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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 28 2018 5:56 AM Title: Chapter 1

Barry is obviously a back-stabbing, brown-nosing, corporate-climbing little gossip all too eager to get ahead.

Author's Response:

Never trust a Barry. They may seem nice but Their. Pure. Evil

Reviewer: vxrx11758 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 26 2018 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

Don't use "You" for the reader.  That's so unprofessional and almost lazy.  Invent a character for "You".



Author's Response:

Thank you but this was orignanlly from a madlib i made. Ment for a single reader to place themself in.

 

If it was an actual story i made, then i wouldnt be using you.

 

Thank you for the input though

 

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