Date: December 10 2016 7:17 AM Title: A Quick Schedule Change
The subsequent chapters have been much better in terms of writing ability and pacing. I very much enjoyed your writing of Jen, her power, sadism, and general cruelty was very entertaining to witness. Poor Gina goes through a lot!
Author's Response:
It's good to hear that the pacing and overall writing has improved. I hoped people would like how Jen was depicted, and it seems like that is the case. As for Gina, she ma go through a lot, but she can dish it out as well. Nevertheless, many thanks for your review. It is appreciated.
[Report This]Date: November 26 2016 7:15 PM Title: Nightmares and Bullies
I'd say that this one is even better than the last one. Very solid writing here. I spotted a few tense and syntax errors that you might want to skim through but otherwise this is a fantastic short.
I especially liked the introduction of sweatplay. It isn't really something you see done very well in stories but I think you pulled it off. It's also nice to see you took inspiration form the character bios to create the scenario (Jen's love of her sweaty body and eating her classmates alive, I guess she doesn't mind the taste of her own sweat lol).
It's interesting how Gina can go from seemingly friendly and ordinary to cruel to quivering victim. I'm surprised that this is only the second time we've seen Jen in a story. If there's someone to turn a usual dominant into a frightened bug she's the one to do it.
Once again, great work!
Author's Response:
Many thanks, I was hoping that it would be better than the last one. I need to go back and edit a few things. Also, as for integrating stuff from the bios, that's generally what I end up doing for things. As for Jen being used more, I am also a little surprised she hasn't been used more, since she's most certainly the most cruel of the bunch. Once more, many thanks for the review and the five stars.
[Report This]Date: November 24 2016 9:08 PM Title: Gina's Revenge
Love the way you implemented George!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I thought that George might be the best example since they had similiar height in at least one class. Plus his flaws gave me the perfect excuse for what I used. Many thanks for the review and the five stars!
Date: November 08 2016 6:47 PM Title: A Quick Schedule Change
Thought I'd post this here for those interested.
Character Bio:
Wesley Chen
Height: 5'11"
Age: 18
Asian male, with medium length, dark hair, brown eyes and a medium build.
Class Schedule: History: 120%, Biology: 125%, English: 112%, Mathematics: 150%, Chemistry: 110%, P.E.: 100%
A very academic student, top of the class in nearly all subjects, to the approval of his strict, Asian parents. With no need to worry about size due to his stellar grades, Wesley is relatively laid back most of the time, often helping fellow students improve their grades rather than dominating them due to their sheer size difference. Because of this, he's well liked by most of the students at class of giantess.
However, it's not all perfect for this young Asian student. Wesley's known he's been gay since he can remember, but has remained in the closet throughout his time at CoG. Moreover, he's begun to take a liking to his openly gay classmate, Jeremy Whistler, with whom he shares the same class schedule.
Author's Response:
Though I am involved (by having a characte and making shorts on the occasion) in CoG, make sure you post this in the regular Class of Giantess story made by Silent-One, since she is sort of the head of all of this.
[Report This]Date: November 06 2016 8:53 PM Title: Gina's Revenge
I might sound like a broken record but the second chapter is a major improvement from the first. Did a good job characterizing George as a nervous clutz and Gina as a woman with barely a hair of patience.
I'm looking forward to seeing more of Gina in future shorts. Be cool to learn more about her as a character as well how far she takes payback until she sees it as "even".
Author's Response:
Good to know that improvement was made (I do feel that the first chapter was a bit rushed). As for seeing Gina in future shorts, she will most certainly be around. Sorry for the late reply, forgot to check reviews for a while.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2016 7:14 PM Title: A Quick Schedule Change
The Robin Cameo there at the end 10/10 :)
Author's Response:
Aw, didn't get the elusive 11/10 score. Oh well. Sorry for the late reply, I've forgotten to check out reviews for a while now.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2016 2:18 AM Title: A Quick Schedule Change
I like it! I am glad to see people using this idea more. I hope more people contribute to this universe.
My only real critique would be that you could slow things down some. Which you did in the second chapter. That one didn't feel like it was rushing like the first.
Good improvement!
Author's Response:
First, I do hope more people contribute to the universe, as it is a fairly unique idea. Secondly, I appreciate the five stars that I have received, many thanks on that. Last, I really am glad to hear that I have improved on slowing it down with these short stories.
Date: September 11 2016 5:39 AM Title: A Quick Schedule Change
Nice! Good content, as a critique I would suggest working on your pacing. Spacing out your writing more might assist in that. I speak from experience, I used to have lots of similar issues.
Author's Response:
Yeah, the pacing in this felt poor in comparison to my regular writing. Thank you for the critque, I'll try to keep that in mind as I write next time. Anyways, I appreicate the critique as well as the review, and I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it.