, that is something I have to work through. One problem I often have reading the works of others, whom I applaude, are the names or descriptions of characters. It's hard to submerse myself into a story when the name of the first person is contantly mentioned and not my name. That's why my stories often do not contain the name of the first person. It's also odd when the super hot girl has the same name as a family member or close friend, uh ewe... That said, sometimes having a vague description leaves a lot open to the imaginations of the various readers.
I like the present tense for ongoing stories; but I do have some that are definitely past tense. Third person, well there is one story I am writing that I consider my opus, so to speak. It's about a group of female soldiers in a future war with some rather unique, shall we say weapons, and very derriere oriented. It's present tense but definitely third person. Maybe oneday I'll finish writing it out and possibly post it.
Glad you enjoyed "Rachelle's Sweat Pads", hardly anybody read it.
Date: October 13 2018 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Hi, very good history, i am waiting for more, thanks :).
Date: September 10 2018 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 4 Anything Her Heart Desires
I can’t wait for another installments. I really like this story
[Report This]Date: July 25 2018 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 4 Anything Her Heart Desires
Haha! Finally a Dark Writer story that fits my taste. While your other stories seemed interesting, this is the only one that seemed to have themes that I enjoy.
It's funny becuase I see you review many of the stories that I usually read, so I was waiting for a story similar to that and here we go. This was the one, even though it took me a while to realize that you wrote this story. Ok, back to this story.
Love this relationship between Jane and....hang on. This guy doesn't have a name and I didn't even notice! This is going to be hard to reference him. I hope he is the only guy so I can just use pronouns.
Speaking of this relationship. I love how Jane was wrestling him and putting him in headlocks and stuff. I watch videos of headscissors and mixed wrestling all the time so I loved that you included this bit. Sometimes, I see women use some sexy headscissors where instead of the guy's neck being between her thighs, it's the guy's head stuck in between, and if his face is facing her crotch, that's one headscissors lock I wouldn't mind being stuck in. My favorite parts during the wrestling is when the woman would humiliate the guy by sitting on his face and forcing him to lick her. The guy is too exhausted to fight back. I love it.
In this scene, Jane seems really big compared to him. I mean, how does he fit in her shirt? Girl's shirts are usually snug tight so this guy must have been wrapped up into her really well. That was hot though. Being trapped against her boobs as her shirt traps him. Just curious, are you a fan of bondage? Such as when a girl ties up a guy and takes advantage of him? I have seen a seen where a guy is trapped in her shirt, so this is awesome.
One thing that annoys me a lot in this story is how often they call him "dumbass." It gets overused way too much, especially since I just binge read all 4 chapters at once. At least change up the nicknames. I like the introduction of pet, and sometimes when Miss Becker calls him it. Kinda funny, but likewise, if used too often, that too could become stale quickly.
Speaking of Miss Becker, she is my favorite character in this story, believe it or not. I get tired of authors shoving parents to the side so the "kids" have their fun, but when a parent, especially the mom shows up, it gets really interesting! Of course I don't mean the guy's mom. But including the girl's mom is always a bonus in my book.
I love how Miss Becker wants to make him please her and I am so anxious for that to happen. I see her as this kinky single mom who has been waiting for months for some pleasure and now she will likely get some. I enjoyed the tease where Miss Becker thought of putting her thong in his mouth for the night. That would be awesome! In addition, I relished the moment when Miss Becker sat on his face. She knows how to have fun with him. While Jane seems like the playful, flirty type, Miss Becker definately knows what she wants after her years of experience and I can easily see her as the sexual one. I can imagine her bed with four posts on the corners where she has straps hooked on each corner ready for a victim to tie each limb to each post. Hmm.
But I think you already can guess what I have in mind if you are familiar with my reviews. I would love to see Miss Becker shrink him to 2-3 inches and tie him to the inside of the front of her panties so when she puts them on, he gets trapped facing her crotch. Then she can put on some tight yoga pants or leggings or maybe tight jeans to further restrain him. I can see her rubbing the front of her panties with her fingers as she is pressing him further into her, but the panties don't let him get swallowed up. Her pussy lips surround him and try to devour him, but they can only kiss him as his body is all tied up.
I am excited for the future of this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom, thanks for the review.
There is a reason this guy doesn't have a name, or much of a description. It's so any guy reading this can put himself in the character's place. When I read stories here I often copy/download and read them from MicrosoftWord. I do so for three reasons. 1st, to read later at my convenience. 2nd, to adjust the text height to a larger, more easily read font size. 3rd, and this one pertains to what you wrote, because some of the best stories I've read here have female protagonists with the same names as female relatives and friends; so I do a search/replace and change the names to somebody that's not closely related to me. By not having a name, the guy in this story "might" be more relatable.
So you like Miss Becker and wrestling, well you may be in for a treat in the next chapter. Let's just say Miss Becker gets her own. You'll have to wait till I finish writing it to find out what that means; but your own comments hint strongly at it.
I knida like the name "dumbass" for him. For variety, I guess he can have different names for his different incarnations. Spoiler alert, during much of the next chapter he will in fact be performing as Jane's dumbass again; so be patient for any possible name change till the following chapter.
Do I like bondage? Hmmm, isn't that what a tiny being held in the gripping hand of a giantess is? Ha Haaa! {Nelson laugh}
I am of average height, but the inside the t-shirt idea is very losely based on what a girl I use to know would do. We'll leave it at that. ; P
As to sex in this story, I'm writing this more as a long term relationship between the characters rather than a quicky one nighter. I want the tiny to be well established as Jane's and Miss Becker's "full-time what ever they say", not just an occasional sex toy.
Can Miss Becker shrink him and stick him in her panty, yes, but don't forget she just wore him as an actual panty, albeit on top of the pair she already has on. On this subject, I think you may like my other story, "French Weave", once I add the next chapter.
I really appreciate your detailed feedback. I hope I can make this story interesting for you and others. Thanks Tom!
Date: July 24 2018 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Really good stuff, especially the nano stuff and the dehumanisation. If he could be reduced to nano size or transformed into an object without one of them knowing, that opens up some interesting unaware options too.
Date: July 16 2018 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
I really like this story and the degrading and humiliation of the protagonist, especially at Jane's feet. I only wish you would update more frequently.
Author's Response:
We've had a series of storms lately. I've spent most of my Summer picking up tree limbs knocked down in the yard, not a lot of time left over for writing ;P I do agree though, nothing more anoying that cliff hangers, which is not my intent, my apologies on that count.
Date: July 10 2018 1:20 PM Title: Chapter 3 Ambrosia
For some reason I thought "diapers" was plural-only - til :D
Good news and good new chapter!
Date: July 10 2018 5:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Love it so far. Jane has complete control over him and forces him to do more humiliating tasks which is amazing!
I'm hopeful that there would be sexual content in the story but there are glimpses and it's rated X so I think my hope will come true a86;a039;
Please continue, this is beautiful
Date: July 10 2018 4:13 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
Good so far. I'm enjoying the humiliation and brainwashing elements, especially now we're on to having him clean between their toes with his tongue etc. I'd be interested to see just how small they can make him, too.
Date: July 08 2018 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
i agree LOVE 1 ft. love two gentle women but not baby part....i do hope they both have big breasts n perhaps demand some attn lol
Author's Response:
Kindly see previous responses concerning baby treatment. As to Jane and her mother having "big breasts", I'm sorry to disappoint you. Jane and her mother Miss Becker each have HUGE Breasts! And they're wonderous to behold ; )
Date: July 08 2018 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
So far I really like the story, except the treating him like a baby thing. I hope as the story continues it'll drive away from that stuff, but overall I think the themes that are in this story are really great. One of my favorites in awhile.
Author's Response:
The begining of the next chapter adddresses some rather basic issues facing Jane and her mother I think you might be happy with relating to your concerns. I have a shrunk down to baby sized story; but this is not it.
Date: July 08 2018 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 2 Winning The Lottery
Other than diapers, this story looks very, very promising!
Author's Response:
When you read the begining of the next chapter the diaper (singular, not plural) will make a lot of common sense to everyone. It's not the direction the story is going.
[Report This]Date: July 08 2018 1:12 AM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
This is great! It's nice to see a story about a tomgirl where it's just a normal, strong, playful girl. It's a little heavy on dialogue and exposition, but that's hardly a crime. Can't wait to see how else she plays with his size.
Date: July 02 2018 2:51 PM Title: Chapter 1 Pit Of Destiny
This is a really great start. I like how Jane progressively takes ownership of her little friend. Hoping to see her being even more protective of him.