Date: December 08 2017 5:36 PM Title: Preparation
Okay so, clearly someone was busy writing FOUR CHAPTERS!!!! in the time it took me to write one! I don't feel upstaged....Anyway I gots reading to do.
Date: December 08 2017 2:28 PM Title: Back and forth
estoy deseando ver como sera la relacion entre Shannon y Alejandro,Un abrazo y enhorabuena
Author's Response:
Gracias ! Le relacion sera muy complicada, porque los dos ne se entendien por el momento. Una es una potente mujer cuande el otro es una persona discapacitada que intente descubrir su posicion en el mundo. Ninguno puedo comprender como el otro ve el mundo.
Disculpas me por mi pobre espanol :)
Date: December 08 2017 10:22 AM Title: Panic stricken
You weren't kidding, I just refreshed and chapter 4 was already out.
Author's Response:
Haha, yeah, it was almost over, really.
[Report This]Date: December 08 2017 5:58 AM Title: So good to see you !
We usually imagine the biggies of this world being strong in every way; physically powerful but also confident. Honestly, it makes them seem a little dense to me, but I really have a hard time liking any of them or their attitudes.
Shannon is no exception, it could be argued that Alejandro’s mom was trying to “set them up” but the fact that Shannon concluded that so quickly speaks to the vanity of the biggies of this realm.
Still, she has an inner softness, room for some doubts and even fears. She’s very accessible in that way. Also, the way she stood up for Alejandro in the face of his mother’s doubts, that was most admirable, even empathetic.
“Minor By The Sea” seems like an odd name for a hotel in a town with only one minor. Alejandro can say it’s named after him. Heehee.
I really like the way the characters relate to eachother. Old friends meeting up after a long time apart. Lindsay, not remembering any of them, must be feeling a little left out. But there is this lingering sense of waiting for Alejandro, like he is some undeclared guest of honor, a nice, subtle, believable tension hangs in the air of the last scene. Very nice stuff.
Author's Response:
well, Alejandro isn't Old Creek first minor. The hotel's story will be revealed later on on the story. I can tell you it's a sad one. Next chapter is full on 'Rando and the fourth has the two point of views.
I can thanks NotSirk for his inspiring setting. Since the major (eh) mysteries and rules of this setting are established in his story, I can go wild suite easely. And writing makes waitig for his next chapter easier ^^
Date: December 08 2017 12:57 AM Title: So good to see you !
Very nice story. I'm deeply interested to see how Alejandro and Shannon develops. We have Shannon, who seems like the type that would be unaware of the deeper emotional range minors can have. I hope to see some discovery, conflict, but most of all, some gentle giantess stuff.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. Chapter 3 will come out this evening, perhaps with the fourth, and our two main characters will begin their interactions. So far, inspiration is here, which is great ! The proper giantess stuff will truly begin in Chapter 4.
[Report This]Date: December 07 2017 6:58 PM Title: Preparation
Well, with both Alejandro and Shannon demanding to have their story told, I can understand you relenting. I promise to not think less of you. Just don’t think of it as a surrender...we can pretend it was all your idea (wink.)
Shannon seems interesting, someone with obvious assets that hide her depths. That makes for a fascinating character.
I like how she’s ,in many ways, the opposite of of Alejandro. He has aspects that mark him as damaged, to some people’s minds undesirable or at least less appealing. He’s not happy or cuddly or any of the standard things tinies are expected to be. Where she is someone people would find obviously appealing.
The fact that he has forgotten her name, but not her part in the incident that scarred him so gave this introduction a level of tension.
I did like the way Alejandro relates to his sister. It adds an element of sadness that she never got to meet the lighter version of him. But he still indulges her and treats her nice, but he does it as a thoughtful and deliberate person. So an argument could be made that his affection has greater value than that of a typical minor who just loves everyone.
Thanks for taking up the virtual pen again and giving us another view of a super cool character.
Peace
pix
Author's Response:
Haha, yeah, we'll say it was my idea *wink*.
Glad you're liking Shannon. Honestly, she's the hardest character to write in this story, mainly because I'm rooting for Alejandro, I ant to depict how MAJOR are so often oblivious of minor's feeling, but in the sme time, I want Shannon to be a sympathetic character. I hope I'll have succeeded by chapter 2 to at least give readers a solid foundation to care about her. It's a spoiler, but she may be endgame for our tiny hero... if she manages to be good at the little "dance" they'll have.
As for Lindsey, yeah, I'm happy with the way she came out. Somewhat oblivious, but also candid and good-hearted.
I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters :) !