Date: December 30 2016 4:42 PM Title: Why me Pt.2
Loving this story. Thank you!!!
Author's Response:
you're very welcome :) thank you for loving it !
Date: December 30 2016 4:20 PM Title: Kidnapped
Also forgot to mention the camera. Is she sending it to someone, a picture of Percy? Hmm.
Speaking of other people. I'm still crossing my fingers if this girl's mom shows up and gets kinky with Percy.
My mind truly is fantasizing right now. Haha!
[Report This]Date: December 30 2016 4:16 PM Title: Why me Pt.2
My favorite chapter so far!
She is talking and has began a game. I think I like this open girl rather than the mysterious one from the beginning.
I love how she used the name idea to show that he means nothing to her. I haven't read the story that stubbornstain has mentioned, but the name idea is soemthing that I have seen a lot of in the past, so I don't think it's based off a story since many sources uses names as a way of identity.
That eraser scene was powerful. The way she erased his name and told him that he didn't exist was fantastic. It defiantly sent the message to him.
Also, I love this game. Now I wish I was captured by her. Jump into her panties or a box full of pins? Easy! I would've jump in her panties even if the other option was to jump into a nice refreshing pool.
Now that she is talking, I also noticed that she is saying this cheerfully and giggling at times. I hope she teases him like this later on and I hope she becomes more controlling soon. Maybe, next time, instead of telling him to jump, she should grab him, maybe tie him up, and then drop him in her panties while telling him that he is her little toy.
So far, the best chapter yet, and I can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response:
Yaay! im cheering inside, originally chapter 3and4 were written as one thats why 3 may have felt like a drag, i was hoping i could respark your interest with that 4th chapter! got a little worried! this was a scene i had planned out before i had started writing this story. Oh allowing him to jump was like a message of dominance, i think in the end he knew full well he had no choice. thank you for the continued support!
Date: December 30 2016 9:34 AM Title: Why me Pt.2
very interesting.
Please more.
I'm curious what will happen next.
Please carefully describe in some detail,
I could imagine.
my written English is poor
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying it! i shall try my best to continue to provide chapters in as much detail as possible, whether giantess or shrunken people reading i am trying to provide a good general perspective of what that person will experience and see to the best of my ability
Date: December 30 2016 4:33 AM Title: Why me Pt.2
If you have any images that may help me out that would be great! Did you base the characters off of any images? You can e-mail me any information by going to my profile page and clicking "contact". Let me know if you've send me a message (you never can tell with Giantess World) so I know if I'm expecting one.
I know the giantess is "Asian" so I assume that means she's from the Sinosphere. Of course, India is in Asia as well. I can imagine that's what you were going for though. I do have some long hair as you described so I can mke something provisional. Percy is a little more difficult though.
Author's Response:
heya! i've sent you a note on your deviant art!
Date: December 30 2016 2:46 AM Title: Why me Pt.2
For Percy's name you might have drawn some inspiration from this story:
http://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=4594
Whenever the protagonist tries to say his name jn protest (because he think she should refer to him by this name) she stops him. In that story the giantess kisses him to prevent him speaking but I think this giantess is somewhat different in her approach.
I'm almost tempted to do a render or two based on this story. I like it so far, so I think this will encoruage you to keep at it! Some nice promotional material; a book cover maybe. I've been struggling to find stories I really like recently.
Author's Response:
Hmm interesting story, I skimmed through slightly, have never read it tbh.
Oh a render? sound interesting I'm actually quite adept with photoshop ans have created book covers in the past simply to prove that the existing cover on a book looked crap. I'd be very interested to see what you could come up with for dear Percy and we'll the girl who we shall soon learn more about
Author's Response:
Hmm interesting story, I skimmed through slightly, have never read it tbh.
Oh a render? sound interesting I'm actually quite adept with photoshop ans have created book covers in the past simply to prove that the existing cover on a book looked crap. I'd be very interested to see what you could come up with for dear Percy and we'll the girl who we shall soon learn more about. I take it you enjoyed this chapter? Hopefully :')
[Report This]Date: December 29 2016 11:54 PM Title: Why me?
While I love the detail, I feel like not much has happened in the chapter. Most of it was just a lot of detail about what this girl did or what Percy observed.
What made the first chapter good was how Percy was staring at this girl, she stares back, she follows him, shrinks him and captures him.
The second chapter and this chapter don't show much progress in the story. I understand that you want to reveal one thing at a time, but I think there could some more action here and there besides being bumped in a purse and being poked by a pencil.
Finally we know his name; Percy. We still don't know the girl's name, but we know that she is slightly younger and goes to the same school as Percy.
This chapter felt kinda confusing. She seems to be studying him, like he is a science experiment. She wants his name and starts measuring him. Not sure why and I'm curious what it has to do with the story.
Hopefully, this girl interacts a bit more with Percy. I can't wait for what she has in store.
I also can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Heya! So for this story im attempting to refine my skills for if i decide to pursue another story. By no means does that mean this is merely a test and will be a dead end story, as a result im attempting to pay attention to the fine details, i was the person reading to envision almost exactly what it'd be like if possible. Chapter 2 i admit wasn't planned out to be the way it was but thats because i made chapter 2 specifically based off your first review. So you may find in future there is a little easter egg waiting to be revealed. Incentive is key. For chapter 3 it was a long one stretching across to 3000 words, with a descriptive built up to what i thought was quite a dramatic end, maybe splitting the 2 chapters that were originally one was a poor choice?
Date: December 29 2016 5:18 PM Title: Kidnapped
Well the giantess doesn't really talk. It keeps Percy and I guessing. Plus I hate all of the useless dialogue people put in their stories and videos. Less can be more.
The giantess had mystery to her. It gives her a certain charm. It's like she doesn't consider Perry worthy of conversation. It's a nice touch. The mystery makes her more ominous, more foreboding and I like her silence a lot. It works.
The insertion tag has me wondering. Will Percy be a simple dildo? That would be incredibly demeaning and compliment the idea that she doesn't consider him worthy of conversation. Like "he's just my sex you now". Just a few thoughts, since you asked.
Author's Response:
hmm interesting, this type of giantess was exactly what i was going for, however i fear that due to the style of writing ive decided to approach rather than using "i, my. etc" that some of this effect may be lost when her identity begins to reveal herself. Non the less this is who she is for what has happened to her.
Date: December 29 2016 1:41 PM Title: Why me?
This giantess is a bit different from what I'm used to seeing. It makes for likable narrative, even if I don't want Percy to be harmed. I felt my pulse raising a bit as I read this, wondering what may happen to him.
Author's Response:
Hmm, when i used to creative narratives, i used to pay quite a lot of attention to detail. Without specific details one cannot envision the situation itself. While my skills have diminished im trying to improve them in order to make a heart wrenching/dramatic story. I'm curious to know what makes the giantess i've created different from what you've encountered previously. thank you very much for your continued response it really does help :)
Date: December 29 2016 1:30 PM Title: Bagged
Percy seems like a nice person. If it was a nasty person who was, you know, shrunk, I'd be prastically rooting for the shrinker. I feel a bit sad reading about Percy's plight. Yet I want to find out more and keep reading.
The short, snappy, chapters seem to work for this story. You don't spend much time getting straight to the point. I like that.
Author's Response:
I agree, writing it was sad enough, having this girl change his life. I do hope you read on in future, for i think you'll be quite surprised.
Author's Response:
I agree, writing it was sad enough, having this girl change his life. I do hope you read on in future, for i think you'll be quite surprised.
Date: December 29 2016 1:25 PM Title: Kidnapped
A mysterious start. It makes me want to read more. What was Percy doing outside before the end of school? Shouldn't he have been in class or at least visiting the school library. You did say he has good grades, so he sounds like the studious type.
Here:
thrashing about at the girls massive fingers
Should be;
girl's massive fingers
Author's Response:
Thank you! I've made the change :)
Date: December 28 2016 4:11 PM Title: Kidnapped
I like the dart rather than a ray, but the shrinking scene itself lacks good scale, but the quaking is a good detail. The trees are described as colossal but there's no mention of the doorknob being above him just farther away so I don't know what size he is during the capture scene. I think the first chapter should include a description of what the girl is wearing even if it's just a schoolgirl unifom they come in different colors. The missing persons report and cellphone are both great details, though the second chapter has alot more detail, inluding the brand of the bag and it's movements. Exciting so far.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the review! i had previously wrote the first chapter with a lot more detail on the shrinking, i had objects that had been dropped by Percy that ended up surrounding him at his new size. however for whatever reason, when i posted the chapter it failed. so i lost all the text. currently i write on a different platform in order to fix this problem, but got a tad frustrated and lazy with the first chapter as a result! Hoping i improve in future chapters :)
[Report This]Date: December 28 2016 1:27 PM Title: Bagged
Hmm. So there seems to be another boy caught too. And that boy was caught on Monday.
What's funny is that we know the name of this random boy on the news but not the main characters! You really like to reveal things one at a time, haha.
I bet his phone is going to be destroyed if he ever sees it again. It's probably crashed in between the regular sized objects in the purse/bag.
I don't mind waiting for the fun parts. Heck, right now it would be strangers having fun, which would be awkward. I need to know the characters first in order to appreciate the fun.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Glad you are currently enjoying the story, i hope in future i can continue enticing you with my content.
[Report This]Date: December 28 2016 12:01 AM Title: Kidnapped
Welcome to giantess world.
First stories are always the hardest because this one story is basically your first impression to everyone. Although, everyone knows to give you some slack since it's your first story.
Like everyone else, I love the start. It's mysterious. We don't know much about the characters and the girl hasn't said a word yet.
I like how you included the insertion tag. It's arguably my favorite. Makes me intererested to follow the story.
We leave off with this girl taking this boy to her home. Is there a chance that her mom might have some fun with him? I know it's a stretch since it's your first story and it should follow your fantasy, but I would be glad if I knew if her mom was involved too.
Now, this girl seemed to put some pin in the back of this boy's knee. She did that effortlessly which makes me think that this girl has caught more guys in the past.
I love this first chapter, and I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Hey thank you very much for the lengthy feedback, i appreciate it a lot. I am generally writing from my own perspective, so writing in a different person for the first time is proving to be challenging. I'm also quite fond of this tag, so i hope to be able to satisfy your enjoyment! To your questions, for now im going to leave you in the dark!
Date: December 27 2016 3:44 PM Title: Kidnapped
Great start, can't wait for next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you! the next chapter was written a lot different than i expected, i hope you enjoy it none the less.
Date: December 27 2016 9:48 AM Title: Kidnapped
starts interesting
Please more
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it :D
[Report This]Date: December 27 2016 9:17 AM Title: Kidnapped
Excellent start. Keep it going.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the feedback :)!