[Report This]Date: October 29 2016 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 3
This is a scenario that I really enjoy, a tiny person who is forced to face their worst fears. You certainly have me hooked so far. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'll be sure to work hard on making the last chapter exciting for everyone reading.
PS. I like your story "Assistant". I've read it before but I couldn't find it until I saw you were the one that wrote it just now.
[Report This]Date: October 25 2016 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 2
Doing nice, so far. I like the giant stuff to mix it up and hope it explores that some more (ifyouknowwhatimean), and definitely digging the smaller paragraphs with small chapters. Makes it a lot more appealing. My only personal drawback is that there is only one giant I have in mind that it doesn't appear to be turning out as, but to each his own.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I guess the shorter paragraphs came out of me trying to avoid superflous details. I just started getting to writing on this again and i'm hoping to get the thrid chapter done over the course of the next few days. I think it's going to be a bit tricker to write than the other chapters for a certain reason I won't reveal (spoilers!).
And yeah, this story is kind of singular in it's catigorization (mostly vore). Once I'm satisfied with my progress here I have thoughts of writing shorts for the Class of Giantess series starring the character I contributed (Jeremy Whistler). Those should be a bit more varied than this one, which might fall on some points you enjoy.
If you have any further comments/concerns don't bother PMing me, I don't seem to get any emails from this site.
[Report This]Date: October 13 2016 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
You can definitely use more pronouns, especially in chapter 1. Instead of 'Jason', use 'he'. You described the action scenes well, though I felt there should have been some dialog in the first chapter. Surely some words would have been spoken with so many people in a small box. As for the ending of chapter 2, here's to hoping Jason escapes and finds the giantess of his dreams. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks a bunch for the review! I'll make the substutions for the pronouns as you suggested when I post the next chapter, which I'll begin work on soon. I'll also take a look at adding some dialogue between the micros.
You'll see what'll become of Jason with a few days (school permitting). I'm debating keeping it at 3 chapters or spiltting it into four.