Date: February 19 2018 12:20 PM Title: The Cycle Continues...
That was a good chapter. We got a really nice moment with Casey, Emma, and Ella at the the start. It's nice to know ho wmuch all of them care abut Abby. The relationships between all of them have really grown.
But when Ebon shows up, oh boy. I hope Casey is ok after we didn't see the outcome of the fight. And I was seriously worried that Ebon might end up killing one of the imps. I sure hope they're both alright.
But I really have no clue who this new girl might be, or when her previous cameos were. She save Abby just in the knick of time though. I'm guessing this new girl must know Eve in some way, but their response saving Abby was too coordinated for them to not be working together it seems.
But Ebon is in real trouble now, boy. Eve is angry, really angry. I do hope she doesn't kill her though. I was hoping that they might be able to get her see the lght at some point, and that she could eventually learned to live with Abby as well.
I'm always excited when I see updates for this story. No matter how long it takes to put chapters out, keep it up!
Author's Response:
Does she know Eve? Hmm, possibly~
Or, maybe she just has impeccable timing~
You'll have to wait and see! >:3
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter Foreignkanto, I wanted to show more of the growing relationships that Abby has with each of the girls and even with the girls who once hated each other. There's an effect of sorts I'm trying to relay and I'm glad you caught onto it.
And I wouldn't worry about Ebon. I have plans for her. Big, plans.
Thank you so much for the review, it honestly makes my day and fuels my thoughts and words to keep writing for everyone. :)
[Report This]Date: February 13 2018 10:29 PM Title: Face, Faith, and Feathers!
I'm early-ish on this one =P
I have a bit of fear for birds, so having an enormous harpy in front of me could be terrifying, I have to agree with Abby on that...
Well, Amy is a really cute girl. Though, I can see why she would be difficult to write. Seems like she got a nice start with Abby, compared to some of the other girls, even if the teen was scared of her at the start and a bit later on.
Also, Abby still lets her curiosity take priority when choosing what to do, though I can't blame her. I'm also curious about how Najia got ahold of Amy's egg.
And well, nice scare got Abby there, it was pretty well written. Good thing she noticed what was going on quick enough. However, I do feel a bit bad for her dress, hope Eve isn't really too upset about it...
It was mostly a cute interaction between Amy and Abby from here. Glad she tiny got a breather for a bit. There's also a hint about Ebon's (?) relationship with Amy, which seems to be a rather nice one. If she actually referred to Ebon, of course.
The ending was also really cute, with Casey finally getting something nice ^^ I still don't know who I want Abby to be with ;_;
A cute chapter indeed.
Oh, and I guess that's where the vore tag comes from. Congrats on fulfilling that.
See ya~
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review Kenta! :D
This chapter was a bit tricky to figure out but F.W is the one to thank for his help with Amy. I wanted to try a few things with her but after going over them with him he helped me figure out a good way to have her and helped me write her in. :3
I'll be going more into Amy's backstory as the next couple chapters go on. Hope you can wait till then. :P
Also, I have all the tags there for a reason, ;)
I plan on using them all don't you worry~
See ya next time!
[Report This]Date: February 09 2018 4:05 PM Title: Face, Faith, and Feathers!
YAAASS! UPDATE! FINALLYY! I love how this is going, Amy is adorable! When are you going to update the next chapter?
Author's Response:
I want to say soon but I'm not sure. School's been kind of conflicting with my schedule since I came back home. :(
Date: February 09 2018 12:48 PM Title: Face, Faith, and Feathers!
I'm liking Abby more and more. The way she's taking control of most of the girls like a loving older sister is nice. Casey tsundere moment was funny, too. It's interesting how Amary or "Amy" called Ebon of all Hominals "nice face." This was also a relaxing chapter. You usually end chapters with some cliffhanger that has us thinking, "he loves torturing us, doesn't he?"
Btw, have you checked out Johnrussi's Puberty story? He's a new and might I add, exceptionally good writer on this site whose story focuses on a loli giantess. Someone even mentioned your story, Precious Little Demons in one of his reviews. I recommend it plus, he's a really nice guy.
Keep up the awesome work as always, guys :)
Author's Response:
I do take pleasure in my cliffhangers, but, that wouldn't fit for this chapter. I'm glad you liked it Nothingness. I plan to expand on the next chapter for Amy don't you worry.
Also no I've never read the story Puberty yet, but know that I know a little bit about it I'll give it a read, thanks. :)
[Report This]Date: January 29 2018 12:20 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
Hi! I'm now a bit earlier than the last time. Hope to be able to keep the free time for reading...
So, starting with another flashback. I wonder what triggers them? I tried figuring out the monster's identity in Abby's dream but seem like I can't pinpoint it yet. At first, I thought it might be some kind of elf because of the ears but it might be something more demon-like.
Moving on, pretty cute and informative session with Abby and Eve. Too bad for them that it was more informative than sexy. I wonder about Enya's identity but not a clue now. So far I can only think of a Lamia because it was mentioned before but really is just a vague guess. It should be a strong kind though, I suppose. Also makes me wonder about her past since she might have human blood running through her?
Poppy smelling earthly is just Eve way of saying she's sweaty...? lol
Anyway, lavender and lemon on the scene, somehow I found them even more adorable this time! And their first encounter with Eve was somehow cute, even in that scary situation. Glad to hear Eve isn't too pained about Abby losing her clothes one way or another. Rather sad to see such a hard work wasted all the time.
I think I know who the next girl is but will wait to confirm my theories in the next one. Nice chapter.
See ya~
Author's Response: Glad you were able to review at all Kenta. Sorry if life’s keeping you busy. It’s annoying sometimes. >,< In regards to Enya, I already put enough hints in this chapter to cover what she is with what I’ve said so no more will be revealed... For now. I also wanted a more calming chapter here to make room for what's to come next. It's hard to find moments of peace in a story like this but they are needed none the less. I expect most everyone to know who the next girl is as well but font worry, you'll meet her soon enough. I'm glad you liked the scents bits I added in. It has a purpose though, I assure you. See you around Kenta. I hope you can find time to review again whenever I post next time. :D
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 3:39 PM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
Geez, I'm starting to think that you love us suffering, you literally left it in the most interesting part! And also, I'm guessing that she is Amy (I think she was called like that in the photos), since she us like half-crow and she did say 'Shiny'.
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And lets no forget the question that I ask in every comment. When are you going to update? I really hope it's soon, because you have left me very curious.
Author's Response: You'll just have to wait and see Lucia, she'll be revealing herself shortly. :P I'll try to have another chapter up by the end of the week but no promises. A lot is going on right now for me to update as regularly as I used to. :( Also yes. I take sick pleasure in leaving cliffhangers. >:3
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 9:43 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
I love the caring nature of Eve in this chapter as she reads Abby's mind and shows concern for her wellbeing. You do an excellent job of portraying it.
I too so badly wanted Abby to become Eve's mate, and the interruptions were frustrating. I suppose mating would close off a major plot thread and thus it's delay has value in drawing out the story, but it's still frustrating.
I like how we're out of the flashback zone. While I loved the writing in the flashbacks, the technique in general is not my favorite. I find myself wanting to get back to the main timeline. Now that we're back, looking forward to seeing what happens next!
Author's Response: I’m glad you understand the necessity or delaying the mating factor. It holds a very significant role in the story I assure you and I can’t reveal nor explain how yet sadly. Either way, I’m glad you’re still enjoying my chapters none the less and I appreciate your input as always SpookyTaco. :3
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 3:53 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
This is really a very special story, with the fantasy and human vs monster element. Very good idea and well written and developed with all the different characters and very much depth, really great.
Only thing i notice a very little bit negative is the very slow progress since Abby arrived in the cave. How often was she already taken to eve´s cave without any real progress and Naija still in coma, many things seem to delay almost to timestop speed awaiting to finally happen. Ok you use the time to improve the developement of the world around Abby in all directions every now and then a little bit while no real full steps in any direction ever happen... almost a sneaking progress in a cirle all around abby in snail speed.
Everytime i hope now happens something like yeah eve and abby mate.. nope abby pulls the parachute cord in the very last moment basicly nothing happend again after all that chaptor.
But its like that in many stories here as of lately, i am seriously consiering to do a giantessworld vacation and return in a few month to hopefully find some progress in my favorite stories, similar to wait till a few more tv series episodes got aired before continue watching.
Sorry for behing honest.
Author's Response:
Simpson3k, there is nothing wrong with honesty. It's a fundamental principle that is needed in development be it in life or simply in the work of writers. We use honesty to learn where we are right, or where we are wrong. Your comment is appreciated and accepted. In the past, its helped point out mistakes as well which were addressed and fixed too.
As for the progress of the story, there are two main reasons for this. The first being that there was some rework that I had to do. A lot of the plot was shifter around after the chapter 10 mark but it was done in a way I thought best of the story. I still believe it to be the right choice however so I'm going to stick with it steadfastly. And as for the other reason, this whole story is just that. A story. It's Abby's story. It's a journey, not something that can happen in an instant but an experience to be discovered both by the reader and by her. She doesn't understand whats going on either and that's the basic premise of her character.
When you say there isn't progression I counter and say there is, however, its at a real-life pace. Understanding, healing, acceptance, love, these are things that don't happen overnight. They take time to build up and work out. It may seem prolonged and in a way, they were stalled over the last few chapters but there is a necessity to them too. You reference nothing happening between Eve and Abby on the last chapter, yet I did see something. A newfound understanding between them. It may not be love yet, but its a step in the direction that needs to be made. Not all stories start at a sprint. And I believe a crawl is needed to reach this story's destination.
If you want to take a break, I won't judge you. I won't hold it against you. I've seen you waiting here patiently since this story first emerged and after 200k words later were still only past halfway done. This story was always going to be a long one, and to that, I can only say please endure. The pay off will be worth it in the end.
Please never feel pressured not to tell me what you think. I enjoy reviews that point things such as this out. And I also enjoy addressing them with people who take their time to find them and tell me them back. :)
So thank you.
[Report This]Date: January 14 2018 2:44 AM Title: Paving a way for their future,
Hey, it's been a while! Finally, I got some things sorted out with my schedule and have more time to review now. I Felt bad for not being able to comment the previous chapter before the current one...
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Knowing the methods that Najia used for getting info is a nice extra, one could already guess that she was more of a pacifist but she seems to totally stick to it now. I wonder for what reason she chose to go down that path. Or maybe is just some differences between her birth country and the current one?
Eve went through a difficult choice, I'm glad in the end she went for what she believed to be right and got to stay but Najia side. Is also great that the Kitsune got to know at least a few Eve's feelings towards her before she got to her current comatose state, it would've been rather sad otherwise.
I don't know what to think about Eve's parents naming sense. Either they're rather wicked or that's just their way to deal with their loss and/or honor Eve's "memory". It was also a nice detail that the vampiress could recognize Caitriona faster than her biological mother. And I'm happy that the maid got to see her heiress is still alive. I don't know how she'll feel about Eve since their final encounter before the incident wasn't exactly the best but, if anyone needs to know that she's still "alive", I'm glad it was her.
And also, is nice nothing worse happened to Brook ;_;
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There's a big change for Eve in this one. Seeing her all giggly was great, even somehow alluring, maybe because of the gap with her more stern behavior? Anyway, it gave the feeling that she got a big weight out of her back after telling Abby about her past.
The letters were a really cute detail, in a lot of senses! It was also clever to leave them to explain some of Eve's feelings and the transition she went through in her mindset about Abby. Wonder when will be a good time to send it.
And, there goes the chance for a harem ending I guess? I'm unsure now about who will mate with Abby. Rather, I'm unsure about who I want to mate with Abby, all of them are so cute ;_; Anyway, Eve took the rejection quite good for now. It was too sudden for Abby indeed. But is good that she isn't giving out!
For the final, it really was a demonstration of that alluringness I mentioned before. I'm sure this rocked around Abby's mindset in a lot of ways, especially knowing those are her actual feelings. She'll have some thinking to do after all of this. Also, Eve sure knows how to take advantage, being the first one to prioritize completely Abby's pleasure.
Excellent job overall you two, I will be looking forward to the next one as always. Will try to comment faster for that one.
See ya~
Author's Response:
Don't feel bad D:
Was hoping you were alright.
I'm glad you still enjoy the story and the chapters coming out. :)
I was worried about how my last chapter would pan out but I'm getting positive feedback so that's a plus. Also, I won't say anything in regards to Abby's relationships. You'll just have to patiently wait and find out. :P
Thank you for the review Kenta, I missed you! :3
Date: January 07 2018 5:56 PM Title: Paving a way for their future,
I think I get Eve more now. That was one flashback. I'm also glad that she somewhat accepted Abby not wanting to be her mate. Good for Abby! I think she made the right call not going into something as serious as become Eve's mate without putting thought to it first.
Hope Franchise gets better, having a cold sucks. Trust me, I know -_-
Author's Response:
I wanted an impact like this for awhile but I didn't quite know how to utilize it until now. I'm glad the rejection was liked as much as it was... albeit, a sad one at that. But don't you worry. I have more on the whole Mate part to come into play later in.
Also, I'm with you. I hate getting sick! T~T
I'll pass on your wishes!
[Report This]Date: January 07 2018 10:14 AM Title: Paving a way for their future,
So, I re-readed the story and I have a theory of what happened to Kari.
Kari, or her mother, or maybe both, were abused by her father, this would explain why she doesnt like to being feed by... That ways, being caused by a trauma of whatever happened, and it would explain what Ebon said when atacking them "You know this better than most. If only your mother had been as smart to know this too…"
Am I right? Or even close to it?
Also... When is the next chapter comming?? (I always ask this question, hope its not getting tedious)
Author's Response:
Hmm... to smart for you're own good... well, I guess I'll need to think of a new backstory now... thanks...
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xD
Kidding lol.
Your analysis is pretty good but I won't say if you're close or not. I love the attention to detail you picked up. I sprinkle a little in every chapter hoping people will catch what I toss out. I'm glad you looked into Kari's. But she'll be ways away still. Either way, I'm glad you made your speculation, it means my story is doing its job! :D
Also, it's not tedious lol, the next chapter will be up in a few days or a week again most likely. My editor Senpai's still sick so I need to wait for a little for his part to come. ;-;
But I'm already started on whats happening for now so please be patient. :)
[Report This]Date: January 06 2018 11:24 PM Title: Paving a way for their future,
I loved this chapter and the return to Abby and Eve together. Now that Abby knows Eve’s story, there’s a lot more understanding between the two of them. I’m also glad that Abby didn’t immediately accept being her mate. It gives a bit more gravity to the decision.
The one thing that felt off to me was that it seem like Eve was being more precise with her gang than should be possible given their suze difference. At Anny’s size, it seems like it would be impossible for Eve’s fang to pierce the skin of Abby’s check with piercing the entire cheek and going into the mouth.
But putting that aside, I loved it. I loved how Eve was able to do exactly what she needed to to nring Abby to orgasm. And I loved her teasing. Not giving her release until she said she wanted it was a fun little intimate thing to help on the road to Abby’s acceptance. But the most fun thing was how Eve was describing what Abby’s life would be like once she’s given responsibility to provide essense for all the girls in the cave. It’s going to be very erotic lol.
I look forward to seeing more physical sand emotional intimacy between Abby and Eve in the future. Hoping for some action with Abby getting to interact with Eve’s private parts. Anyway, keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts foreignkanto :D
I’m glad you’ve given me some input on how it played out, it really does help. :3
As for Eve piercing Abby’s cheek, I meant it more as she broke her skin a bit like a slight scratch, not an actual wound. I’m sorry if that didn’t rely properly. I’ve never tried a scene like this before until now. I’m hoping it was still a great scene to read none the less.
As for Abby getting a bit *closer* to Eve, don’t worry, I have something in mind already. ;3
[Report This]Date: December 29 2017 2:50 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 4
Eve is so cute! It makes me just wanna hug her! (>u<)
When is the next chapter going to be updated more or less?
Author's Response: If everything is set up how I’d like then just a couple days really. I’m almost done :D
Date: December 15 2017 7:44 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 3
I guess Abby to reminds Eve of Najia. They both gained the love and affection of the other girls or at least in Abby's case, some of the girls.
Author's Response:
More to come soon. You'll soon understand more.
[Report This]Date: December 04 2017 12:58 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 3
Work kept me away from this longer than expected, but finally I could read it!
It was really sad to see Eve denying she's not human anymore. The method to test it was effective sure, but really harsh. I suppose it was the only way to make it clear to her, I guess...
The naga attack, wow, seems like the tales about Najia weren't exaggerations. Good thing, since Eve was very close on that one. I wonder if that's when Eve started changing her mindset about the kitsune or maybe it was a thing coming forward since she was found by her?
Anyway, time keeps passing. Najia and Eve had a nice and fun relationship until more people got in the picture. I hope Najia picked up Eve's true feelings... Or even if she didn't right there, hope she got to know how she actually feels about her before she got to her current state. And well, I guess Eve was always the jealous kind.
Ebon's apparition but I don't think there're many clues about her past in there, or at least I didn't really notice them. Impressive she was able to fight Eve though. I remember the vampire mentioned that about their first encounter but being it after part of Najia's training does say a lot about it. Also, wonder if she also trained the others.
Feel uneasy about what is to come, since Eve said it was the thing she regrets the most. We've seen Brook is safe already so things couldn't have ended up totally bad, hopefully... Looking forward to the conclusion!
See ya~
Author's Response:
Thanks, Kenta, I really appreciate your review. Things will be finished up soon with Eve's past but once they're done, I expect everyone to see her in a new light. Either way, plans are on the way, but, production for the next chapter might take awhile. Hopefully, I'll have something to show everyone since I got back over to the US. :D
Either way, thanks again and don't worry about not reviewing for a while. Better late than never. it shows you still care about my story after all this time. :3
[Report This]Date: November 26 2017 3:39 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 3
I think Eve is (Was) in her rebellius phase of adolescence xD
Author's Response: You could say that. :3
[Report This]Date: November 18 2017 5:30 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
You two have poured your hearts into the writing, and it shows! At first, when presented with the cast of characters, I assumed there would be no way to meaningfully incoprorate all of them.
But somehow you've managed to do just that, each with their own personality and motivations.
This is the kind of story you don't want to end and it's sad when it does because the characters and community really grows on you. I hope there's still much more to come!
Author's Response: I’m glad you see it the same way as I feel SpookyTaco. :) All things must come to an end, but, the end is far off for now. So enjoy what’s to come, and thank you for your words. I’ll have something to show everyone soon enough. Well, me and F.W that is. ;P
[Report This]Date: October 31 2017 11:52 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
I've been wanting to read the chapter since it was uploaded but it was a really tough week ;_;
Have to say, I didn't really feel much for Caitriona in the previous chapter so I didn't expect to feel so bad for her now. The poor lady might've been Eve's biggest ally and got it really bad. It was so satisfying to see her trying to get her master to see Eve, yet it was so sad... At least she's safe, I suppose. By the way, I have a bit of trouble picturing her, I wonder how old she's supposed to be.
As for Ventris, seeing him acting so shaken... The who guy stood up to a vampire with almost total composure was acting nervous. That gets to show how much he actually felt for her daughter, and that the fear and hate towards vampires took priority, making killing her the only viable option. At least that's what I want to think, that even if she was an heiress for the most part, some love as there. It could've been the frustration of losing his heiress but, that's even sadder... I wonder if he was looking for any other alternatives all this time or just stalling the inevitable...
Is really a world without any intention of communication within species. Seeing Eve's wonderful recuperation, it makes you wonder how much more could be done if all species worked together. I also think of how much everything could've changed if the vampire had managed to take Eve under his wings.
And of course, Eveline is the one that had it the worst. Left in the dark about her current condition. Gradually being separated from other human's contact. Every day being treated more like a best instead of a human. And finally being betrayed by her own family... Man, why did it have to be so sad ;_; And depending on how much Naija knew about vampires, the poor girl might have had to learn the down of her conditions by painful tray an error, just as when trying to enter that building in this chapter.
And seeing Naija in action is nice, she strikes as someone with a big heart from the start. Also, must feel nice to be embraced by a fluffy tail.
As some other have pointed, I was curious about Eve's past length. It's been great of course but having these much screen time feels as if she's on a protagonist level higher than the other girls. Not that there's anything wrong with that if that's the aim. N-not that I'm saying I want some more insight on Casey or anything...
Excellent chapter.
See ya.
Author's Response:
*Smirks*
So you think I'm done with the other girls, even if they've already been shown? Think again! >:3
There will be more to come, don't you worry. I suppose the reason for so much focus on Eve is because F.W put her whole world together before creating her character. I'm pretty sure I did that backwards... I will be showing more on the others as time goes on don't worry. But, I think this needs to happen regardless. It gives a good context into how Najia comes into play. I didn't plan on revealing that till the end, but I think this is definitely needed.
I'll be back in a couple weeks time so I can take over if he can't finish the next chapter. He doesn't know when he's going to start it at least. I'm glad you're enjoying the chapters, and I'm glad that you're still reviewing them too. :)
Date: October 30 2017 3:14 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Hi Sterben. I know it's been really long since I left a review. I hope you and F.W. are well. I've been REALLY busy with life but at least I could owe you a review now lol.
Last time I read, it was about Poppy telling her tragic past to Abby. (You did a great job with her dialogue as well btw.) Poor girl, at least Abby was there to comfort her.
Eve's past was a an emotionally rollercoaster. I knew her father was going to abandon her but I held on to some false hope it wouldn't go down that way. He was definitively an asshole from the minute he was introduced so I wasn't too surprised by his cruelty.
It was interesting seeing Eve's feral side in her backstory during her first few days into vampirehood, especially with how refine and sophisticated she is now but her past was no doubt horrible. I'm also glad we got a glimpse of Naija too! :)
You guys keep up the good work as always.
Author's Response:
I get it, life gets in the way lol. :P
I'm glad you liked the chapter too!
I knew a bit about what he planned for Eve but I have to agree, it certainly caught me by surprise to see her in a Feral state. I guess that's why he added weeks instead of days to show time. I'm eager to know how she'll act now that she's been fed though. :3
[Report This]Date: October 28 2017 12:51 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
So... When is the next chapter going to be updated?
Author's Response:
I honestly couldn't say. F.W doesn't keep up the posts like I do but I can't blame him. He has his own stuff to manage to. xD
If I had to guess though sometime in November, probably before I get back. He's told me that he plans to work more on the next chapter after Halloween. I can't wait either. :3