[Report This]Date: February 21 2018 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
I found this story last night and I was hooked from the beginning. I really like Izzy's personality and I'm very courious about the minors history Izzy is trying to uncover.
In general characters interactions are very funny I laughed a lot.
And I know is not the most important aspect of the story but damn I'm rooting for Izzy/Mei.
Author's Response:
Well thanks for youe dedication! I do like writing humor and I'm glad it's hitting with someone. The history will be revealed in slow chunks. It's more of a background detail to Izzellah's story. A side quest if you will.
You're not the first to be on the Mei x Izzy ship. I'm very curious if that's popular. Mei's supposed to be seen as rather manipulative towards Izzy.
[Report This]Date: February 21 2018 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
Okay, at first I was reeeally disappointed in my favorite character. Izzy has struggled and fought for every bit of dignity she can get. Then she lets, no insists, that she be a prize in some biggie nonsense. I really thought that it was cheap and even though Izzy’s thoughtless overconfidence and impulsiveness are well established, I though she was getting better. This wasn’t just a back slide, this was her throwing out all she’d learned so far AND becoming worse than a minor stereotype. This was her being worse than she was at the beginning of the story.
And for what? The prize that she’s wagering her dignity on... well...she’s never even tried just saying “all of you just leave me alone.”
Part of me is going to stick with these opinions. Part of me is very disappointed to see Izzy performing in a way that seems obtuse. It’s as though she hasn’t learned anything in the story we’ve read so far. Like we’ve had 9 chapters of character non-development.
But part of me can completely see it. Izzy want’s to earn some respect. She want’s to gamble and she want’s to win. She has a point, that the biggies all underestimate her and even disrespect her and that may certainly give her an edge.
So, even though I thought the worst as first, Izzy turning this into a “put up or shut up” moment was endearing. I was really with her. It may have disastrous consequences, but it was such a cool moment.
In some ways she’s still being too passive. She didn’t do any of the logical stuff like demand a “no mental powers usage” rule or any other common sense measure. Character’s who don’t think are a chore to read, but when you think that’s what you’re seeing and yet they surprise you that’s pure gold.
Truth to tell, I would see Izzy saying “since you guys all think you’re twice as good as me, you’re going to wait here 30 minutes while I hide and you’re going to have 15 minutes to find me.” Then, since they haven’t made any rules, she gets out of sight, goes to her Mustang and drives until she runs out of gas...ha ha...screw you stoopid biggies. Izzy wins!
Really, Izzy is risking so much, her integrity and respect can’t be recovered when they’re gone, but she seems to feel it’s worth it. If she loses, she’s just another tiny who get’s used by a biggie in one of these stories, worse, because she set herself up. If she wins though, it’s not much of prize, but it could mean a little more respect from these stuck up losers...wait...it could mean that they would learn something.... it could result in them growing in empathy and understanding... ... ...
Naaaahhhh...
Fingers crossed for the tiny heroine....
Great chapter. Great stakes. Great set up. Great suspense that will last until the next chapter. Or longer.
Thanks for keeping at it...and your art is just cool.
Peace
pix
Author's Response:
I can admit the premise of the game and Izzellah going along with it is a little contrived. My argument would be they were going to fight over her anyway. Much like Alejandro's childhood experience from Kurogane's work, it's just kind of what MAJORS do. One day Sabrina would have a black eye and just stop hanging around when Mei passed by for example. At least this way Izzellah feels she's involved. It's on the extreme edge of her character, probably a significant flaw she should work on. She has nothing to prove!.....but yeah you called me out on it. (darn)
Also there's still a whole week to go!....And if it hasn't been obvious from the pacing I don't really skip time too much. Seven days over 9 chapters! (Actually that might not be accurate. I'll have to check now......you get it.) Izzy still has her weekend and another week to go! Plenty of time for shit to go down! Although part of me wonders if I should speed things up a bit? Who knows? Surely we don't need to see what Izzy's up to every day!
[Report This]Date: February 21 2018 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
Here, a review by the laziest reviewer ever. It took me like a day to submit it.
Seems like some people are really fighting over Izzellah. And a pity that it isn't a physical fight, although Mei is up to something. It also seems as if two of the Majors at least have a very strong advantage over the other two. I wonder what will happen next.
Thank you for writing, and unitl next time!
BTW is Mei based/supposed to be Mei from Overwatch?
Author's Response:
A review is always appreciated even if it's seen as late somehow. Don't fret.
There may still be a physical aspect to this game. I mean we are dealing with MAJORS here. What happens if two find Izzy at the same time? Only one can win after all.......
Thanks for the comment and no Mei isn't based on Mei from Overwatch. It's just a nice name and I like illiteration. I mean my main character's named Izzellah Ignacia Ivory. I'd do it for all my characters if I didn't think it was ridiculous. You can pretend she looks like Mei until I draw her though!
[Report This]Date: February 20 2018 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
Yay glad to see more of Izzy! really love seeing these characters.
back a while ago you mentioned going back to your older stories and I gotta say I loved 'Trials'. I know Its been a long time since that story but that was one of my favorite stories from my early years on this site. I would love to see such a good story come back.
Author's Response:
A "Trials" fan! I can't believe it! That story has a special place in my heart. My first story on this site, it inspired a lot of the things I love today! It deserves a look over. I'm pretty sure some of those characters and ideas will show up again somehow.
Date: February 20 2018 2:20 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
Such a tease ! Izzy has a very packed week ahead of herself... but if I'm not wrong, she'll have the week-end for herself, which could be great ! I also like the art, it has to be said ! I hope your computer get fixed soon, so we can have more of your work to peruse !
Author's Response:
Sorry for the short chapter but I was under a bit of a time constraint! Don't worry Izzy has a film to watch, a person to find, a match to see, and a game to win! Lots for her to do.
Thanks for the kind words on the art. I am eternally grateful! I know my art's not the worst in the world but I know it's far from great as well. I can only hope to improve as time goes on.
[Report This]Date: February 20 2018 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game
The game is a foot or under it...never know with these major folks.
Author's Response:
Izzy might find herself under foot if she's not careful!
Date: January 25 2018 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Hey NotSirk, quick question... Is this picture from your tumblr how you imagine Mei ? Because if so, I can understand why Izzy would be drooling all over her despite herself, haha !
https://sirksome.tumblr.com/post/169087906414/welovemusculargirls-isnt-she-gorgeous
Author's Response:
I didn't think of it at the time, but yeah that's probably close to what Mei looks like. That's most likely a slightly above average look and fitness level of most MAJORS.
Date: January 17 2018 11:48 PM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Hey NotSirk, quick question. For some times now, I've an in head the idea of a wiki for MAJOR/Minor and I wanted to now if you would give it a go, if I ever manage to bother my lazy ass to work on it, templates and all. Also, I've an idea about some stories set in the distant past (long before the Dark Age), would you greenlight them by giving me the usual size of MAJORS around 2500 BC and 1000 A.C. ?
[Report This]Date: January 17 2018 11:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Reading through this story because you've dropped some reviews for me and I happen to be enjoying it so far! When I finish and have some time I'll offer you a more substantial review, but this is quite good man!
Author's Response:
Hey thanks! I'm enjoying your story as well!
[Report This]Date: January 11 2018 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 9: minor/Perspective=MAJOR/competition
Uhh, is this the start of a school wide fight over Izellah?
Also, thanks for writing! I really enjoy this story, despite being even to lazy to write regular reviews.
Author's Response:
School wide!....no. This is just a dumb fight between overly competitive girls. And don't fret I'm often too lazy to write or respond to comments as you've seen. That's worse.
Date: January 06 2018 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 9: minor/Perspective=MAJOR/competition
Interesting... this MAJOR violence seems like a great topic to pursue. Kinda sucks that Izellah didn't get her info, I think I was just as curious as she was! Anyways, another great chapter, I look forward to the next.
Author's Response:
The aggression of MAJORS is a "majo" theme of this story and a significant plot point. Glad you're enjoying the story, I'm taking a break right now to work on other stuff I've already ranted about but MAJOR/minor will return!
Date: January 06 2018 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Awesome end to this part of the story! You and Kurogane have done some great work! Also, I remember reading the New World stuff with Jack, Tyler, and especially Greg and Ramona! Would love to see it continue!
Author's Response:
Someone remember New World! My heart! Unfortunately it seems interest has died on those old stories, but hey at least you commented on it! I still might look into them though. Maybe test a re upload of a chapter? Who knows *shrug*
[Report This]Date: January 06 2018 7:32 AM Title: Chapter 9: minor/Perspective=MAJOR/competition
Izzy is learning more on the great war which is good and Sabrina admitting her feelings has to be a weight off of her shoulders possibly Izzy's too.
Curious where the battle royal goes but looking forward to seeing how you play it.
Author's Response:
I should've responded to these awhile ago......
Well with Izzy involved it won't be a traditional "battle" like the MAJORS would want. That wouldn't end well for little miss Ivory.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2018 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective
It really felt good to see a character doing research in one of these stories. So many characters just wander into the world like ...like...”Hi. I saw the sign out front. The one that said Serial Killer’s Convention. I just thought I’d come in here and see what you folks are all about.”
Knowledge is power and it’s great to see Izzy getting some. Yes, you did a good job of showing how frustrating the internet can be, but she’s actually trying to overcome the conspiracy of silence. At some point she might look some stupid biggies in the eyes and say “those who don’t learn from the past are condemned to repeat it. So thanks for making sure this generation knows nothing about the dark age...be looking forward to see how that turns out.”
I gotta say, the Sabby saving kids thing, it seems a little like you’re trying to force us to like her. She’s really not that great, pretty good for a biggie of this world, but not that great. The tier 3 is at least trying, but they still all suck. Except for dad.
Great to see Izzy and dad having a moment. The have such great chemistry. Even if dad comes off as a dummy lots of the time. Izzy should definitely get her mom's gun.
The halfsie’s mom...hahahahahaha...that was awesome. Panic attack!
Thank you so much for keeping at Izzy’s story. Great stuff.
Peace and Happy New Year
pix
Author's Response:
Well I just thought it was about time Izzellah tried to be involved in her own agency. I think it's just a result of the slower paced nature of my story. It's only eight chapters deep and it' barely been a week. Now that Izzy at least has an idea (even based off secondhand information) I imagins she'll be looking at NAJORS very differently.
I mean...I'm not gonna lie. I do want people to like Sabrina. In my mind she's Izzellah's first real friend good or bad. She still has a long way to go and I think I've been pretty good in showing Izzellah has little romantic interest in Sabrina. She's more like an annoying little sister *laughs at own inside joke* . The whole saving thing was just a fun opportunity to show MAJOR strength and describe what happened. It may also setup some conflict for Izzy later. It may seem like it sometimes but Izzy's not the only minor in town and displays of strength and protection really get the little buggers going! Sabrina's a hot ticket item. Oh! And will be seeing trash tier 3 again.
Ignacio's an idiot. He was absent the day MAJORS got their superior minds! I mean!....uuuhhhhh dammit! ...He's trying his best *shrugs*....Seriously his own minor daughter has more power in the house than he does and is arguably smarter in most situations from like a common sense standpoint at least. Pray he doesn't die in a polar bear related accident. MAJORS do dumb things to show off.
Did I mention Ignacio's irresponsible? Without people like Linda in this world minors would be extinct.
Happy however many days into the new year you are when you read this! That goes for everyone reading this response! I see you all! ö_ö
Date: January 01 2018 7:53 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Well, a special story with Alejandro and Lindsey in High School (probably at Winton) can only happen after at least one year has passed for Izzy so, you know what to do to read it : write MOAR content ! :p
Joke aside, i'll already try to finish Dance with Fire before writing anything else ^^
[Report This]Date: December 31 2017 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective
I had a feeling about the dark times being like a GTSwburg story but the fact he was honest with her makes me a little happier about it. Also Sabby has turned into Powergirl?
Author's Response:
GTSwburg. That's one I haven't heard in a while. I should read some of those.......Oh! Ummm I notice the comment on Sabrina but no one's mentioned the soldier leveling a building with one punch or a guy fighting a polar bear! Seriously though, Sabby will probably add some context to that moment if Izzellah brings it up.......MAJORS are dangerous.
Author's Response:
GTSwburg. That's one I haven't heard in a while. I should read some of those.......Oh! Ummm I notice the comment on Sabrina but no one's mentioned the soldier leveling a building with one punch or a guy fighting a polar bear! Seriously though, Sabby will probably add some context to that moment if Izzellah brings it up.......MAJORS are dangerous.
[Report This]Date: December 31 2017 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective
Another awesome chapter ! I can't wait to meet Randalf and his wife, it would be kind of cool to have their vision of how an actual functional couple works between MAJORS and minors. Plus he looks like an awesome character and so does his wife. A MAJOR actually supporting her minor's mate aspirations would be quite interesting, and her experience could make for a great addition. And her age also means that she's bound to know so much about history, first hand... I want to learn more about her !
That musclehead and his girlfriend are sooo annoying... I love it ! It was a damn good piece of propaganda for MAJORS, but hey, at least it's mostly harmless for minors, so... Also, Damn, Sabrina is a lot more stronger than I thought she was. It makes me a litte afraid of what Shannon could do... Well, snaping an arm as if it was nothing is probably already some crazy shit, considering how tough MAJORS are. great use of this character ^^
Poor Ignacio can't catch a breath. Just talking about the Dark Age really hurt him, he clearly care about his daughter. He may not be the most reliable guy out there, but I don't think that Izzy would trade him for any other parent... and not Lisa's mom, that's for sure. For fuck sake, what's the deal with the Watermeine, they're clearly overprotective. threatening to call the cops on Iggy ? That's not how you win Izzy's affection, Madame !
But damn it, now I want to see how Alejandro and Lindsey would fare at Winton High ! I may do a special on that, one day. Operative word being may :p
PS : I shouldn't tell you that, but you may want to follow's Dinner-Kun Deviantart gallery in the coming days/weeks :p
Author's Response:
Randalf and Summer will probably show up briefly since Izzellah made it one of her goals, but they probably won't be focused on. I like adding characters to make the world feel lived in but I also just try to focus on a core few to not overwhelm people. I wouldn't blame people for forgetting most of the names. Only the important ones matter
MAJORS are pretty strong. There's a reason for that you may be able to infer. That being said adrenaline is still a thing. I doubt Sabrina could mimic that feat of strength at will. Shannon?! Who knows? She's terrifying!
Linda Watermiene is just an average concerned MAJOR parent. She's done nothing wrong. Ignacio is a negligent father who should be reported to minor protection services!
Thanks for the comment. Alejandro and Lindsey at school? I'd read it!
Date: December 17 2017 12:09 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
Oh, he wouldn't be really upet. More like a "Oh come on!" moment since he said that he hadn't read SHannon's bio because her products were not targeting minors. Expect some kind of "She spent a whle year in a High School full of MAJORS, shes bound to have learnt some useless things" snarky moments ^^.
Date: December 12 2017 11:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
lovely crossover
Author's Response:
Hey! Thanks! Lovely comment!
Date: December 11 2017 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise
I'll put it here, if only to force peoples to read your story, gnyhéhéhé...
Alejandro : 1m83 / 6f
Alaric : 3m15 / 10,3f (should reach 3m25 /10,7f)
Lindsey : 2m45 / 8f (should reach 2m80 / 9,2f)
Ofelia : 2m75 / 9f
Jules : 3m05 / 10f
Andrew : 3m / 9,8f
Derek : 3m07 / 10,1f (should reach 3m20 / 10,5f)
Alexis : 3m07 / 10,1f
Shannon : 4m45 / 14,6f (should reach up to 5m20 / 17,1f, because she has been diagnosed with gigantism !)