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Reviewer: master369 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 02 2018 1:42 AM Title: Chapter 1

Great start!  I would love to see more since there are a few different ways this could go.

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2018 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 1

I absolutely love this concept.  Terrific idea.

Why is it the women do not know they are wearing, or using transformed people?  Is it part of the plot twist?  It seems it might be nice if they knew; but then again would any of the women ever return their products so our protagonist can be transformed and his story continued?

Only two criticisms, if you don't mind.  The million dollars seems like it would attrack a lot more than five other men and a lot of national attention.  Perhaps a five hundred dollars with a thousand dollars if he's not transformed would be a bit more noncontroversal.

My second criticism is just grammar usage and spelling mistakes.

Hopefully you'll let us know what life is like for this guy as Angela's shoes with pletny of details about her foot.  Keep up the great work.

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