[Report This]Date: December 15 2016 11:40 PM Title: 'Bath Time'
Hmm. I thought this was the chapter that I had to "brace myself" with.
Next chapter looks even better. Maybe that's the mind blowing one.
Loved the scene on the toilet seat. That was awesome. Wished he didn't pass out. I would have loved to see him go though it.
I like how now Amy wants to keep Billy to herself instead of letting him with Jazzy. I like it this way. Amy keeping Billy close to her and enjoying it. Perfect.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank's Tom!
[Report This]Date: December 11 2016 8:05 PM Title: 'Reflections'
Loved it, especially that last paragraph about keeping him down there for a while.
That pool party scene felt like it was out of place. I was tempted to skip it since the Amy part was awesome.
I hope Amy keeps Billy in there for a long time. Would be cool to see Jasmine ask where is Billy and Amy either lies or says something clever like "he is tucked away" "he is kept safe" "he is where he belongs" or soemthing that Jasmine won't think of anything naughty.
Amy could cross her legs as she does her daily activities too. After all, it is her fantasy. She could make it last forever.
I'm so jealous of Billy. I would love to be in his position. I wouldn't mind being tied up down there too. Sounds like fun.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Brace yourself for the next one, Tom! ;`)
Date: December 09 2016 7:50 AM Title: 'Respect'
Again..very good writing and looking forward for the next chapter. : )
Author's Response:
Thank's! Should be soon!
Date: December 09 2016 3:26 AM Title: 'Respect'
Fantastic.
Author's Response:
Thank's 'D'!
[Report This]Date: December 08 2016 7:33 PM Title: 'Respect'
My dream is just beginning. Amy getting horny and the fun is about to begin. I hope she keeps him there all night and day.
Maybe Amy could say soemthing like "Billy, I want you down there all day." I would be in heaven if she does just leave him there, going on with her day, massagining with her fingers and her legs.
I wish I was Billy and I hope this never ends.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I thought that you might like what's happened here, ...Billy might be in for a rude awakening with this blonde beauty. Sometimes, ...looks, can be deceiving...
Date: December 05 2016 6:48 PM Title: Breakfast at Amy's - Pt. 3
No, thank you for writing so well.
Later,
Diesel
[Report This]Date: December 04 2016 4:08 PM Title: Breakfast at Amy's - Pt. 3
Once again, the detail is top notch, especially with that mouth play. Love how you described her lips as like a pillow to him and that her nose was directly above him. I could easily picture that.
Also the part where she was sucking on his body like a lollipop. Great analogy. Must be like getting a super blowjob. We know soon, Billy has to return the favor. :)
Yes! Bedroom scene next! I am so excited! Loved how you describe her taking her clothes off and everything. Also, thank you for using the word "naughty". That's what I want Amy to be. A naughty giantess. And it looks like she will be real naughty soon.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: December 02 2016 1:41 PM Title: 'Breakfast at Amy's -con't'
So, is this the bath chapter? If yes, I like a little mouth play as a bath. Love the way Amy uses her tongue.
What I like about this chapter is that you didn't rush it. Amy could have slurped him into her mouth from the beginning, but you allowed her to savor it and tease him multiple times.
I can't wait for them to get intimate and I would love to see the detail you put when she decides to keep him in her panties.
After this bath, they were going to take a nap together. Where will Billy sleep? In her cleavage? I think that's a nice spot.
I think the best quality of Amy is how naughty she is. I like how she addressed if he is turned on. Loving her playfulness and teasing.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank's Tom! Had a lot of distractions this past week, ...hopefully, I get back into my groove again!
Date: December 02 2016 8:39 AM Title: 'Breakfast at Amy's -con't'
Amy is soooooooo hot.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thank's 'D'! You can look for more of her, too! ...a lot more! ;`)
Date: November 16 2016 1:30 PM Title: 'Breakfast at Amy's'
I would like to bathe with Amy. But I am guessing , sink
Author's Response:
Hm, could be, ...but, I doubt it. Amy's going to get a bit playful in the next chapter! Thank's Diesel!
[Report This]Date: November 16 2016 12:47 PM Title: 'Breakfast at Amy's'
Lol, how did he eat a whole pancake? Must have been huge!
I think what I liked best was when Billy was scanning Amy. I would be seduced too. If you shrunk and are stuck in a home with that woman, I would have some sexy thoughts too.
Curious about the bath. Will it happen in her mouth? Will they shower together? Or will she just use her hands to scrub him in the sink. Lots of good options.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
He 'Nearly' ate a whole pancake, ...not the entire thing. And, they were really 'Silver Dollar' size, about three feet across from Billy's perspective. When he smashed all of the air bubbles out, they weren't very large after all...
...yeah, I'm still trying to build on the character development with this chapter, building up Amy and making sure that she is well described and is easy to visualize.
...she might lick him clean, she wouldn't want any of that syrup to go to waste now would she...
Thank's Tom! Next chapter might be somewhat longer...
Date: November 11 2016 1:33 PM Title: 'Hide and Seek'
Loved his torment in the hamster cage. Having their voices literally drop him to his knees was great. A very enjoyable chapter.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thank's Diesel!
[Report This]Date: November 11 2016 1:26 PM Title: 'Hide and Seek'
Pancakes? Like breakfast? I thought this was dinner. Was hoping Jazzy goes to bed and the real fun begins.
Even Amy just doing simple movements makes me attracted to her. I love the way you described her hips and how the fabric stretched around her fit body. Lokking for more descriptions like that in the future.
Interesting to see Jazzy not throw a tantrum. It just shows me how much control Amy is of her daughter.
A cooking scene. I think what some people want is some food to get in Amy's cleavage and Billy has to get down there and eat it. :)
Well, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
What? ...you've never had 'Pancakes' for Lunch, or Dinner? If not, ...you've got to try it! They're delicious! (Blueberries and sausage with lots of syrup..., Yum! ;)
[Report This]Date: November 11 2016 11:27 AM Title: 'Hide and Seek'
Billy escaped by the skin of his teeth! He just needs to be more assertive. If he'd stopped running away earlier, Jazzy never would've chased him that long.
Author's Response:
Yeah, it wasn't any fun when he stopped running away, Jazzy was just playing with him as she would with one of her little pets!
Date: November 10 2016 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great story man I love where its going
Author's Response:
Thanks! ;`)
Date: November 09 2016 3:39 AM Title: Jazzy's Play Room
Great chapter. I see it's going to be fun at Amy's. He now has the terrifying world of Jasmine. I like that she barks orders and pays no attention to his thoughts. I assume Amy will be the same way.
Will Amy come in and let this be his new house. Does a section break off so Amy can carry him in a cage ?
I like when he's called little man. Like a pet. Excellent chapter. Will Amy also be mentally cruel to him?
Love it,
Diesel
Author's Response:
No, this girl's just awkward, and a little clumsy, ...kinda dipsy, but she's a real sweetheart, ...she's not cruel, on purpose! You'll be looking forward to seeing Joy again, if you want cruel, she'll be returning at some point, and Billy will get himself into some serious situations with her, ...but, you'll have to wait for that, ...I'm saving Joy for last!
Thank's Diesel!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2016 3:24 AM Title: Jazzy's Play Room
If I was Billy, I would fake an injury. I mean, why deal with this stuff? Just make himself look injured or tired and Jazzy will have to ask Amy that there's something wrong and Billy can get some rest.
What keeps Jazzy going is that Billy is playing along. Kids love animated toys, but once the toy stops moving or playing, it's not fun. So if Billy fakes an injury it works. If he refuses to obey Jazzy, she will just force him, but if he makes her feels sad by acting, then she should feel sad or sorry.
I thought Amy would have her fun before Jazzy. Also, I don't like how Amy just lets Jazzy play with him. I would rather Amy be controlling of her daughter and say that Billy is her toy only and maybe she can lock Billy in her master bedroom or soemthing and Billy can't escape. Or, Jazzy gets creative and puts a cage inside Amy's room and the exit leads to a tube which leads to Amy's room where the fun begins.
Really hope Amy gets her turn soon.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
hmm, good suggestions Tom, maybe Jazzy is just curious about things, she'll satisfy herself and then she will soon forget about little Billy, ...Maybe, ya think so...? ;`)
[Report This]Date: November 08 2016 5:41 PM Title: Jazzy's Play Room
Billy needs to get out of there fast. And shouldn't Amy be supervising her daughter? Seems awfully neglectful of her. Jazzy needs lessons on how to 'be careful', because she appears to be doing the opposite. ;)
Author's Response:
It might not be so bad, maybe Jazzy's Bark is worse than her bite?
Date: November 07 2016 3:36 AM Title: Moving In with Amy
Cool chapter. I must say I loved Maxine. I hope he ends up with her eventually. Greatly looking forward to Amy and I am interested in what you will do with the gerbil cages.
I like the way your mind works.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thank's Diesel! Yes, this should get very interesting, ...and, quite 'different' too!
[Report This]Date: November 05 2016 6:56 PM Title: Moving In with Amy
Looks like Billy is headed for some potential trouble! Hopefully Amy doesn't have anything too bad planned for him. Hopefully Jazzy doesn't introduce him to her pet hamster!
One recommendation I have is to use less ellipses. It feels ok when you're in the process of writing (since you're trying to indicate passage of time or a pause), but for the reader, it's almost always better to omit them. Just reads better. Commas and periods are less jarring. Anyway, take it or leave it, just wanted to mention it.
Otherwise, keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
I'll try and restrain myself from the persistent use of the ellipse. I love using them, though, I realize that they should be reserved for the most significant situations, but, really, ...it seems so easy to use them to force the reader to slow down, and actually consider what's actually happening...
Sorry dude, ...I really like these three little dots. They make it so easy to expand a sentence and to stop the reader from jumping ahead too quickly, Or, maybe I'm just lazy, and the use of the ellipse allows me to think that I'm using more words than I actually am, ...I'm not too sure, but, I really like using them, ...A lot!
Thank's Spooky!