Why are so many reviews on here, the chapters are really flat and also not fun to read, just too short. maybe try to put at least 3-4 together into one instead of putting out so many short chapters.

Hmm. Kandi or Brooklyn. Me: obviously Brooklyn. She loves to be fit and exercise with Cam riding in her panties. Also, Brooklyn just acts like a girl who is a 10. Goes running, wears sporty outfits and loves to have a cute sex toy with her. Also, she is really friendly with people when she talks.

I love that description of Cam's limbs being glued together by Kandi's sticky fluids. Imagine if all drying and Cam is stuck on her pussy.

I can't wait for Brooklyn and the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I think in all fairness you would have to experience both before committing to one.

     Deacon does not come off as a potential big help in this bit, but c’mon....think about where he thinks Oliver is.  Nice, corner room at the ‘Meg house,  weasel bait has her head on his chest, they’re both sweaty and satisfied.  He doesn’t want to poke into that. 

     His Brooklyn-thing could be a huge achilles’ heel, depends on if he gets suspicious before he runs into her again. His fumbling with the poorly thought out code is so natural, but not a sign he’s going to mess it up.  Not really a code btw, it’s a sign/ counter sign type thing.

     I too am suspicious of the new girl...but that’s the nature of the story.  The name sets off alarms, but that weird “time/space defying, alpha predition” thing from the other story, doesn’t seem to be an aspect of this one.  Plus, c’mon, how would they know he’d go get breakfast there?  And it was Deacon who initiated contact.  Though, we have all theorized that he’s a target, because he’s been assigned “that room.”  But maybe,  that room gets assigned a non-target when the ‘Megs have done their “business” to cover up the evidence and muddy the waters.  Imagine you’re working a missing persons case, you’ve gotten to the vic’s place.  You run into a guy there who say’s “no, this is my room.”  It looks like whoever put you on this is confused or at least it looks like you have no crime scene. 
     Odds are they were intending to clear out Oliver’s stuff and get a new roomie for Deke’ asap.  But this lockdown business has their priorities elsewhere. 
    Though, if he comes back from his date and Oliver’s stuff is cleared out.  I would consider that pretty solid evidence that Cady is on the wrong side.  However, if she isn’t and he brings up the ‘Megs, she might give us a local perspective on them.  Remember the two girls that Oliver saw giving the unnamed ‘Megs some distance?  From when he was first exploring the campus?  She might be able to give us a hint as to how the locals see them.  Again, if she’s not one of “them.”

     God!  Who knew paranoia could be so much fun?  (I mean, that hasn’t played the RPG.) 

This is great Duggernaut.  Even very naturalistic, little scenes like this send our brains off in all kinds of directions and into all kinds of speculations.  It really shows what great world you’ve created and what an intriguing story you’ve given us.  Thanks bunches.

Peace

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That was pretty slick for Deacon.  I don't recall Cadence being an Omega, but who knows. She did seem awfully friendly for a sister, but remember, they know who he is.  Could this move be a set up to pull Deacon in?  Forgoe the whole three pink bands thing and just take care of business and dispose of the suspicious roommate. Hopefully this is not the case. 

Next up?

Chapter 61: "Singing With Cadence"

[Oh, come on! This pun was a natural.]

All this talk of Oliver's complexion...are we gonna call this the "spa-liver" scene?

Clever!

And Oliver is going to have the most radiant skin ever.

Now Oliver has a story.

Oliver approaches Sersei. Sersei looks around the floor and finds him. "There you are!" She exclaims and grabs him. Oliver is smiling in her hand.

"Why are you so happy, is it becuase of me?" Sersei asked.

"No. I just bored hiding and dissapointed that you and all these girls couldn't find me. I once stood next to an action figure and you didn't even notice. It was at that moment that I figured out that I'm smarter than all of you".

"Oh really? Becuase now I caught you and I win, not you Oliver." Sersei fired back.

"Perhaps, but I bet it wouldn't be hard to escape, now would it" Oliver grinned.

Sersei's face glowed red, she was embrassed. Oliver did evade her and the girls but she did not expect it to be the result of her careless searching. But now that she had him, she would like to see Oliver run from her again.

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Ha! I hope Oliver escapes and becomes big, but if he doesn't, I hope he has a moment to rub his cleverness in their faces.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Kind of the ultimate FU. Your analogy reminds me in a roundabout way of the scene between Dennis Hopper and Christiopher Walken in True Romance.

I may be missing something, but with all this lockdown business, did anyone clear out Oliver’s room.  Plus, Deacon was never doped, how are they going to get this past him?

All this chit chat with the ‘Megs has them almost sounding like human beings, but good ‘ol Cam shows up at the end to remind us what they really are.

All this could still lead to Oliver seeing, or even rescuing Cam.  Movie quotes, pot jokes and finding every way to call ol’ “weasel chow” a bitch would be a winning turn.  Of course, Cam might not be in a joking mood, that tiny prison shank joke might not seem so funny to someone waking up wondering why their neck is wet and kinda hurts.  Just think of the edge a tiny person could put on a blade; it’d go through someone’s skin like butter and they might not even feel it.
 
Honestly, as satisfying as something like that might seem, it doesn’t feel right for the characters.  Oliver and Cam should remain the moral, likable gentlemen we have seen so far, at least not until the 'Megs start talking about making Deacon or even Stan “go away.”  Then the lessons every cowboy learns about killing animals might just come to the forefront of Oliver’s mind.  Kinda’ wonder how many they could get in one night.  Would that release the stolen energy back to them?

Aaaaannnd other cheery thoughts from the Sersi fan club.

Thanks Duggernaut.  A great way to up the tension and make the situation Oliver is in clear.  You have made a chapter that could have been completely “utilitarian” an interesting view on character and just damn entertaining. 

Peace

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@Tom Speedy: Allie was introduced in chapter 14.

Author's Response:

Yep, the current president of the chapter house