Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26 2017 9:54 PM Title: Brooklynn Under the Cover of Night

Gak!  Going back for the blade was the right choice.  But DANG! 

I'm really hoping a bit of rest will let us see a side of Cam that contributes to their escape.  I really hope Go Oliver becomes Go Cam and Oliver!

Oliver must realize that he can't just count on outside help.  His circumstance is too beyond comprehension.  Otherwise, he'd lay low and wait, Cam would get help if/when he could.  But no, he sees immediate action (and risk) is required. 

What a chapter Duggernaut!

 

pix

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26 2017 5:27 PM Title: First Time Away From Home

It's a good thing, making those connections. I was joking about you not telling me that stuff because my mind gets all twisted and I spend many minutes day dreaming.

Reviewer: bailey69 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2017 8:24 PM Title: Jailbreak

I hope you don't have the evil girls win after following the hero who has gone so far and gets revenge agianst his evil mother or both mothers and sister they are the worst a parents can be.P.S.I hope the cannable girl gets hers bad she is a murderer,murderers are the lowest if you deside to write somemore

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. We'll see how this unfolds

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2017 4:38 AM Title: Jailbreak

HOLY.....! I can’t believe what I just read.  Holy buckets!
Mission impossible play on Oliver’s part.  And I love mission impossible. 
Of course, I seem to have missed the part where he plans what he’s gonna do afterwards.  But the necessity of the act makes that pretty dang forgivable. 
Ya know, it’s been said that every character thinks they’re the hero of the story.  But try to remember that when you’re 3 inches tall.  Poor Cam cannot be blamed for just barely holding on.  And he did hold on.  I say good on him.  While others may have made better pets in the judgment of his treacherous sister,  he held up.  One aspect of the shrinking would be the whole demoralizing aspect.  And it’s probably not unintended.  If you’re the sort who has to lessen others to feel better about yourself it must be pretty appealing to see them wither on the inside. 

Just think of all the poor (probably mostly) guys through the years.  The Brooklyn of the class of 1972 delivered a quivering puddle to the Cerys of 1972 and just giggled.  Cuz the Harmony of 1972 wasn’t dumb enough to use her band on anyone after Cerys but the Allie of 1972 owed her a favor for getting her through anatomy class.  Meanwhile the Sersi of 1972 has landed a role in a super low budget ripoff of Willard....called Bubba!  “Unfortunately” their weasel wrangler got sent home early and accidents happen.  Hehe.

I’m also enjoying the thought of Allie going empty....handed?  Ha ha.  Of course, the real objective is to have Cerys stay empty ... stomached?  Is that a word?  It is now.

Tom is right...this story definitely needs more Tom...of course you’ll back me up when I say it need more weasels...right, buddy?

Of course, there’s a lot of speculation here.  That cliffhanger ending might just spoil all our fun.  But Oliver is a hero.  I have faith that he’s going to get clear of “the light of her own shabby universe girl” and spend the rest of the night getting a better place to lay low.  C’mon Oliver, don’t let us down. 

The tension is super “upped” Duggernaut.  You’ve given us another winning chapter and I gotta say well done.  And, of course, thanks!

pix

Author's Response:

Where intellect overrode emotion with Bear, emotion got the better of Oliver in his need to help a friend in distress. Sooo much at stake

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 22 2017 7:43 PM Title: Jailbreak

Let's pretend the next chapter continues:

Oliver noticed Brooklyn moving a little bit. He also heard a small yelp soon after. He looked at the direction at the voice and saw another little guy. The guy locked eyes with oliver and ran away. Unfortunately, he tripped and fell. Oliver rushed over and pinned him down.

"What's your name?" Oliver demanded. The guy grunted. "Tom."

"Why are you here on this bed?" Oliver continued.

Tom confessed. "I was spying on Brooklyn. Please don't tell her!" Tom pleaded.

"Well, you can tell her yourself" Oliver said as he began dragging Tom to Brooklyn's panties. Tom fought back and Oliver took one strip of tape and wrapped Tom's hands with it.

Oliver lifted and began shoving Tom through the hole which Oliver created. "Please, don't do this to me. You have no idea what she does to her toys!" Tom argued, unable to fight back with his tied hands.

Tom then had an idea. "Help!!! Help!!!" He shouted. Oliver quickly placed another strip on Tom's mouth silencing him.

"Now you deserve this. I'm sorry bud." Oliver then pushed Tom completely inside and placed a strip on Brooklyn's panties sealing up the hole. Oliver can see Tom's eyes peer through the tape. Oliver didn't feel sorry. He had to get Cam rescued and Tom was going to jeapordize it.

Oliver turned away and carried Cam away. He slid down the sheets to the floor and together, they made a hideout and decided to wait while Cam regains his strength. Hopefully Tom could buy him some time.

Brooklyn felt something was off when her little Cam was taken from her. She had a mild nightmare where she lost him.

She stirred awake and reached down to her panties with her hand. She felt the tiny body lying against her and smiled. She felt it squirm and she closed her legs together tightly as she rolled onto her side. Thinking Cam was safe and sound, she went back to sleep.

Author's Response:

What if Brooklynn's last name was Harwood and she had an older sister who was a teacher?

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: June 18 2017 8:20 AM Title: Suspicious Minds

Hey TS I'm right there with you.  So the University is in so cal... I'll be on the lookout for Sersei, Brooklynn and Kandi.  If I see amazingly hot girls meeting their descriptions I'll follow them back to their sorority house.. 

Author's Response:

Why do I think there is a veritable bounty of attractive young women in the SoCal area? might want to use a little caution trailing one because you never know...

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2017 2:33 PM Title: Suspicious Minds

Stan The Man to the rescue? I can't wait to see what he does in the next chapter! :-)

Author's Response:

Indeed, will he have the good fortune to avoid the girls' predatroy traps and possibly aid our diminutive hero?

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2017 11:34 AM Title: Suspicious Minds

Stan to the rescue!  We hope.

I’m pretty good at sorting through mysteries, but I would have to say that I would never suspect Samantha.  Stan seems to be pretty good at observing patterns in his own life.  He might find Samantha’s drunken fit to be sufficiently out of character that he suspects something.  I really, really hope he does, but her betrayal is so massive, so inhuman, that it I would have a hard time looking at her.  Maybe if she doesn’t react in a believable manner to his concerns he’ll stop trusting her.  Maybe even find a way to pry further info out of her.  He might have to start gauging what she lies about, see if that gives him negative information that is useful. 
Of course, I’m personally hoping he gets to the part where he’s willing to let pigs chew on her to get information.  That’d be the proper response to her swinish character. 

Stan being so sexually candid with Oliver is really not that surprising, I have a friend whose step dad was full on crude.  Bought him porno when he was 10...heh...now he say’s he thinks he was just checking to see if he was gay.  I think Stan was trying to demystify sex, so Oliver wouldn’t be a sucker when he started seeing girls.  He didn’t quite manage that.  I’d say he was only a partial success,  but Oliver probably owes his status of fugitive over captive to this partial success.  Hopefully Stan’ll get a chance to make it up to him, where he fell short as a mentor. 

The first thing a successful adventurer/ detective needs to know is “get the hell away from Bakersfield.”

Really enjoying the build up Duggernaut.  Wheels are turning and it’s great.  Thanks for your contribution to the size community. 

pix

Author's Response:

Stan and Oliver have a dad/brother kind of relationship, but it's hard to say what 'little' things stan might have overlooked while oliver was growing up under Samantha's care. One thing we have learned is just how incredibly resourceful Oliver has proven to be.

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2017 5:27 PM Title: Back in Brooklynn

Poor Cam… will he ever get something to eat besides Brooklynn?  Oliver needs to be a bit more careful.  If our health queen had opened her eyes at an inopportune time he would have been seen.  I believe that the sisters have underestimated Deacon, especially if he works in conjunction with Cady.  I think Cady will add her experience and perspective to help Deacon uncover the truth.  Additionally, it won't be long until Stan is alerted and comes into the picture. I’d love to see Stan push back hard against Oliver’s mother, demanding know the truth.  I think the sisters are in for more than they bargained for. Things are about to unravel for the Omegas and the pace will quicken.

Author's Response:

Quite possiblity this whole thing might come to light. I mean its not like they've been doing this for years and years without getting caught. Right?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14 2017 7:05 PM Title: Back in Brooklynn

Oliver's reaction reminds me of that old Merle Travis song (satirizing the even older Lucky Strike cigarette slogan):

"So round; so firm; so fully packed."