This story has had me on the edge of my seat for like the past 10 chapters! I want so badly to read more at the end of each chapter! Your driving me insane! Lol..  Anyway, this is a great story, I'm loving it this far. Keep on writing it! You've got me checking almost daily for updates.  Really exciting, i can't wait to see where you are taking this. Great stuff man! You know, you should be a director or something!

It's nice to see that Deacon was perceptive enough to recognize that Oliver was not the person texting him.  He knows that something is up with the Omegas but obviously has no clue as to the scope.  His Spidey senses were also spot on with Brooklynn.  He knows the sisters are feeling him out (so to speak), testing him, observing how he responds and seeing what he knows.  I have to give props to Duggernaut regarding Brooklynn's response to Deacon's question about knowing Oliver's prior roommate.  "A little".  Ha!  Definitely an accurate statement about the disposition of Cam and all of the other victims of the Omegas!  Keep the good stuff coming!

"Sweet?!" Yeah, right.

About as sweet as an almond cookie...laced with cyanide.*


*Jodie Foster movie reference.

Author's Response:

It could be very sweet... but it'd pack a bit of a kick

Oliver; going ninja?

I love it! :-D

Author's Response:

min-ninja hmm? How about budding bank robber - "Nobody move, this is a stick up!"

Considering how none of the girls can keep their hands off that damn jar, it's gonna be tough to detect that Oliver has been there...."Oh look, little spots...which one of you...?"

Human fly Oliver....when they start making action figures for this story, that's gonna have to be one.  I love the tape idea...plus the elasic band can make a swing seat sort of thing.

Great to see Oliver being resourceful.  This is so damn fun, Duggernaut.

Thanks.

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Sersei sending the wrong text response to Deacon is a fatal error.  This mistake alerts Deacon that something is wrong and that the Omegas are behind it. Add to this error Brooklyn's nosing around and Deacon will surely know something is up. It seems to me that simple phone call to Oliver's cell would help to settle Deacon's concerns about Oliver's status.  If Oliver can respond to a text message, he should be able to answer the phone. If there is no answer, clearly Oliver is in trouble.  At that point, the logical next step is to contact Stan. The Omegas are in trouble...

I confess that I had to do a little re-reading to see if Sersei was finally making a mistake. And the answer is... YES!!!!!

Oliver and Cam might have a better fighting chance than they did before.

Author's Response:

Sersei outsmarted herself and chose the wrong response. the question now is how will Deacon play this?

Hold up! Timeout!

Why doesn't Oliver have the auto lock feature on his phone???? It's so obvious so no one can snoop thru your messages while you sleep!

Oliver sets up this code with Deacon, but doesn't lock his phone with a passcode?? Despite his cleverness, Oliver doesn't seem to interact with strangers a lot.

Also, I thought googling the phrase was some bs but when I googled it just now, I literally got the same 2 results too.

Also, when Deacon and Oliver made the code, there were 2 answers and Sersei only looked up one. That means no matter what, Deacon won't trust the sender.

Now, Sersei screwed up both answers so Deacon should use this to his advantage and set a trap. I thought Deacon was that dumb kid that loves girls, but after seducing that bar girl, he is as clever as Cam and Oliver. Deacon should ask a Sersei/Oliver to meet up so he can show her/him something. Of course, it shouldn't be a busy place where Deacon can't identify the person. He should think of a nonbusy place like a park bench with no one around. Deacon hides far away with binoculars and watches as Sersei circles the area. Deacon noticed a girl walking around frequently and believes he found the mysterious person texting him.

Since Oliver is I believe a freshmen, Deacon should make some freshmen required events mandatory. Deacon could fake a response to Sersei saying that she got the code right and tell her to attend this so and so event. .......Actually, I don't know where I'm going with this.

Point is, Deacon knows Oliver is in trouble and Deacon better call the cops on Sersei. Problem is that Sersei will seduce all the cops. Hmm. Maybe some female police officers. Darn, Sersei seduced them too. How about the....nevermind. Sersei can get away with it all.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Oliver has never had too much cause or concern to worry about locking his phone. Oliver is clever and resourceful, but he is also trusting and a little naive in some ways. Yep, I tested the google response too before I included it, just to make sure :) Things are starting to get interesting!

@TomSpeedy: what was I lying about?

     Nuts!  She just had to say that “I could just eat you up” thing, didn’t she?  Now I don’t know.  It could be the ‘Megs influence on local language.  Or it could be something she got from this Carol (who must be one of them,  the local coffee shop is too good a place to get the skinny.)

     And, yes.  It would be awesome if Deacon got a move on, just not really realistic.  As a character he’s just right, concerned, but not overly so.  Time is the only thing that can arouse his suspicions now.  When Oliver is too late he should get worried.   “Snobby” and “connected” are cause for concern, not evidence of a roommate in peril. 

     Thanks for the response to the earlier review Duggernaut.  If I were to speculate on the moral influences of the ‘Megs I’d say they were irrelevant at this point.  At least as far as their chances for redemption go.  Anyone seen the movie Manhunter?  Will Graham, an FBI consultant is looking for a serial killer by getting into his head.  At one point he sums up “This started from an abused kid, a battered infant... My heart bleeds for him, as a child. Someone took a kid and manufactured a monster. At the same time, as an adult, he's irredeemable. He butchers whole families to pursue trivial fantasies. As an adult, someone should blow the sick fuck out of his socks.”  Considering the years of suffering and death they have to their credit (and barring some outside influence) I’m completely there with the ‘Megs.

     At the best, if they have some kind of “cabin in the woods” type justification.  If the sacrifice of people like Oliver and Cam were necessary and the 'Megs were worth a bucket of warm hamster vomit,  the tiny guys would be treated like heroes....they would want for nothing to show what they have given.  Clearly not the case. 
    If they have some hall where they keep the little wax figures of people they’ve destroyed...if only the “selected sons” and they all go there and are reverent for a moment....or just find the figures of their fathers,  that is not a price.  That is not balance.  It is a moment of feeling uncomfortable and then going back to being a monster.
      It is not vanity that paves their way to deserving a special hell (next to molesters and people who talk in movie theaters) it is a lack of character and compassion.  Vanity would require them to feel themselves to be good or moral.  Not be moral, just feel moral.  You cannot knowingly betray someone and brush that aside if you are capable of morally judging yourself.  I see that as lacking any hope of redemption.   Again, without some outside influence effecting their behavior.
     And lets look at what this means for “go along girl” Harmony.  It is best illustrated in your own story “Anna’s Awakening.” (Which I am currently enjoying the heck out of.)

This exchange happens in chapter 23.

Brenda, now on hands and knees, nodded vigorously as she crawled toward Anna. “I’ve been a horrible mother, I’m sorry, I’m so, so sorry,” she blubbered reaching up with a small hand.

“Save your crocodile tears. You’re not sorry for what you were doing, for trying to see me destroyed, you’re just a frightened little woman willing to say anything to stay my wrath,” Anna replied flatly. “Contrition after the fact is hollow and meaningless.”

     Kinda says it all.  She never even asked if she could sit out the destruction of Oliver.  If she could do nothing and at least be one of those who only see evil and are silent.  No, she joined in with only the slightest prodding from the future pile of weasel poop.  So it’s an eternity sitting next to that guy that heckled “blazing saddles” getting her skin peeled off for her.

As should be obvious, I'm really into this tale Duggernaut.  It gives us wonder and horror.  What a story!

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