[Report This]Date: September 03 2022 6:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love this story and I'm glad you're back! I just have one question though: What is Nicole's size? Because it seems pretty inconsistent based on your texts and the GTS convertor on the website.
In Chapter 1, it says that she's 20x the size of the old guy, assuming that the guy is 5 feet tall, that would make her at least 100 feet tall, and the guy 4 inches tall from her perspective.
But then in chapter 6, it says her foot only dwarfed Eclipse by a foot or so, which based on the convertor, only makes her about 50 feet tall, with Eclipse being 8 inches tall from her perspective.
A response would be nice.
Date: May 12 2022 4:54 AM Title: Chapter 8
Como hubiera continuado esta historia? ya que me intriga saber si Clio también de alguna forma se abría convertido en gigante, o un gigante masculino saldría más adelante, además supongamos que el rey tendría un gigante en su poder y lo usa contra Nicole que no puede hacer nada en contra de el, pero luego llega cilp y la salva siendo un completo gigante también, idea muy buena para la trama
[Report This]Date: December 09 2017 11:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice story. Too bad there hasn't been any recent updates.
[Report This]Date: June 24 2017 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 8
I like this story I find it quite cute are you going to add more too it I like to find out because you left us hanging I hope you don't wait to long like so many do' you know forget the about the story.p.s.hope to read more.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I’ll be adding more. Just been busy lately. School is starting so updates might come slower than they used to. Thanks for the support though, I love reading your reviews guys.
Date: June 22 2017 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 8
Another amazing chapter as always X3 I am really loving seeing how there relationship is developing. I'm slightly worried for Clip when Nicole finds out he lied to her but I also can't wait for the big reveal! Keep up the good work my friend!
Author's Response:
I will do as you say, bud. Thanks for the review!
Date: June 19 2017 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 7
Excellent story ... I think that Clip's feelings towards Nicole are true ... You could imagine being so subdued by a being so many times bigger ... you could have some strange feelings ... it's not just lust or love ... a paragraph where she explains that some men have "broken" helps to understand a little more what Clip is feeling ... she is his goddess ... and the best thing is that she is only sixteen ...
The poor man can fall deeply in love and she does not even realize that ...he is a toy for her... which would be an ideal scenario for me ... :-) I love your story!
Author's Response:
Ahh … thanks for telling your thoughts on my work. I really like knowing what you guys think of it. While he is her toy, pet and slave. She treats him with care and a half a thimble of respect. I wish you a good day :)
Date: June 19 2017 2:39 AM Title: Chapter 7
I think this was one of the best chapters so far! I loved the foot worship at the beginning X3 I also can't wait to see Clip tell Nicole about his feelings for her, I think that would be a really emotional scene X3 You're doing an amazing job and I can't wait to see what's next!!
Author's Response:
Whoa, that was so inspirational, bro. Thanks for your unswerving support. I really enjoy reading your feedback pal, have a nice day :)
[Report This]Date: June 18 2017 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 7
Amazing chapter I love it. Clip is such a lucky man. I love how this story is progressing. Can't wait to see Nicole's cruel side unleashed after they get off the mountain.
Author's Response:
Cruel. An adjective I used to describe Nicole at the beginning of the story. There’re no chances of that vanishing, but let’s just wait for the next chapter if she’ll play naughty. You made my afternoon (it’s already afternoon in my country XD) with this review, thanks a giantess ton pal.
Date: June 18 2017 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 7
Its your first story and it's pretty good but the relationship, the feelings feel kinda rushed. I'm not gonna lie, I fell into this trap with my story too. I mean think about it. She's humiliated him, used him for sex, almost killed him several times, etc. Most times she's "saved" him have been times where the only reason his life was in danger was because of her. I think the only REAL time she's saved him was when he almost drowned.
But the other times it was because of some accident caused by her or something along those lines and she "saves" him. And sure she promised to help on his crusade but it wasn't really out of the goodness of her heart or anything, it's to get him to submit to her. Ask yourself, would you fall in love with someone like that? Now if this person was REALLY beautiful like Nichole yeah, you might feel something, but is it love or lust?
Is it natural for some geniune comraderie to form? Yeah to some extent. But love? Its a little soon I think. Especially considering it was only a couple of chapters ago that she was torturing him, making him eat mud off her feet, shoving him in her anus. Lust is a different story. I'll believe that. She's hot, he's a young man. I can see it. Now of course this is all just my opinion, this is your story so write it how you want. I'm just giving my 2 cents. It's still a good story.
Author's Response:
Just the thing I was looking for. I had a feeling it was kind of too soon, or maybe just too soon. But we’ll see, after all, Clip is a mysterious human. Thanks for letting me know what you think, bud. I really appreciate it :)
[Report This]Date: June 14 2017 9:57 PM Title: Chapter 6
Nothing better than close death that brings characters together. The back and forth between the two are really captivating, although Nicole seemed little bit bipolar in this chapter. She asks Clip about his thoughts on giants saying nothing will change between them, then gets a bit irritated because of his response. Also when she jokes about eating Clip and not saving his kingdom and he is rightfully worried about it, she gives HIM and lecture and he has to apologize about killing the mood. Idk, maybe it's giant DNA.
Author's Response:
Actually she just informed him of a new requirement for their deal to remain valid. He has to remain alive. And she was only being a tease when she told him he killed the mood.I don’t think she made him apologize. Nicole’s not that heartless, she really just loves to tease. I really love it when you guys tell me what you think of the story, thanks for the support.
P.S.Nicole suppressed her temper when he told him his opinion. She didn’t expect such a blunt answer XD. Thanks for the review. Your continued support never failed to inspire me.
Date: June 14 2017 1:16 PM Title: Chapter 6
Another amazing chapter! X3 I love how she genuinely feels bad for almost killing him. I am also very excited for the next chapter X3 can't wait for some foot worship! X3 Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
I don’t plan to do it any other way. Thanks for the review ^^
[Report This]Date: June 10 2017 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 5
Phew now things are back on the right track. I'm glad Eclipse wasn't dumb enough to shoot her with the crossbow and he was actually protecting her. (Not that she really needed it but it was a nice gesture). I feel like as long as he behaves she will be doing more teasing him than torturing him which is more ideal for a budding romance lol. At least she realized how brurtal it was to make him lick her dirty feet. Your take on him vomiting up the dirt was one of the most realistic I've ever seen that portrayed by the way. Glad to see she instictivly protected him from the cold water and didn't force him to do something humilitaing to repay her. Both of them are akward around the opposite gender for their own reasons, but it seems like they can at least grow together now unlike when Eclipse was stonewalling her before. I love how she renamed him Clip btw.
The people who wronged Clip in his past are in for a world of hurt.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked his new name. I was actually uncertain with changing his name, but I feel better now that you like it. And she didn’t make Eclipse lick her dirty feet, she used him as a foot rug and made him eat her toe jam. (Which is a lot worse. ^^) Thanks for your continued support, I feel joy well up inside whenever I read your reviews. As for teasing, she’s going to tease him as much as my cliffhangers do. XD
[Report This]Date: June 09 2017 9:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
This story is unfolding nicely :)
Author's Response:
Thanks! I’m glad that you enjoyed it enough to let me know what you think! Have a good day :)
Date: June 09 2017 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 5
Pretty decent chapter! The pair's alternating bouts of gentleness and domination are a good match. You do a nice job of convincing us that Nicole truly does feel above the people, especially those who disobey, and doesn't feel guilt over getting rid of them. It makes for a fun back and forth. I didn't quite buy her emotional turn with the tears so soon after opening up to Clip, but that's more just story taste. Also, some of the dialogue occasionally sounds a bit too modern - the best lines and exchanges in this are definitely the ones where the pseudo-medieval/fantasy speak is in play. Overall though I'm enjoying your work here, keep on.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I don’t make much medieval lines with the two. But I will try it with the knights, if they encounter any :D You made my day with this review!
Date: June 09 2017 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 5
Great story, loving the chemistry between the protagonists. Clip is a savage though. "Don't discomfort yourself, just kill me" was pretty funny imo.
Author's Response:
If you’re hoping for funny comebacks, there’ll be more. Though not so much as to turn this into a comedy XD. Thanks for the review dude!
Date: June 08 2017 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 4
Another amazing chapter X3 I love how she kept going back and forth from wanting to kill him to saving his life, and I can't wait to see what happens with that plot twist at the end! Keep up the good work X3!!
Author's Response:
Awe gee thanks, you’re making me blush XD. Thanks for the review my friend, they always make my day.
[Report This]Date: June 08 2017 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 1
One of the best reads I've had in awhile. I love Nicole's gentle/violent personality makes for great story. Seems like there is a lot of unknowns about Eclipse though. Can't wait to see where this story goes seems like endless possibilities.
Author's Response:
I’m so happy that you liked Nicole’s personalities. Eclipse is indeed a very mysterious person. Thanks for the review, you have no idea how happy you made me.
[Report This]Date: June 06 2017 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 4
Ugh this is going to be a complicated relationship. Eclipse seems like he would rather die than submit and Nicole wants to put him down to a pet or slave. Poor guy is really suffering due to his stubborness, and nicole has a really sort temper
Author's Response:
The reason for this will be explained soon. Thanks for the review. Thanks for the feedback. I always want to know what you guys think.
[Report This]Date: June 06 2017 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 2
I would say you mischaracterize Nicole abit in the first chapter. You make her seem nicer than she actually is when you write about her in exposition. But when you actually write her she's a lot less nice than the exposition would lead readers to believe.
Sure she has her "nice" moments, but they're sprinkled among many more instances of her being evil for no real reason such as when she crushed that shack in the village as an example (noting that if an innocent died inside it, it was justified because they disobeyed her), or when she teased that dried meat guy while forcing him to feed her, or when she forced those knights to clean the blood and guts off her foot. I'd say she's more evil than good, she just does whatever she wants with no consequences, I don't see how she's any different from any other giant in this world unless they're MUCH worse than she is.
So yeah, go back and read that first chapter, there's even a sentence there where you say she hasn't killed anyone her entire life, which is clearly not true. And I think there was another sentence where you say that she only kills bad people? Again, not true, she'll kill innocent people for simply disrespecting her or not following her orders to a T. She's basically looking for any little excuse she can find to justify killing someone and get off on the power trip.
This is actually not a bad story mind you, I like it, believe me. I'm just pointing out inconsistency in your writting to try to make you better. You can't characterize someone one way when they actually aren't like that. It's not huge amount of mischaracterization mind you, just small senteces here and there, especially in the first chapter. Anyway, i'll be keeping my eye on this one, i like what I've read so far.
Author's Response:
Ahhh, thank you. I may have forgotten to clarify stuff. The part where she never killed before, was the innocents in her home village. She would toy with those who disobey her, but she only kills those who threaten her fellow villagers. Outside of her village, she doesn't view humans the same way with her fellow villagers at home. And for her teasing the wagoner, she’s really just a tease. Thanks for pointing out the inconsistencies, I'll remedy that right now. Have a good day :)
Date: June 06 2017 5:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
Definitely a solid start here. The fantasy and more modern elements mix well. Nicole herself is a fun protagonist, and you've struck a nice balance here by making her a controlling giant even while she has a moral system, distorted as it is. I'm hopeful she remains that way without becoming outright-evil. Her subtle interactions with the people are the most interesting so far - dangling, licking them, etc, since it demonstrates her power without resorting to violence.
One thing to work on is keeping everything in a single verb tense. I'd recommend keeping the story in past tense. It tends to jump around, at least in this first chapter, and can be a bit distracting. I really just noticed this because the character and other less-technical elements are working well so far.
Anyway, looking forward to reading the other chapters. Keep it up.
Author's Response:
Yes, I only did that in the first chapter to be able to tell how she grew up in a human village. Sorry if I confused you with that. Thanks for the review :)