So, uh....is Spooky gonna write the Dr Strange / Thor fist fight?

No, wait...Spooky is saying he finds my reviews predicable?  Well!  I could say the same thing about...

THA-WUP! (nice pix hits mean pix across the nose with a rolled up newspaper)

Hey!  Waht da fuh...

FUMP

No!  That’s Izzy’s line.

Hey, I did predict....

FUH-WAP!

Stop it!  You’re lucky I let you say anything at about this chapter.  I’m not gonna let you start some stoopid..thing... with Spooky in another author’s story review...go ahead...say your bit...

All right, there was one really obvious thing missing.  One thing that would have been in the for front of my mind if I were Izzy.  One question I would have absolutely HAD to ask Sabrina... “it’s pretty clear that bitch Brenda (insert Izzy-ism here)-ed up my memory...but I have some idea what happened...if I hadn’t...would you have told me?”   That’s something that would have really stuck in my craw...caw?  Whatever that’s called. 

I really like the more thoughtful Izzy in this chapter, so I picture her going over the repercussions of the answer.  Is she forcing Sabrina to choose between her best friend Mable (the bitch) and her?  Can she really fault her for not tell the truth and being loyal and protective of her friend (like she failed to be for her?)  Should she see it as being protective or just more biggie condescension if she said she wouldn’t?  Or would it really be a case of those biggies being like they’ve all been so far; not really concerned with what happens to her because she’s only a tiny?

And partial amnesia sux too.

That gaping hole put aside for the moment...I really, really loved this chapter.  Izzy is an engaging character even when she’s doing mundane stuff and failing at her main task.  Though her apparent inability to research or plan is starting to wear on me as someone who is rooting for her.  How hard is it to web search “best spicy rib sauce?”  Or is that more restricted information?

I really wish she would try harder with her quips.  Just because someone is a biggie doesn’t mean she should let them get the last word all the time.  I mean, like when Gloria just had to try an pull her teeth with that “word to the wise” comment, she should have said something to the tune of “Thanks for reminding me that you have all the power and I don’t...I had forgotten that...” Because having goals and dreams shouldn’t be something she lets anyone use against her.  If all it is is a way for her lose what tiny power she has....well...internet universiy is size neutral and the diploma is just as good. 

And since my opinion of ...uh...bounding?  No, that means jumping...right?  My opinion of the bounded stuff has come up, I really have to observe;  Let’s see...a complete loss of dignity and privacy and intelligence and  you become a programmable drone...oh and amnesia and a splitting hang over.. why exactly would she ever want anything to do with this bounded nonsense again?  I mean, it’s a super power for the scummy biggies...what on earth would it hold for her?  Sure, worthless sniveler Peter would be all about the “feels good” part.  But Izzy?  All a relationship with a biggie has to offer her is something akin to a heroin addiction.  And all the tinies are dummies.  She should take a clue from those MGTOW (men going their own way) guys and just plan on a work from home job...hmmm...minors going their own way???

She really shouldn’t be afraid of finding some option other than being some big moron’s purse puppy.  She should realize she’s seeking to define herself in terms of her relationship with what ever big idiot she winds up...she shouldn’t be afraid of being alone...she’s smart and she should be happy with herself.  Then nobody can control or manipulate her. 

Are you done, mean pix?

Well, I wanted to bring up the TV show as propaganda angle....

You’re done!  My turn.

Okay, this was an absolutely excellent chapter!  The characters were consistent and interesting.  It was basically Izzy shopping and failing at her main task...and I couldn’t stop reading if I had wanted to. 

The dialogue was snappy and rich and layered. 

I didn’t even find Sabrina vomitous ...most of the time.  I don’t like her or her mom, but I kinda sorta disliked them less this chapter. 

Yeah, dad let me down...I hope it’s not going to be his one character beat... something’s going on..but..but...Gloria.  He was still worthy of Izzy’s forgiveness and affection.  Though, I’m getting a little bit tired of him surprising Izzy with news of how things are going and are going to go for her.  And her letting him get away with it!  She really should be asking more questions and at least making her desires known...and arguing for them when some stupid biggie authority figure poo poos them.

But I am so completely engaged with Izzy and her journey.  You have really created a character who I love reading.  I love when she tries, I love when she fails and keeps her chin up and I love when she succeeds. 

I kinda love the cop scene and kinda hate Izzy fitting the stereo type.  But, it’s that kind of world.

Great work...you...you...mad genius!

Just to be absolutely clear...Izzy can have Mr Cutty Cut Cuts...please.  I really wanna stay on her good side.  Jeez!  Oh, and help yourself to Izzy-ism while you’re at it. 

As far as taking a break goes...I say go for it.  Just let Izzy sit in the back of your brain...planning...plotting ...scheming... just her ...and Mr Cutty Cut Cuts ... there...in your brain ... getting bored.  It should work out fine. 

Peace

pix

Lol. I could've predicted Pix's reaction to bonding. Interestingly, he did say one thing which resonated with me. I won't mention it specifically, unless I use it for inspiriation, in which case I'll toss some credit his way. :)

For the most part, however, I've thoroughly enjoyed the way you've presented bonding. It's only a small part of the story, so it should be palatable to most readers, regardless of whether or not they share Pix's inclinations.

I also like the Sabby/Izzy dynamic better in this story than in your previous one. Here we see a more submissive Sabby which I find refreshing.

I caution you about taking a break. You seem to be on a role with the chapters. I'm terrible because I never finish my free stories nowadays. My advice would be to keep striking while the iron is hot. If I ever get on a roll again, I'd like to keep writing feverishly until the fingertips bleed, because the hardest part for me is escaping the inertia of idleness. You've achieved escape velocity with these rapid chapters so don't lose it! Keep going until the world caves in around you! :)

Just to be clear, I didn’t bring up “laser blades” because it was dismissive, (which it was, kinda) I brought them up because hyper sharp, vibratory blades are next gen tech and would be readily available in common tool kits (and are something we might see soon) and laser blades are up there with gravitic manipulation so a longer ways off.  I write in both the sci fi and fantasy genres and love techinical stuff.  And it looked like Izzy did too.  Only point I was trying to make.

It would be pretty lame of me to issue a critique out of spite.  I’m pretty sure most readers here would quickly dismiss everything I said afterwards ...and I’d deserve it.

My reviews come from the assumption that lots of us are here for the same reason.  We want to be better writers and creators.  I would love to get an unflinching, detailed review of my work, so I can grow and learn as a writer.  No such luck so far, though I did get a complaint about my formatting.  But I really do want my feedback to be useful.  Though I do try to avoid being too mean and having a long stream of negativity, still, I can get pretty snarky.  Since you like it so much I’ll give you some “deleted scenes” as a blue ray extra.
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Peter has gone from timid and well...kinda sweet to full on simpering and vile.  A psychic intrusion and empathic attack makes you “real.”  Really?  How much biggie propaganda did he have to swallow to puke that up?  What other wisdom might he have to share?  Maybe next he can explain to us how war is peace, freedom is slavery and ignorance is strength.  Conformist Maggot.  I really hope he is not right...cuz that would just be ...well, the character has been fully revealed, I guess there’s no point in reading further.  I guess she wasn’t that interesting after all.
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I hate things like binding for two reasons.  (Spooky never hears this when I say it, he thinks theres two type of readers, those who hate binding and those who don’t.) 
As a reader of size fiction, I’m already being expected to invest in a character that is almost completely lacking agency within their story.  But when you add something like binding to the mix, then everything that’s left to like about the character, their brains, their ferocity, their stubbornness, their mystique, their courage, their world view, their attitude, their rebelliousness...in short...their character...now has an off switch.  So why would I bother to invest in a character when everything I like about them can just go away at any moment, especially when it most likely to be needed?  (I.E. when it’s most likely to be interesting.)  It’s like someone tells you Thor is gonna fight Dr Strange...but their powers won’t be working?  Uh...why am I supposed to care?  (Actually that still would be interesting, because I care about the characters and well, Steve is a martial artist who has gone hand to hand with thousand year old battle entities...and Thor is a thousand year old battle entity...okay...enough geek cred...)

As a reader/writer, I also like to see the antagonist do their job and be interesting too.  Lex Luthor takes on Superman with his brain...what a challenge...only...now he just has a magic button and he can make Supes...well...just not care whatever villainy he might perform... it seems to work on me too.  I guess Lex wins...hoo hum.
No conflict, no work on the antagonist’s part, no chance for the antagonist to grow or change or...well..do anything but non-conflict with the character we were supposed to care about.  Yeah...kinda hard to get into that.
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And I gotta say, I’m going to be terribly disappointed if dad doesn’t see the lingering effects on Izzy and know what has happened.  He’s supposed to be close to her, isn’t he?  He’s supposed to know her.  If all of a sudden she’s this giggly, pointless thing and it passes right by his attention...well, no consequences in biggie-ville I guess.   And it makes him pretty pointless too, except as yet another ultra passive enabler of the biggies.

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Not everything makes the cut.  I really don’t want to just grind someone’s work down as much as I can.  But as a creator I am desperate to know what people like and what they don’t like.  I think once you’re trying to expand past the “tiny in a cage” story, you are trying to elevate the genre.  To make it better for all of us.  And detailed, reviews help make that happen.

Back to your story, the bit about binding does make me wonder.  How come there are no biggies questioning the whole bound thing?   No one is asking, “is this right?”  They’re supposed to be smart, that usually goes hand in hand with questioning the world around you.  No one seems to be asking if this is good for the tiny.  I mean, if it’s so awesome why doesn’t Izzy’s dad just bind her all the damn time?  And why isn’t he looking for someone to get bound with?

So thanks for listening to my babbling...and thanks for creating and contributing.  And I will certainly give you and Izzy another chapter’s worth of my attention.

Peace

pix


PS, don’t bother with ST TNG...DS9 is lots better.

For me, it's better than "Small" that I didn't get the ending.

World building is nice.

Majors are paternal (or maternal) toward minors like A Major Teenager calling an older minor man by first name.Soft power.

Cant wait to know abt the Dark Age!!!!!!!!!!!!! 

My stories tend to involve varying degrees of suggestive mind manipulation, and obviously I love giantesses, so right off the bat I'm a fan of the tropes you've chosen. Though I don't watch much harem anime anymore (seen way too many), I do enjoy the characters you've introduced thus far and their competitive affection for Izzy. Part of me is hoping Sabby wins, but would rather see a different, less predictable outcome. Who knows, perhaps Izzy will remain a 'bond virgin' throughout the story, but that wouldn't be very satisfying. Regardless, don't worry about pleasing me (I'm sure you don't, lol), just write what you enjoy and I'll definitely follow along. I like how you've left just enough mystery to leave the reader craving for the next chapter (e.g., what do tiers mean, why do MAJORs want to bond, etc.).

I'm pretty sure this chapter raised more questions than it answered, at least for me, but still pretty well written.

Wish I had girls fawning over me like they did over Izzy. :/

I loved this Part. Im loving all the characters and wondering whats the diffrent tiers. Is bonding like the thing in spookeytacos story youtube eli's channel? How the major is able to command the ninor how to feel and stuff.

Ive been loving this story and cant wait to see more.

Izzy is who I'd want to be like if this soceity existed. Realistically I'd me more of a timid Peter.

Regardless, great story so far! Big up yourself for finding the motivation to write and updating, and I shall await more.

     Okay, now I LOVE Izzy.
     She can out gumption Scarlet O’Hara! 

     Of course, part of gumption is common sense.  She comes off as overconfident that verges on stupid.  She seems to be hyper aware of the capabilities of majors then forgets what they can do when she’s imagining ways to deal with them.
     Now, I really gotta ask a question writer to writer...if mace doesn’t work on the big dummies why do they make it?  Are they imaging roving bands of wild minors assaulting majors so they need some otherwise harmless chemical to defend themselves?  And why doesn’t Izzy know it’s useless?  The baton sounds equally pointless.
    However, (here’s my solution, be ready with my no-prize) if these big jerks are so blasted superior then it’s possible that items like mono-molecular blades or vibratory blades are avaliable.  Or even vibratory mono-molecular blades.  Izzy would be on one of those like a major on an un-bonded minor.  And it’s used to cut metal, so she’d want one for her tool kit anyway. 
     Of course, she’s probably just playing at being dumb.  If she let it be known that she had an item that could hurt one of these oversized monkeys she’d be risking having it taken from her.  So maybe she put the mace and baton “out there” to see if they got taken.  And if they did, she’d still have “Mr Cutty Cut Cuts.” 
     And the beauty of it is, you’ve already set it up!  Something like that would cut through a major’s achilles tendon with no problem.

    I don’t like how all the biggies think they are entitled to her.  Well, I do like that, as a story element.  I’m with Izzy, I just don’t like them. 
     I’d would be interesting to see Izzy stop being a blunt instrument with this Sabrina.  Maybe say things to her like “I know it’s hard for someone as entitled as you to empathize with someone like me, but I don’t like to be carried.”  Though I can see why she wouldn’t bother.  She seems to enjoy being disrespectful and inconsiderate.  There are tons of minors being “put in there proper place” all around her and all she can think is that’s good enough for Izzy.  She, like all her kind, seem so caught up in there own superiority,  The can't see that Izzy doesn't have to be superior to be special.  

     Great set up.  Izzy has really got a long road ahead of her.  I have to ask why she’s not just attending college via the internet though?  If all she wants is the knowledge.  The big dummies around her clearly aren’t capable of being anything but a distraction. 

     I love that her dad was willing to spend the day with her.  He is a wonderful (literally) supporting characher.  He just breaths empathy.  He still seem to be caught up in the idea that Izzy needs to bod...at leat that's what I got from his conversation with Sabrina's mom.  But she might just be able to teach him a thing or two.

     As far as bonding...what if Izzy really is right?  What if it is something the biggies need more?  The biggies have enough advantages. 

     Great character.  I’m hooked.  Thanks for sharing this.

Peace

pix

The bonding/not bonding begins, Izzy might be the most dangerous tiny yet.