Date: July 25 2017 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Both this story and "Erica's House" may inspire me to write my own story in this interesting universe.
Author's Response:
I can say I'd been interested in another perspective on the "Erica's House" universe. It belongs to realRS though. Who knows what that one's into? I'd give it a try....because obviously I'm giving it a try..like right now.....Thanks. For. The. Comment.....I wonder if this needs to become a "series" now?
[Report This]Date: July 25 2017 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Another strong outing. Very nice seeing Izzy coping with the loss of control of her life and possessions. Gloria being a 'tough love' type o mother makes her strong maternal figure that I don't see too often in stories. I like the fact that despite Sabrina is still being her innocent-self for the most part, even the minor things she said can be interpreted as threatening to Izzy like when Gloria told Sabrina to practice her violin playing. The care you've put into your story is on clear display.
Author's Response:
I read this comment and was like "Pfft, prepare to be surprised." There's a bit of a turn coming and you're kinda making me want to post the next chapter now, but NO! I gotta keep to the schedule! Just uhhhhh?.....Sabrina's not as innocent as you think. Is that cryptic enough? I don't know. Thanks for your continued interest in my literary farce. Next chapter Thursday.
Date: July 25 2017 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Oh my god, this is fantastic.
Love chapter 2 where Izzy deals with her change in status pre-shrink. Great dynamics.
Her friends debating their merits as owners? Fantastic.
The mother sipping coffee while giving her the talk? Such a great detail, wonderful scene.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Y'know it occurs to me that this story might be "inspired" by (straight up plagiaerising) The themes of a short story you wrote called. "Bigger Better Sister" That was not intentional. I definetly wasn't thinking about that when I started writing this but........I also have NO defense. I expect my legal papers in the mail soon. Thanks for another review. There will be more on Thursday.
Date: July 25 2017 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
I haven't read it yet but I'm so excited!
Author's Response:
Hey! I'm excited for you to read it! I reread a lot of Erica's House to write this. Especially the first few chapters. I hope I grasped the concept of the shrinking properly. I may have taken a few liberties with it, forgive me! Thanks for the comment!
Date: July 24 2017 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
What about the teachers? Maybe a redhead named Mrs. Nelson? How about izzy answering adults with Yes Ma'am?
Author's Response:
Look I can't answer all your questions...or make your dreams come true....or give spoiling story details! Maybe some of this will happen. I mean probably that "Yes Ma'am stuff because it's really only a matter of time before Izzellah get's knocked down to size. But we'll see what happens. Thsnks for the comment!
Date: July 22 2017 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 2: Last Moments
off to a great start, mate. can't wait to see how the story goes on
Author's Response:
Thank you very much!
Date: July 22 2017 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 2: Last Moments
Comment I will. Loved chapter 2. Nice job establishing characters. Love Gloria, she seems to know what she wants to do and no one should argue or disobey her. She will bring order to things. Loved when she slammed her fist. A sign of things to come? I am sure Sabrina will annoy izzy to no end. She will take care of her but izzy will not get everything she wants. Rachel seems hot. I don't think izzy wants to be owned by her. i am sure izzy will not like Sabrina's friends. Will Izzy get held by any teachers? Maybe a redhead named Mrs. Nelson. That would be awesome. Will she answer adults with Yes Ma'am?
Loving the story,
Diesel
Author's Response:
AAAAAAAHHHHH!!!! You just called attention to a huge mistake I made! Chapter 2 and already messing up. Typical MrS-...I mean NotSirk. Don't know what the mistake is? Well too bad I already fixed it. So you'll just have to wonder forever. Ironically this whole story in outlined to prevent this garbage from happening.
Soooooo...your comment let's see. Yeah Gloria's all business. She has her own small arc she'll go through probably or something. No Izzellah probably won't like Sabrina's bratty, grubby, little friends with their loud pop music, and their fidget spinners, and whatever dumb preteens are into. Facebook?...Do preteens Facebook? Yeah! Their dumb Facebook, and watching obnoxious Youtubers play their stupid dad dating simulators!...This response was too long. -_- Thanks for the comment.
[Report This]Date: July 20 2017 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
The story is well-written and looks promising so far. Even though it looks like the relationship between Sabina and Izzellah will be the main focus, I'm actually more interested in how her the dynamic with her 'friends' will be post-shrinking, since it's been established that she only hangs around them for their social perks.
Author's Response:
Her friends will return, but maybe not for a while. Thanks for the review.
Date: July 14 2017 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Good start!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: July 14 2017 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
You have established the characters well. Hopefully not too many at a time. Lots of names to remember. In IRS you have a lot to live up to. So far so good.
Author's Response:
Too many characters? Yeah I've made that mistake before. Maybe a better writer could get to the meat of this story sandwich without the extra but I have a habit of needing to establish things. Don't worry too much about remembering names. Not to get too spoilery but this is a story about TWO people really. Can you guess who they are? Thanks for the comment.