[Report This]Date: October 10 2016 2:48 AM Title: Yuna
Really good. I'd be really happy to see more foot stuff, preferable with a focus on sweat and toe-jam etc), and some butt stuff. I was very glad to see armpit content, so thanks for that! Navel content is really rare, and I think that'd fit well - maybe the girls could do some sit-ups along with their jogging, haha ^^
Apart from that, just keep going as you are. You're doing a great job. My personal resuest would be to have a chapter or two where the protagonist is even smaller, maybe <1mm.
Author's Response:
Hey there!
Thanks a lot for the review!
There will be more of foot content, do not worry! Although our dear giantesses will now start using other parts of their body, it does not mean this will be the end of foot torture :)
As for navel content and getting James <1mm, I'm sorry but I probably won't be able to write anything of that sort. Indeed, those are a not fetishes I'm familiar with, and me trying to do so would result in failure. Hopefully, that's all right with you, and I'll manage to keep you interested in the story with what's to come!
[Report This]Date: October 09 2016 3:26 PM Title: Yuna
Cast a spell to I ncrease the stench of their feet to ungodly levels. Put him in someone's socks or shoes and cast a spell so they don't notice him so he gets tortured and played with unknowingly no matter what he does to get attention. There are so many possibilities.
Author's Response:
Alright, thanks!
I just wanted to be sure by what you meant with "magical ways to punish him".
Your ideas are similar to mines, hopefully you'll love what's to come :)
[Report This]Date: October 09 2016 1:00 PM Title: Yuna
I hope James get through to them that he does not want this.
Author's Response:
Hmm, will he? He tried so much already, nothing worked so far...
He seems to be losing hope. But who knows? He might find a way...
[Report This]Date: October 09 2016 11:13 AM Title: Yuna
Finally a new chapter! ;). I like where this is going. Feet is my preference but ass punishment work too! Try to find some magical way to punish him a lot :)! Those are the best!!
Author's Response:
Hey, happy to see you again!
Any ideas about those magical ways to punish him? :)
Thanks for the review !
Date: September 13 2016 10:35 PM Title: Good night sleep
I liked the story. Nightmare might be quite a nice idea for next chapter
Author's Response:
No nightmare, to my mind, his actual life already is one to him! :)
Thanks for the review, glad to have you there !
Date: September 08 2016 6:41 PM Title: Good night sleep
Armpit fetish is starved for content so this chapter really rocked. Love the chapter dude keep em coming.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review friend !
I'm an armpit lover myself, -more or less-, so that kind of content always make me happy too. Probably will happen again at some point :)
[Report This]Date: September 01 2016 10:46 AM Title: Yuna
Awesome Chapter! I hope there is more Magical Punishments soon those are my favorite when Magic tortures him or forces him in some way to be tortured!!!
Author's Response:
Hmm, I love that too!
I'll probably include that pretty soon !
Thanks for being there, your reviews help me going !
[Report This]Date: August 31 2016 3:20 PM Title: Good night sleep
Great chapter. Loving dominant Yuna and her punishments.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
Hopefully, you'll love what's to come :)
[Report This]Date: August 26 2016 8:38 PM Title: End of evening.
Said it before not into feet but still like this situation. Kind of wished he didn't make it to her foot. I wonder what she'll do now, “I can’t guarantee I’ll give him back in one piece though!” Happy to hear you'lll be adding butt soon. Also about the language if you didn't say anything I doudt anyone would of even known. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot. You following the story although you don't even like feet -which there is an heavy amount in there- cheers me up a lot. Bear with it just a little more, and the content should rise up quite significantly.
Date: August 26 2016 3:02 PM Title: End of evening.
Destroy you? No. Another great chapter I thought.
Your English is good - better than mine in some cases and your writing is near spot on. I know from my own past experience there is a desire to get the latest chapter posted as fast as possible but when you finish, take a breath and set it aside at least overnight then look at it the next day. You will almostalways find something you want to improve.
Faith and Yuna are both incredible. I still think James should be pleading his innocence (sp) more. Your story though and you are doing great!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
carnaj
Author's Response:
And once again, thanks a lot! What would I become without your reviews, I wonder...
I'll keep that in mind, and will do so for chapter 10. It will be hard, but I shall manage to contain my urge to post the chapter too fast, haha!
What is "sp"? Otherwise, I probably do agree. When I read stories, I often, very often, happen to find myself disappointed because the main character, the victim, doesn't try to get out of his situation enough. I'm probably doing the same mistake I've read countless times, and will try to correct that.
I'm glad you find those two girls incredible! It means a lot.
Hopefully, next chapter should be up in the next few days.
[Report This]Date: August 26 2016 2:19 PM Title: Yuna
Hi there,
My only criticism so far, has nothing to do with your English. It's perfect in my opinion. :)
No, the criticism is that I'm reading your story because one of your tags is 'Butt'. So far, I've read 9 chapters. It's good, very good, but I'm not a huge fan of feet and that's all there's been so far.
So, my only advice would be to start planning on using the other tags so that your non-foot audience doesn't leave. :)
Thornton
Author's Response:
Hey there, thanks a lot for your review !
No worries, "Butt" is coming, friend. I've added the tag because at the start of the story I was sure there would be some of it, but I knew it would be a long time from the start. Apologizes if that's what you came for in the first place. I'll start adding warnings about that kind of stuff so readers won't be disappointed not seeing their favourites themes.
In my honest opinion, that tag should become fairly active around chapter 11-12. Before that, bear with me; adding that tag without giving any information about its appearance was my mistake. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll write it down on chapter 1.
Date: August 24 2016 3:30 AM Title: Cleaning up.
Still doing a great job, Max and still enjoying your story.
Faith and Yuna are turninginto quite the evil tormentresses and I don't see much hope for Jay unless one of them actually listens to him and hears why those websites were on his computer. Unfortunately that will probably be Yuna if she takes him to her home later and you already established that she won't care as she wanted him from the beginning.
Keep up the GREAT work!
carnaj
Author's Response:
Thanks for your continued support carnaj, it really helps, and keeps me motivated.
Well, James already had the opportunity to explain the presence of these websites. It didn't work out well for him though. Will he try the same approach again, what is more, with Yuna ? Time will tell !
I'll do my best !
[Report This]Date: August 21 2016 7:59 PM Title: Yuna
Very good addition.
It seems Yuna's feet aren't smelling so bad anymore, Jay hasn't even died ;)
Author's Response:
Jay dying would be the end of his torment, and we don't want that, do we ? ;)
Be sure he suffered an awful lot though, 2 weeks in boots non-stop does grow quite a smell!
Thanks for the review! :)
[Report This]Date: August 21 2016 3:06 AM Title: Yuna
Who are you and what have you created?!
This is so good so disturbingly good!!! The unaware factor that they are actually doing something he hates its really really good. And the english you're using it's excellent! I've got an eye on this story. WTH I've got both eyes and my mind eye on this!
A drop of this story won't be tolerated! 10/10
Author's Response:
Hahaha, thanks a lot for the review! That enthusiasm cheers me up a lot! :)
Damn it, if you won't tolerate a drop, now there's no way I'll stop...
[Report This]Date: August 20 2016 8:44 PM Title: Insanity
Your English is fine! Don't worry about that.
Otherwise, this story is definitely going well, the domineering part is interesting.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
Alright then, I had the feeling I didn't know how to form my sentences anymore while writing. Glad it pleases you!
Date: August 18 2016 7:19 AM Title: No way out
Continue please
Author's Response:
I will, thanks for your comment !
Date: August 17 2016 1:48 PM Title: Yuna
Anothrt great chapter, Max. Loving James being shrunken and at the mercy of his sister and best friend - though they seem to have none. NOTICED THE PUKING THING too but figured it was an oversight.
All in alll you have yet to disappoint. Great work! keep it up!
Author's Response:
Damn it, you saw it too!
Hopefully there won't be any more of those mistakes :P
Thanks!
Date: August 16 2016 2:23 PM Title: Yuna
J'aime beaucoup ton histoire ! Beaucoup de bonnes idées et de situations compliquées pour ce pauvre adolescent ...
J'aime particulièrement le comportement de Faith qui évolue dans la découverte de cet étrange fantasme .Tu as demandé des idées en voici une
: Yuna le garde pour quelque temps chez elle pour bien le former ;) (C'est juste une idée , un conseil fais surtout ce qui te plait !)
Author's Response:
Merci ! :D
Ce n'est pas impossible qu'à l'avenir nos deux dominatrices partagent séparément ce pauvre James ! :D
[Report This]Date: August 16 2016 10:02 AM Title: No way out
I love this story but there is one line you may wanna look at.
the sock’s crevice scent was far more awful than in any other spot, and he couldn’t retain himself: he puked.
“Yuck!!” exclaimed both Faith and Yuna in entertained disgust.
“You’re lucky I don’t make you lick it up as a punishment!
His mouth is sealed by the spell. If he puked he would have only puked in his mouth and have been forced to swallow it. There would be nothing to lick up. Aside from that great chapter and cannot wait for the next!
Author's Response:
You're very right, thanks for pointing it out !
Went a bit too fast on proof reading this one :)
[Report This]Date: August 15 2016 2:08 PM Title: Yuna
I love this story. Sorry I can't offer any contructive criticism, I'm not too great at that haha but thanks for writing this and thanks for the mention. I'm glad my story inspired you.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for the review ! I'm happy it pleases you :)
Your story was awesome, included lots of themes I loved, themes you're finding back here haha !