Date: October 26 2017 3:56 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Eve's had it rough. It's not bad at all to get the scoop on how she wound up the way she did though, so these chapters are enjoyable.
Like i've said before though, I have been keeping up with all of your updates since PLD, so you don't need to worry about my enjoyment lol!
Also, i'm with Sirk, seeing Ebon's backstory is a definite want lol
Author's Response: Oh don’t worry, it’s coming. And I plan on it being a good one. >;) W-Well... good might not be the right word... Thank you for your review Hatter it makes me really happy to hear that. :D
[Report This]Date: October 26 2017 11:10 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
POOR EVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Sobs in the corner T-T
Author's Response: I’m not going to lie... I felt my heart ache to... her stories really hitting me in the feels! T~T
Date: October 24 2017 9:35 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Well this chapter was excellent. Eve has such a rich backstory that subtly hints at the present character. That's oone of the positives of this story or any of your stories. Every character has a story and feels fully fleshed out. Precious Little Demons was literally structured on that and it made the story better. The only gripe I have is that everyone hasn't gotten the same amount of attention yet. Waiting for Ebon's story most of all!
Author's Response: I assure you, Ebon does indeed have a story to tell, and don’t think all the girls have given up their pasts just yet. Layers are best discovered, one at a time. ;3 Thank you so much for the review NotSirk, I promise you more will be revealed when I return. :P
[Report This]Date: October 05 2017 8:34 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 1
Finally some free time to post a review.
We get some answers about Eve but still far from the whole truth. I wonder what happened with doctor Bowers...
There was a lot of tension when the vampire appeared and at the scenes. I could feel he was taking the spotlight every time. Also like the was is implied he's lightly using his powers to keep control of the situation on his first visit. His prideful personality goes well with the usual concept of vampire.
I like the way Ventris was portrayed, he struck me as a very imponent and calm man, one that focuses on something and does what is needed to get to it, most likely having a concept of morals different than usual but not someone "bad". That's the part that I liked, that he doesn't seem like evil but like someone with different priorities. Albeit, quite merciless.
I'm still a bit doubtful about the reason Eve was happy when told she was dying. I can see now how she wanted attention as the vampire mentioned seems his father looks like a busy man or someone with the focus in other matters and her mother... I don't really know about her but it was implied she checks on Eve even less than her father. For a moment it made me think she wanted to relieve or escape on death from being abused in some way but it doesn't seem to be like that, not physically at least
The whole confrontation both parties had in the end was really nice. The way the vampire looked down on humans and how they counter him was also good to see, it keeps showing that discrimination goes both ways and that every side has their ways of fighting back.
The ominous message by the end of the chapter keeps me intrigued. At first, I thought that Eve would get some retaliation for killing the one that made him a vampire since that happens in some of the vampire lore with their servants, but she seems to be a full-fledged vampire and seems fine so it's not the case.
Oh, and the part in which Eve comes back to life startling the maid was also nice.
See ya~
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review even if I'm not the one who wrote this chapter. I liked the build-up as well. I wondered how F.W was going to play around with another Vampire since Eve wasn't born as one and I think he did really good! :D
I also like her parents... well, how they're written... I don't like them in general though... :l
It was also nice to see more biased from the Hominal side as well. I wanted to write that in at some point but I was struggling. I'm glad he did. And I didn't even need to ask him to. XD
Either way, I can't wait to see what happens. Thanks again for the review, I love seeing your thoughts on the chapters. :)
[Report This]Date: September 27 2017 2:21 PM Title: A Date With Destiny.
When do you think you are going to update again? I cant wait!!
Author's Response: F.W is keeping up with me, he's working on the new chapter as we speak. :D I think he'll have something soon, at least that's what he told me. I'm just as eager to see to. XD Not being able to write is really a pain. 3:
[Report This]Date: September 22 2017 6:22 PM Title: A Date With Destiny.
So exciting! The truth comes out!! (>u<)
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying it. :D
[Report This]Date: September 22 2017 4:02 AM Title: A Date With Destiny.
Well, this was certainly unexpectedly fast... I actually read it the thay it was uploaded but couldn't review until now, sorry for that.
Eve and Abby get to know each other even more, I found it a bit fun how the small one thought Eve was drinking blood and it was rather cute the vampire reaction when asked if she was the one that cooked. Also, Eve surely know how to set the mood.
Then the twins come in, poor little ones. Though, they might have enjoyed the ride...
The song part was a bit sad but I'm sure Abby is really thankful for that, Eve hit bullseye there. But, not so much with the next part. It was a really powerful scene, showing a side of Eve which we only saw in glimpses before. I know for sure Brook didn't mean to get the vampire that mad, I suppose not even she expected the Eve to be that... Nervous? Anxious? She certainly was very expecting about the date and Abby in general.
I wonder how she got to the state that Abby means so much for her, why is it that the fact that she can love a human is so amazing... I suppose this might be revealed in the next chapters but I'm certainly intrigued about it, about how she became that... Wary? With other beings and specially humans.
I couldn't stop reading after Eve snapped, I was worried about Eve, about Abby and about Brook. I hope the mermaid doesn't gets it too hard after all this. I mean, surely she'll be fine now but Eve might get her revenge somehow lol.
I liked how Eve revealed her red eyes in the dark, for some reason.
And now Abby knows some more of Eve and it seems she will even more revelations later on. I wonder if she feels relieved somehow? At the start of the chapter she talked about Eve as if she was in a totally different level than her. Now that she knows the vampire isn't almighty and that even she has flaws, I wonder if Abby thinks they're even closer now.
So yes, great chapter.
See ya~
Author's Response:
I didn't expect that either! I freaked out when F.W just messaged me and said he was done!? XD
I loved how he made their interactions so cute too! Eve seems so different than my other characters and he really did her proud. :3
From what I know and asked, there was supposed to be a special contrast in this chapter with expectations, so he kept a moral I didn't even see, lol. I'm glad he was able to do that even if I didn't see it the first time I read it... >.<
A lot will get revealed with Eve in the next chapter, F.W assured me of that. :)
I guess we'll both just have to wait and see. XD
Thank you for the review Kenta... even if this chapter wasn't even mine... :(
Date: September 21 2017 3:48 PM Title: A Date With Destiny.
Great job with the chapter Franchise Writer. You guys are doing a great job with this story. This chapter was great, I loved how Abby ended up being the one who calmed Eve down, even though it seemed at the start that Abby was the one who needed encouragement. Even though Abby is so small and one of the humans, she’s having a big effect on all the monsters in the group. And I especially love the relationships she’s developing with Eve and Casey. I’m always look forward to reading this. Both of you keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review Foreignkanto. :)
I'm glad you liked the chapter as much as I did, :D
From what we've talked about expect more to come with Abby's relashionships. We have big plans for the upcoming chapters.
[Report This]Date: September 12 2017 4:24 AM Title: The Morning After...
Oh, visiting family can take a real chunk of time. Having no writing time can be stressing but do please try to enjoy your vacations ^^
I wonder if Kari's reaction towards Abby's little adventure has a deeper meaning, like if she had some encounter with alcohol in her past in some way. In any case, is nice to see how much close they're now. Maybe their little chat has some influence in Abby's future choices?
The poison part was a bit sad but that just shows how much Abby's mentality has changed since the start of all this, and it was a kind gesture of Eve to take away the page, even if she had acted out of her own hatred and not really to protect her, not completely sure which for now. "Bathed in someone spit" is an interesting way to put it, I didn't really think about it before hehe.
I feel like there's some kind of clue in Brook's initial behaviour but I'm not totally catching it. Anyway is nice to see her again, her way of teasing Eve is really fun. Really builds up excitement for what might come next.
Somehow I felt Eve was cuter in this chapter, is really adorable how she made preparation to have a date with Abby!! The way she silenced the little teenager was also charming. By the way, I wonder if she makes the dresses herself or get some familiar to do it or something, Eve trying to sew a miniture dress seems like a cute picture.
Author's Response: Yeah... I dreaded going back to my family's but it can't be helped. We go every year for a few months... but it's alright. I get to see some friends I left so it's not all bad. I'm just sad I didn't get more time to write before I left because it's impossible to find time here. >,< More will get revealed in time with kari. She amongst most of the girls has one of the more deeper backstorys and there is a reason I haven't shown hers yet so don't worry, more will fall into place. I also wanted to dial it back a chapter. While fighting, drinking and other exotic pleasures may be relevent in my story don't forget, there still kids. XD Emotions and personalities will eventually pop up even if the maturer side takes presidency. Eve will also have more shown to her but this time, it won't be me narrating it. I hope you'll enjoy what's to come, but, it won't be from me next time around. I'll see you around kenta, hopefully I'll be back sooner then next year and not be away as long like last time.
Date: September 11 2017 6:56 PM Title: The Morning After...
Hey, I'm wondering, where is Nya? I mean, she hasn't showen up since the fight, has she?
Author's Response: That, I wanted to get to for this chapter but because of my situation I had to put it on hold. After Eve is finished up I'll be getting to her. Don't worry, she's not dead or unconscious. :)
[Report This]Date: September 10 2017 6:08 PM Title: The Morning After...
I love this story! It's amazing! Can't wait until next chapter ;)
Author's Response: Thanks Lucia1312, I'll try to be back as soon as I can!
[Report This]Date: August 27 2017 4:49 AM Title: Another round!
This was uploaded just after my last day at my job, feels quite freshening to read ^^
Abby did her best to keep up with Poppy's drinking pace, quite impressive for someone her size. The girls drunken antics were fun, the teenager trying to get off the dish, Poppy grabbing and dropping her back, got some snickers out of me.
And seems the alcohol was strong enough to make Abby more forward than usual. I suppose is fitting, they both deserve a reward after getting rid of Ebon for now. I really liked seeing the girls get along so well with each other, it really shows they had a fun time even before the feeding time started.
I think Abby got it rougher than usual this time? At least since her first encounter with Nya. Poppy is related to a lot of stuff that I like so I really, really enojed this. I found it specially cute how she thought Abby was licking her because she liked that and just kept rubbing her around (or maybe inside? Was it inside?) her navel. The oni's breath, tummy, navel, sweat and other fluids might be something Abby hopes the alcohol makes her forget. Having the shrunken girl bite because the oni wouldn't feel any pain from it was clever.
And I guess Eve time is next. Though, she might want to bath Abby first, I can't imagine she appreciates how she smells now as much as Poppy. And also, yes, pain in for of headache is coming for Abby at this rate...
So yes, it was shorter than usual but really sweet! Poppy might be my second favorite by now, or even at the same level as Casey, have to think about it a bit more... The oni is just too adorable! and really has a lot of affinity with my tastes. I hope she come backs to te story sometime. Once more, I really enjoyed this, thanks for writing.
See ya.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review Kenta, I'm glad even though it was shorter than most of my other chapters it was still enjoyable. I have big plans on the upcoming chapters and I think you already figured out why. Props to you. XD
I wouldn't worry too much about Poppy being rough. On a scale of one to Ebon, she got off rather easy.I'm also glad you enjoyed some Oni sweat. I figured a tomboy like her would need something along the lines. And yes, her face was in her navel.
I hope to update soon!
[Report This]Date: August 01 2017 5:32 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
This time I found the chapter at a good time and could read it earlier than usual :D
I guess Abby know has a better idea of why Eve was dealing with Poppy the way she was. Congrats to her for not losing it, should've taken a lot of will power. The way the teenager and the oni interact was quite fun, I really hope to see more of these two. Poppy's reaction when Abby ended up naked was great. And it seems Abby is getting to enjoy more her new size, interesting.
Poppy's past... The change in the oni's behaviour, how she interrupted herself to drink, it built a really fitting mood for her tragic memories. About the past itself, I suppose we will never get to know what happened there exactly. I would like to think is all a misunderstanding but I guess that would be too much wishful thinking, that betrayal and to a girl that young... Poppy's tears and the way she asked Abby for answers hit me a bit hard.
Abby's mind keeps exapanding as she get more info of the world she lives in. It'll be interesting to see the final result all this lead her to and what she'll choose to do with her life later on. Also, I hope she won't blame herself too much for what other humans did...
Abby trying to hug Poppy is way too cute.
Aaaand Ebon out of nowhere. That I didn't expect, and it seems she wasn't ready to see Abby either. Why are Onis just B class again? I suppose Ebon is a lot weakened after her fight with Eve but the "Not even she hit me as hard part" makes me think that maybe Poppy could have dealt with Ebon that time. Though, Eve did mention in that fight that the dragon was weaker than before, I suppose it might be because of that.
And now that we've seen more of Poppy... I really like her! A lot more than I expected! Always looking for fun stuff and ways of entertainment is something I agree a lot with. Her personality is also really pleasant, she's just awesome and funny! The serenity she showed while telling her past and then crying in the end got a couple of tears out of me and makes me hope for a better future for her. She was badass while fighting with Ebon! The loyalty she shows towards her new friend is also admirable. Lastly, the fact that she's covering Abby in salty fluids might or might not be and extra bonus for me. About that last bit, I also found really fun the way Abby kept falling and slipping.
I guess the next chapter will be the "drinking party"?
See ya.
Author's Response:
Wow, you are early. XD Didn't think you'd see this for a few days. Glad to see your review though. There always the best to read!
You can definitely tell that Abby can relate to Eve when it comes to dealing with Poppy. I struggled with her personality a lot because I didn't want to mimic another certain Monster girl later on. But, I'll keep her to myself for now. When it comes to Poppy's past, and most of the other girls don't expect to really delve into it until the end. There will be more that goes into them all at a certain point, but I can't say why I'm doing it this way for now.
I knew Ebon would catch people off guard. I have plans for her, big plans. So expect the Dragon to be lurking around any corner. She can come up at any time. >:P
As far as strength goes, that of an Oni's is by far stronger then a Dragons, especially one as young as Ebon, but there are other reasons for the classifications you need to consider. Just because they're in one rank doesn't mean they're any less strong than another. Certain things can factor in... such as not being able to recover from a fight with a Vampire days before. Hint, hint.
But I'll also be going into that later so you'll just have to wait.
I'm glad you enjoyed Poppy, I did too. :D
Expect drinks and other fluids to come~
Thank you for the review Kenta. :3
Date: July 31 2017 10:05 PM Title: Cheers!
I love it. Love the relationships you are buidling with Abby and all the different girls. And how Abby is slowly but steadily realizing that humans are the real monsters in this world is being done so well, especially with this chapter. I look forward to this story all the time, and when I see a new chapter, it's the first one I click on. Abby now has yet another Ally. She's gaining the trust of all these bestials and hominals, I hope she's able to earnt hat trust if it is ever tested.
I hope to see the next chapter soon!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're seeing the moral of the story peeking through now. You know I don't make them without one. :P
I'm really happy to hear that you look forward to these chapters. It makes writing them all worth it when I hear this.
Thank you for your review Foreignkanto. I really appreciate it. :)
[Report This]Date: July 23 2017 3:49 AM Title: Shaking hands,
No need to apologize for the wait. I hope everything gets better on your side.
Well, that's a nice start. I always appreciate more of Cas. Is fun and charming seeing her jealous and trying her best for Abby. Though, I don't think I would mind some of that "rancid breath". Quite cute, pouting when the teenager got distracted.
And he rivality still goes on. I guess Eve got the upper hand in this round, she seem to be able to mess with Abby easily and the teenager seems to be more conscious around her. Though maybe the tiny feels more at ease with Casey? Anyway, whatever Eve has to do now seem intriguing. I'm at blank in this one, it might have to do with the way she gets energy but she said she would tell Abby about it later so that might not be that secretive. Also, since they're far from Casey by now, that means Abby is naked at this moment? By the way, typo with "ladder", I think.
So, Poppy. Since there's someone else that can shake Eve out of her usual behaviour. It was fun seeing her getting that frustrated while trying to give her message, even sending her flying. Good thing she's okay. Though, Abby might need some time before seeing that act again. And the little speech she gave about going against her if anything happens to Abby was amusing in many ways, showing her passion towards Abby, another aspect of her personality and simply the way she said it made me smile. Though, again, Abby might need some time to process what happened.
And about Poppy herself, I like her already. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, got high expectations for her. The personality she seems to have just looks quite fun, same with her speech pattern. And finally, I would like to remark, I want to believe that Abby fell face first into Poppy's navel :)
See ya.
Author's Response: Well, first off Eve doesn't have rancid breath, lol. Casey might disagree however. On regards to Abby's presence she feels very comfortable around Casey, and for the most part Eve as well. More on that will come with time as well.I wouldn't see it as a rivalry as much as two mating Hominal who both want the same mate. ;) Don't worry about Abby's clothes I didn't forget about that piece. XD and ladder might have been... I still struggle with certain phrases. :( I look forward to continue writing for Poppy as well. This will be a fun challenge no doubt. Thanks for the review, your insight is always the greatest. :3
Date: July 21 2017 1:55 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Awesome! So we finally get to see Poppy! I'm not surprise she's an alcoholic. - _- Oni's are famous for their liquor afterall.
Author's Response:
Couldn't have one in here without it. But, expect the unexpected is all I'll say. :)
Date: July 09 2017 4:24 PM Title: A minute of peace,
Did I offend you, somehow? Just curious as to why your not answering my reviews.
Author's Response:
Not mad, really not mad. ;-;
Date: July 08 2017 9:31 AM Title: A minute of peace,
Yes! The return of Em and Ella! I love how quickly Abby excepted her role as "Little Big Sis" so quickly. She's really getting use to the girls. The scene when her and Casey got it going on was what really got me laughing. Kari being able to manipulate time makes me think a witch might actually have the potentail to be rank an A-class hominal but I could be wrong. So I guess Casey is starting to develop a crush on Abby, makes me think there might be a scene very later on in the story when Abby will choose who she wants to be her plus one ;) Excellent work as always!
Author's Response:
Sorry for the delayed responce Nothingness, you didn't offend me or anything so please don't think that. D:
Your last review had some kind of a bug on my end so I never wanted to mess with it because I didn't want to have it do it again. For this one, I just haven't logged back in in a couple days. >.<
I really appreciate your reviews, so please forigve me for not writing back, I really do try to do it as soon as I can.
I'm glad you enjoyed Emma and Ella, lol. They're always a fun pair to write for, especially when Casey is involved. The thing about the ranking system by the way, is there more of guidelines. D - A isn't set in stone. Some from one ranking can be more powerful then others of their kind. Em and El are examples of that since they're Eve's familiars making them stronger then normal Imps who are generally slower and frailer. Witches can be just as dangerious as any other Hominal, but you need to figure out how their Energy is being used. If they use it to quickly, they're basically just Humans then making them rather weak in contrast. I hope that helps clear that up.
As for Casey's, hehe, attachment to Abby... Yeah, that one kind of snuck up on me actually. But, I plotted it in and I like what I've made so you'll see what unfolds in time. I hope to have the next chapter up soon so stay tuned. :D
Once more, I'm really sorry for not responding back till now. I absolutely don't want you to think I'm neglecting you or mad for some reason. Thats not really my nature to be. :(
See you soon
[Report This]Date: July 07 2017 3:31 AM Title: A minute of peace,
No problem with your updates being a bit slow or a bit fast, just take your time and release the cahpter when you think is the best to do so.
Anyway, going into the chapter. The mystery of Abby's past just get deeper. I think the howl might be a clue but there's a lot of species that could do that. Certainly there're way less that can manipulate or survive on fire but I can't think of any right now. Also, Casey comforting Abby! >.<
I love to see how their relationship keeps growing, they seem closer each time. The imp are still very cute and Casey is getting better and handing them. Felt a bit bad about how she fooled them but they won't be too disappointed I think, if they ever realize what happened... H-hopefully they'll get something to make up for that.
A bit more into the different species' physiology is alaways interesting, I liked that bit of information about witches. And hopefully that's the only tax for using the time turning spell...
Wonder what is it that Abby's have to be able to command them. Though of course it isn't that powerful, everything would be easier that way. Maybe is just her aura as an older looking girl? Though it could easily have to do with the mysteries surrounding them.
I've also been wondering a lot what'll Abby choose to do when she "gains her freedom". Of course I would be glad if she decided to stay with the other girls but her thoughts should be in total disarray now. Sadly Casey misunderstood her intentions, hope that they can get clear with each other.
And well, clear or not they did got a nice moment together. Different from their first time, it made me happy to see they're both enjoying it his time. Great advance between Casey and her storeen (L)
See ya.
Author's Response:
It could be a clue, who know's. :3
I'm glad you enjoyed the dynamics of the girls in this chapter. I wanted certain scenes to help line up for more to follow like I have with others in the past. Expect more to this extent in the future as well. As for Emma and Ella getting back at her, there might be something coming along the way. >;3
As for her *Aura* it isn't something like a hidden power from Abby's past, I'll say that much. More will go into this later don't worry. On regards to her thoughts, they are quite in disarray. I'm glad you like how its shaped up so far with her and Casey. But, Eve will get her back soon don't worry. She's her Amore after all. :P
Thank you for your review Kenta, as I've said I always enjoy the insight you give me from what you've read. I'll try to update soon. See ya!
Date: July 05 2017 8:26 PM Title: A minute of peace,
Loving the story man. Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thank you... again? xD