That was strange...trippy.   

I’ve read lots of dream sequences before.  Lots of them.  But I’ve never gotten to the end of a dream sequence and felt like I had just had an intense dream.  I didn’t read this scene, I experienced it.  Brilliant and beautiful writing.

Thanks Duggernaut

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Great story so far, even though the girls are careless and thoughtless they haven't killed anyone yet (I could be wrong only one questionable is Bear).  Hope Sam and family fix this and the sority as a whole.  Devine intervention would be nice, but selfish people (women in this case) have abused their powers and 'God' smiting them will only fix it short term.  The need leaders like Tomlinson, Agntha (spell is aweful I am sorry) and Sam to correct the wrongs folks like Sabina and Brooklyn have inflicted.

That being said as with other reviewers I would get a kick out their Goddess saying just how evil and stupid they are as she shrinks her "chosen" and lets the boys determine their punishment.

Keep up the awesome work!

Not usussally a fan of un-gentle domination, though most of the girls seem more careless then cruel.  Basically once a guy is shrunk well it's done, if they can get some pleasure out of them and not kill them ehhh.  The sad thing is they are in the main doing it to their own brothers and sons.  Bothers who likely stepped in when a bully went after their sister, or drove them somewhere or helped with their chores/homework.  Sons who ran to mom to comfort her when she cried, who 'help' with her house work, who were nurtured in her womb.  I guess the 'devoted' basically tell their daughters enjoy jimmy while he's under 18, cause he's going to be 'age cream' for your 'real' siblings your sority sisters and if he's lucky (or unluckly) a set toy and pet for the rest of his natural life (this is assuming they aren't crushed, or straved).

Saw in another review the iffy possiblity of devine intervention, unless she's like luficer and pure evil, I would presume a mother goddess like the one they preport to follow would be pissed at their abuse of her power and what they have done to half of her 'children' it would be like Christ coming back at the most insane part of the 1st Crusade when his followers were killing everyone(Christians and Jews as well as Muslims) not just thier 'foes" would make the clearing of the money changers look like a picnic.

All that said AWESOME Story!

Beautiful Chapter, hope their enjoyment helps stablize things.  Hope Sam and Stanley figure out a way to return everyone to normal.

Hope in an ironic twist the Omega Pi goddess they wish to awake is pissed off at them (partilular the older ones) for draining her 'sons' for personal gain rather then using thier powers to help all her children (or morals to that effect), maybe have Sabina and grandma and the ones who injured or killed shrunk down to three inches and see how long they last.

Again great chapter.

Good boy, Oliver! Nothing worse than a stepparent who oversteps.

That darned Stan is quite a rascal, but he'd better watch his behavior... While Larissa may be willing, both Sam and Oliver may not be too understanding and with Stan's current condition, who knows what Sam could do. 

Just a bit of constructive criticism from a Southern Californian (where the story is set) to a writer who is a bit north of the locale.  There are no chesterfields in California, they're referred to as couches or sofas here :).

BTW, two chapters within a week are pretty impressive and appreciated.  Looking forward to your next submission!

Hoo-boy! Looks like Kent is in Super-trouble.* Along with everybody else!!



*Sorry! Couldn't resist. ;-)

Author's Response:

Lol, no worries, welcome to Smallville... yeah i did.

Fantastic writing so far. I really enjoy both the plot of the story and the phenomenal level of detail and perspective in your sex scenes. I love that you have use both the girls and the tiniest points of view.

Author's Response:

Thanks! It is always gratifying to hear someone enjoys my jumbled collection of words. :)

This has been an incredibly entertaining arc of this excellent tale. I've loved following Stan as he did almost everything right (he is after all, not a professional at such adventures) and still wound up tiny.  So, in a sense, he has been sidelined as he will no longer be able to provide the action in that way.  What form will his and Oliver's tale take now?

We were with him all along, crossing our fingers and sometimes yelling at the screen as we got scenes of cunning, excitement and suspense. Amazing storytelling. Variations on urban fantasy and tough guy fiction. All fascinating and compelling with great dialogue delivered by characters you really care about.

But now it feels like a cycle of the story is ending. Or, to make it even more addictive, has multiple endings. We have the sad endings of Stan's shrinking and failure to protect Kent, who has already endured so much trauma and tragedy in his life, and the happy ending of Deacon and Cady exploring the possibilities of their situation with loving care and affection.

And Deacon and Cady have been side characters, mostly, so far, but you've made their story so sweet and entrancing that you really want to see them find happiness. They seem to be off to a grand start in a scene that has both lightness and passion. Plus, just their little bit of love play provides a stark contrast to the Megs, highlighting the danger that Kent is in.

Thank you for your wonderful work Duggernaut. It has been a great read and it really has me eager to see what comes next.

Peace

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Hmm. It’s one thing to have Deacon take the lead, but imagine if Cady took control. This is setting up for some nice action coming up. I can’t wait!

I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Sometimes it's fun when they share the awkwardness