[Report This]Date: September 28 2017 4:02 PM Title: Chapter 14: Crush
Poor Izzy but I am glad she has a friend in Brenda at least. Also curious where Mei fits into all this.
Author's Response:
Hmmmm, yes. Where does Mei fit into all this? That contact information might be valuable in the future, or y'know maybe it won't be and I'll forget all about it.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2017 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 14: Crush
Please let Izzellah make it. Her options suck, but being with her sister should be nice enough.
Author's Response:
We'll see how things end for Izzy. Keep your spirits up.
Date: September 28 2017 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 14: Crush
I wonder whom the sneaker belongs to? It'd be hilarious if it was Peter.
Author's Response:
Uh..........I can niether confirm nor deny the owner of said sneaker. Also I think you and Peter have two drastically different opinions on humor.
Date: September 25 2017 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 13: Fracture
Love the new clothes store. Will Mrs. Nelson put izzy back together. Will she babysit her?
Author's Response:
Probably not friend. Keep reading thought. Mrs. Nelson's pretty important to the overall story by this point.
Date: September 22 2017 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Still wondering if izzy runs away to be captured by Mrs. Nelson or Miss Applegate.
Date: September 22 2017 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 12: Ivory vs Ivory
Possibly your best chapter yet. Loved izzys getting clean in the shower. Sabrina lifting her by her hair was an awesome display of power.
Gloria being answered with Yes Ma'am shows her ultimate power.
Love seeing Mrs. Nelson. She rules.
Will Miss Applegate handle either of the little people in her class? Love to see the little boy in her hands.
A fantastic chapter,
Diesel
[Report This]Date: September 21 2017 6:11 PM Title: Chapter 13: Fracture
Nice to see it took a possibly serious injury to break through to Sab, great chapter and looking forward to how it ends up.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your supportive comments. I hope you enjoy how this all turns out.
Date: September 21 2017 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 13: Fracture
Ouch, hope Izzy's alright good thing her mother's a doctor otherwise she'd be kind of screwed well she still may be considering her mother's buzzed and all that.
Anyway, great chapter I like the idea of sleepover so Izzy can get to know all of Sabrina's friends. Who knows it might also change Izzy's mind on running away in the end. Actually, now that, I think can she really run away with being chipped and her location is known at all times?
Author's Response:
The sleepover is something that will happen eventually. There is a plan for Izzy where being chipped comes into play and a long term solution to that issue. Don't worry things will work out.
Date: September 18 2017 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Loved Mrs. Nelson. This is good.
Author's Response:
It was all for YOU diesel! It was ALL for you!!........Well not really but like I said changing a name is easy. I might change it again on a whim because I'm very likely the most animated author on this site! Don't quote me on that. I don't need that following me.
Date: September 18 2017 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 10: Back to School (In a sock)
Mrs. Nelson. Wow.
Date: September 18 2017 8:59 AM Title: Chapter 9: One Week's Worth
Love, love, love, Dr. Samantha Winton.
[Report This]Date: September 15 2017 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 12: Ivory vs Ivory
This was a really fun chapter, even if it wasn't quite as introspective as the previous one.
I'm still sad that the story is about to end though. Assuming the protagonists next will end up finding a compromise and making up, it would be nice to follow their lives and the evolution of their relationship for a longer time.
Author's Response:
Yes it would be very nice to do all those things I agree. :)
[Report This]Date: September 14 2017 2:44 PM Title: Chapter 12: Ivory vs Ivory
One of the best stories I've had the pleasure of reading this year.
Author's Response:
Hey thank's Adam X.
Date: September 14 2017 8:33 AM Title: Chapter 12: Ivory vs Ivory
Izzy's delusions continue to be a highlight of this masterpiece of a story. Here's to hoping Sabrina can work on her violent tendencies, and learn a better way to resolve a conflict.
I have a question is Izzy already chipped? I ask because I didn't see it mentioned this chapter at all.
Author's Response:
Chipped? No not in this chapter. That'll be changing sooner rather than later though.
Non violent conflict resolution just gets you flipped off by a fat jerk with a broken nose! Sooooo yeah let's hope she learns.
[Report This]Date: September 08 2017 2:12 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Since you can't reply to your own reviews to my knowledge, no worries on Sab's style. I greatly commend that she is able to showcase such a range of emotions so easily.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I'll still take any criticisms you have though. It helps me improve.
Date: September 07 2017 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Jesus this motherfucker has gotten nuts. Great story, going to some crazy heights i didn't see coming. I think you've taken a lot of elements that exist as subtext in stories like Erica's House and made explicit, while not going to that crazy unbelievable fantasy place that most tiny slave stories exist in where everyone is a sociopath.
Loved the therapy session, could have seen it go on much longer. Loved that the therapist called both Sab and Izzy on their bs, and would be very interested to know what relationship compromise she envisions them getting to.
Would be very interested to read or co-write a conversation between Izzy and Erica. Not sure if it would end in mutual admiration or war.
Author's Response:
A Mutual War of Admiration? Don't know what that is but it would make a good title to something. It's good to get a comment from you! Glad you're enjoying the story. I really like the next chapter for dumb reasons and can't wait to upload it.
I'd also be down to write or collab on a scene with the two main characters of our stories although I don't know what ot be about. The Izzellah presented right now in this story would flip Erica the bird and be on her way while Sabrina just shrugged and walked off with her because Izzy's too small to really go anywhere. I do imagine when they meet up Izzellah will dislike her. As you can see that totalitarian shit doesn't fly with her. Anyway depending on when you're reading this I've fallen asleep so I'll contact you or have already contacted you or vice versa something.
Date: September 07 2017 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
This was a good chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing this story go on! But I do have one issue, I didn't like that you didn't really go into what happens in Sabby's mouth. Is there going to be a scene later that really details what happens to both Izzy and Sabby when the former is in the mouth of the later?
Author's Response:
Hmm. Not really the criticism I was expecting but, probably not for the rest of this story. I was actually afraid of just rehashing what happened in Sabrina's chapter honestly. It's bad writing to constantly repeat yourself and I try to be wary of that. I'll remember this though and try to add more detail in such scenarios that may return in the future. Thank you for your input.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2017 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Sabrina's acting like a jerk to her sister. But Izzy doesn't have anything close to a better option. Here's to them becoming the best of friends... or maybe more than that. Sabrina just needs to settle down a little, and Izzy needs to realize that the world is full of Braxtons.
Author's Response:
The world is full of Braxtons!! Oh damn that's a lesson Izzy needs to learn! Way to call it like you see it! We'll hope for the best. Both girls are getting to a turning point. Hopefully it doesn't lead straight off a cliff. Thank you Bob Charlie! Do you know you have two first names? That's pretty cool.
Date: September 07 2017 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Ugh... I find it hard to believe that Sabrina hasn't figured out how to win her sister over yet.. instead she goes straight for "punishment" and "anger"
It SERIOUSLY bugs me how she acts to her sister man.. I just can't get over that she is that callous to her even after hearing her feelings out loud. Now Izzy hasn't fully voiced how she truly feels yet i'm aware but.. it just really bugs me still how Sabrina is acting towards her.
If she legitamately tried to be nice instead of a bitch, she would be just fine...
Author's Response:
Oh crap! I've angered MadHatter!! Shit! Ummmmm.....look just trust me on this. This is going somewhere! I promise! They'll both be in different places by the end. People are stubborn and lessons are hard to learn. Don't be mad uh...MadHatter. There's still light on the horizon...and kickball. I wonder what that means? Thank you for voicing your opinion.
Date: September 07 2017 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
So Sabrina is finally unhinged. I just hope she doesn't hurt Izzy too badly, that things will all work out between the sisters and that Sabrina comes back to her senses.
With the way their conversation went, I do wonder what the history is between Gloria and Mrs. Nelson?
Great work once again.
Author's Response:
I hope for all those things too!....but ummm y'know what never mind. Best to keep hope alive! I learned that from plaing God of War 3!
Gloria and Eddie! Ivory and Nelson. Well I guess it would be Santiago and Nelson. That's a trade secret enjoy that. I could write a whole story on thier history as I imagine it. It wouldn't be a size story though so you'll never see it here. It would be like a bad soap opera with one man caught in the middle. Who is that man? Someone no one ever talks about anymore!
Thanks for the comment.