Just wanted to reiterate how much I loved the story on here too. I too felt there were too many characters at once but it was a fun story nonetheless so it does kind of work I guess. I don't mind that they weren't named, so long as we can tell each one apart, They really did feel like schoolgirls and I loved the 'atmosphere' you created. Would be nice to explore the girls more invidually I guess but it also works fine as a one-shot.

Good story. I really like how you described your summary. It was what attracted me to this story.

I liked the concept, a little guy being a toy for a queen and her girls. However, it felt like the girls and their queen. Hisandra didn't seem to have much time with Milo as I wished.

Also, I think there may have been too many girls to appreciate them. I think if we knew a little more about the girls, it would be a little more special. Otherwise, it's just a bunch of strange pretty girls toying with him. Unless that's what you wanted us to feel.

I do like the idea of being a pet for a queen. Many guys want to be with this woman, but this little guy is the one chosen and she uses him as she likes. Loved Hisandra's confidence and wanted to see more.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment. And I wanted there to be a lot of girls, and creating 12 different names/personalities/descriptions is too exhaustive, so if there was a sort of 'kaleidoscope' of body parts I thought it would work better.