Date: February 19 2018 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
We want a next chapter! I can't wait to read it, come on ! A follow up ! Please ?
[Report This]Date: December 13 2017 5:24 PM Title: Chapter 11
Wow! That's how this story end? Sondra forever floating in limbo confused and teased and lost and tiny!. You're horrible! Why did you ask me to read this?! I have to know how this end?! How will Wendy live with herself when this is over! Will Sondra be shrunk forever! I really feel bad she was dealt such horrible cards for basically all her life. Now one unfair curse and she's shrunk with nothing to live for but the girl she loves!........This was a bait and switch! BAIT AND SWITCH!
Author's Response:
Uh...sorry? I thought you'd like it?
Really, I have the next chapter 90 percent...well...80 percent if you count the serious re-edit it needs...maybe 75. Anyway, I'm not done with this story and I do plan to continue. I have one little project I'm going to be posting first. That's gonna be done, finished ...complete.. before I post though. None of this business of ...not doneness....there's enough not doneness going on around here.
Yes, Sondra's plight is a rough one. Tinies have it rough on this site. I'm big on rough. And who say's Wendy will live? Huh?
Really, though, I appreciate you taking the time to give feedback. I enjoy your work a bunch and you commenting means a lot to me.
pix
[Report This]Date: December 13 2017 3:01 PM Title: Chapter 8
Okay! A little over halfway through and I just really want this to be a movie or a comicbook! Wendy's compared to Harry Potter that makes sense because this feels like the start of a good fantasy series! Sondra and Wendy! Fighting demons and ghosts in other dimensions! Wendy can swordfight for fucks sake!
Author's Response:
Wow, I really enjoy such praise. And I love comic books. The Harry Potter is thing is all Sondra being unable to contain her smartassedness....is that a word? Is should be.
Yeah, that's weird. Wendy said she was horrible at swordfighting, but there she is beating her teacher. Huh? How did that happen?
They are great together, for sure and I'm glad you're enjoying their relationship.
Thanks for the review.
pix
[Report This]Date: December 13 2017 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Uuh... I had totally missed this story. A shame, really, because I've read it in one go today, and I really want to learn what will happen next.
I want to know who are those dark wizards or something and what they want. I want to know what will happen to Sondra once she'll gave in and becomesWendy's familiar. I want to know how Wendy will make it work, if she'll regrow her friend/lover/pet one Sondra will be hers body, mind and soul, or if doing so would break the link between witch and familiar... I want to know so many things !
Overall, awesome story, keep going please !
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for commenting. It means a lot.
I'm glad you are inspired to questions. Yes, I have more story to tell and yes I will continue. I'm really glad you're curious about the agents of darkness, cuz the next chapter is about them. You said you are a wanna be fantasy writer, so I'm really pleased you are enjoying this.
Wendy and Sondra's relationship has only begun to be complicated. I hope it's clear how truly deep their feelings are for each other.
Thank you again, coming from an author who's work I enjoy, your comments mean much to me.
pix
[Report This]Date: December 13 2017 7:02 AM Title: Chapter 3
Okay after two chapters I must say I do like these girls. Your descriptions of them are brief but informative. It's something I could learn from because I don't often describe what my characters are wearing for example. I feel it ruins the flow with my writing but it's something I should learn. Also you established both their backstories rather efficiently as well. I don't do that either and that's more of a personal preference thing.
All that being said I am not quite sure where this is going yet. Becky seems slightly suspicious but not necessarily bad and Sondra seems like a normal girl sooo? You didn't tag any size categories so I can't even guess. Going for the slow start? I can respect that but from experience most readers don't have patience for it. Will comment again down the line.
Author's Response:
Hi Sir...uh...NotSirk! Yeah, I'm all about character. I'm glad you're intrigued and I'm really glad you found it in yourself to comment. Believe me I totally need all the motivation I can get.
And descriptions are not something I find really necessary. Letting your audience imagine the characters really is a legitimate technique. But, yeah, I use descriptions. Backstories can be so important, but also, having someone enigmatic can really pull your audience in. God, I can drone on and on about writing all day.
Thanks so much for the feedback.
Peace
pix
Date: December 01 2017 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
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[Report This]Date: July 06 2017 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 11
Well-written story.
Most enjoyable and orignial.
I look forward to its continuation.
Author's Response:
Thank you SafetyPin. I really appreciate you taking the time to comment. I hope I can keep you enjoying.
[Report This]Date: July 06 2017 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 11
Pix, this is quite, quite brilliant. Complex, difficult, moving, bewildering, powerful, and brilliantly written. Up there as one of the best chapters of size fiction I've read, honestly. Completely worth the wait, and now waiting, excitedly, for more.
Author's Response:
Thank you imagin8, your work seems to fit your review a lot too. Thank you for being so kind and I hope you will have more to enjoy soon.
Date: July 06 2017 4:46 PM Title: Chapter 11
YES!!! Still love how you've created this super dynamic between the two girls, almost fencing with one another while attempting to establish more definable boundries. Nice natural sounding dialogue. Great job! Long chapter too, bonus.
Author's Response:
Pardon me wile I blush.
Thanks Duggernaut, this was a tough chapter and I really means a ton that you liked it.
[Report This]Date: April 26 2017 2:01 PM Title: Chapter 10
Aka beerfest247- nice work here this curse really has me biting my nails lol I'm curious to see if Wendy can pull it off. Ugh this is building up to be quite the story I have many questions to what's going to happen in my head haha. I'm hooked and keep up the great work pixl8Ed ^-^
Author's Response:
it was super kind of you to let me know how much you liked my story. I hope you will continue to enjoy it. Thanks a much.
[Report This]Date: April 24 2017 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 10
Really liked the exchange and the clever use of honey. The dynamic between the characters is great as the roles are being established. Very interested to see this continue to evolve. Great job.
Author's Response:
I'm really glad you liked it Duggernaut. Things are complicated for our girls right now and neither is comfortable in their role right now. And yeah, who doesn't like honey?
[Report This]Date: April 08 2017 11:03 AM Title: Chapter 9
Glad to see another great installment. I am enjoying the reluctant dynamic, a novel twist!
Author's Response:
Thanks Duggernaut. Yeah, nice people in a bad situation...can be interesting.
[Report This]Date: April 04 2017 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
Review by beerfest247: pixl8Ed this is really great. I went from reading to the second chapter, then next read I was drawn in reading to the last. I loved being engaged in the characters and situations I haven't felt this good reading in a while. I appreciate your work in this and look forward to seeing more outstanding story telling.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your kind word Beer. It really means a lot that you enjoy my story. I hope you'll like the next chapter just as much.
[Report This]Date: April 02 2017 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 8
Interesting. I like the 'lesser' of two negative outcomes to help Sondra as she is being drawn down into the darkness. The r36 r37 I don't understand at the top of the entry.
Author's Response:
Thank you Duggernaut, it's always a source of pride that an author a brilliant as you likes my work. The "r" thing seems to have been a formatting error. Thanks for spotting it. Now it's fixed.
[Report This]Date: March 25 2017 10:30 AM Title: Chapter 7
I have always found a back story helps me understand the motivations of the character, their decision making progress and how they might react under pressure. Here we get to see sondra's wound and the just how tender it still is. I am curious to see how you deliver the shrink and the rasons behind it.
[Report This]Date: March 09 2017 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 5
Caught me by surpirse. I wasn't sure how you were going to introduce the size disparity, nicely played!
Author's Response:
Thank you Duggernaut. This is really just some sexy world building . The main size content comes later. Hope you will continue to to enjoy.
Date: March 01 2017 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
I like the dialogue, but the formatting is pretty hard to read.
Author's Response:
Hi Shadowrust,
I really appreciat you looking at my story. Sorry it has taken me so long to respond, I'm still kind of figuring out how things work here.
What would you reccomned to fix the issue? I have the same thing going on. I usually just cut and paste and read things on my WP program to get by the formatting issures.
Thanks again for looking at my work and commenting.
[Report This]Date: March 01 2017 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 3
The plot thickens as we get a better glimpse of the characters and potential catastrophe. Knowing the nature of the site, it is always curious how/why it happens. Wendy seems nice...
[Report This]Date: February 27 2017 7:10 AM Title: Chapter 2
Nice job! I for one am a fan of strong character development which sometimes takes me several chapters before the 'action' begins. I like your style of narrative and am curious to see where you eventually take this tale.