Date: October 24 2016 4:18 PM Title: The Bathroom
This is a truly wonderful story, I think you should have her shrink some people younger than her though, could do a story line like they have annoyed her
Author's Response:
Thank you!!! I plan for this to be a long story, and for Caitlin to kidnap several groups of people so there's definitely a possibility!
[Report This]Date: October 24 2016 3:49 PM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
Great to see this live on.
Author's Response:
It'll be around for a while I can assure you (:
Date: October 24 2016 9:32 AM Title: The Bathroom
Nice work! I too just recently started writing and I gotta say its not as easy as it looks but that just my personal opinion. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you!! It's been a blast writing this so far. But yeah, it'll take me a couple of hours to write these chapters, and yet they're still shorter than I'd like them to be 😅
[Report This]Date: October 24 2016 6:10 AM Title: In The Mouth Of The Beast
You use some very interesting comparisons. I like the way that Caitlin casually ponders the idea of life and death; her unrelenting tease, such a torturous predicament for her unsuspecting victims. Their fate completely unknown, this teenage girl has become their goddess and their entire world!
I'd like to see her capture an older man, maybe one of her teachers, or someone in an authority role... maybe, a police officer? Keep him in total suspense, and force him to submit to her in different ways...
I like your writing style, and it looks to be very well written too. I'll give more suggestions later, ...if you like?
Great story so far...
Author's Response:
Thanks!! I'm more into the F/F genre tbh but I might add a shrunken man in here sometime or another to appease to a wider audience.
And yes, keep the suggestions coming! Like I said, I'll probably need some inspiration if/when I ever get writer's block lol
[Report This]Date: October 21 2016 4:30 PM Title: The Bathroom
Great stuff so far.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: October 21 2016 12:15 PM Title: The Bathroom
Really good, especially for your first time. Looking forward to more :)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I've been an avid reader on this website for 4+ years and I've always wanted to write my own but never had the motivation or inspiration until now.
And yeah, I've definitely got more ideas for this story so I'll be writing again soon!
Date: October 21 2016 11:46 AM Title: The Bathroom
Great start!
Author's Response:
Thank you!!