[Report This]Date: August 12 2016 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
And, in the process of that walk, the true depth of his feelings for Colleen will be...exposed.
*Insert opening bars of DRAGNET theme, here.*
Author's Response:
That would be apt music right then. Exposed indeed. Thanks for commenting and reading.
[Report This]Date: August 09 2016 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
I'm really enjoying your story. Glad now that the mother is finally aware of what is happening and getting involved.
Your characters are believable, which is always good in any story. They speak like REAL people: always a plus. Nothing detracts from the enjoyment of a story (at least for me) is a character that speaks in archaic proper English. Real people say 'it's'... NOT 'it is'. Things like that; the little things you note just make the story better.
Olivia definitely has a cruel streak and seems to love tormenting her step-brother. And now his mother knows what's going on and what seemingly makes Mike shrink. She seemed rather unconcerned at his predicament and actually amused, placing him in a hamster cage. I think poor Mike's in even more trouble now.
Your writing is good and the story flows well leading the reader along at a good pace. No complaints over grammer or punctuation - no glaring mistakes that detract from the story. Looking forward to the next chapter with anticipation. Keep up the Great work!
Carnaj
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind review. I'm glad the characters have some believability and reality to them, at least on some level. I'm glad you like the story so far, and thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
I really liked this chapter. The details you provided were perfect. His step-mother's stunning beauty to her exceptional physique down to the sunflower seeds and raisons' size. Really put the atmosphere into perspective for me.
I really loved Colleen's attitude towards Mike being very playfully nice but still motherly. I wonder if maybe she'll not be concerned with Mike seeing her naked or watching her pleasure herself. She definitely feels extremely confident with Mike now and may try something unexpected(I mean, he saw her naked for a few seconds and instantly shrunk down to an inch.)
I cannot wait to see what you have planned next for Mike and Coleen. I kinda hope she decides to bring him to her work away from Olivia because Colleen doesn't feel like sharing him.
aaron
PS where does Mike go to the bathroom in his terrarium?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad there was some atmosphere put into the chapter with the description. I'm glad you like Colleen's attitude so far. As far as Mike going to the bathroom in the terrarium, I'm not sure. He could ask for assistance or find a corner if no one is able to help.
Date: August 06 2016 5:59 AM Title: Chapters 1-10 (from 2015)
Awesome, now that Colleen is getting into this and how Mike is stuck in a terrarium, its going to be so much fun when Olivia catches him
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. It should be fun when Olivia gets her hands on him again, and Colleen mixes things up. Thanks for reading.
Date: August 06 2016 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
Really liking it so far, well written.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. I appreciate it, and thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: August 05 2016 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
Yeah, I agree. Colleen seems way more exciting than Olivia right now and I can't wait to see what she has in store for Mike.
To solve Olivia's concern, Colleen just has to say that Mike went to school early or something. Just because Mike isn't in his room doesn't mean that he is shrunk.
In the end, Colleen asked Mike if he needs anything. I think Mike needs to get away from Olivia and Colleen should have a "take your son to work" day. That way, he escapes and also Colleen gets to spend time with Mike.
I wonder how sexual Colleen will go with Mike. I hope she goes all the way, after all, she knows that Mike is indeed attracted to her. Since her husband is gone, why not have some fun...
I totoly underestimated Mike's shrinking ability. I thought if he is completely aroused, he will shrink a few feet, but all the way to 1 inch?!! Amazing! And that was just looking at his naked stepmom! What happens when they get physical while they are naked?
A mother always looks at her kids like they are they're her babies. It must feel really good for Colleen to be able to care for Mike once again.
If I were Mike, I would enjoy it while he can. Probably better than being with Olivia since he knows how out of control she can be. Colleen seems like a woman that he can reason with, but I have been wrong before and maybe Colleen will control Mike just like Olivia.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. Colleen certainly has that motherly instinct, and this is new to her now with an incredibly small son. One inch is the smallest Mike shrinks, but he's now on the 24-hour clock until he re-enlarges. Yeah, Mike should enjoy it while he can.
[Report This]Date: August 05 2016 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
I said I wanted more Olivia and Mike, but now I can't help to be so curious for him to spend some time with his 'Mommy'! :o
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. Mommy-time is another twist on the family relations.
[Report This]Date: August 05 2016 9:11 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16
Next up: "The Return of the Spoiled Beeyotch."
Author's Response:
LOL. I like it. And it has a Star Wars theme too. Bitches can be a lot of fun in these type of stories. Thanks for commenting.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2016 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 13 ... 7-29-16
Hope there will be more Olivia and Mike, I loved the way she treats him, and how he can't resist her approach.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I like the interplay between Olivia and Mike as well.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2016 9:18 AM Title: Chapter 13 ... 7-29-16
This story is fun to read. Colleen doesn't seem too serious about punishing her daughter. She appears to be more interested in watching Mike shrink. This doesn't bode well for Mike!
Author's Response:
Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. I agree, it doesn't bode well for Mike.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2016 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 13 ... 7-29-16
What kind of family meeting was that? Haha! Ok, Mike has the shrinking disease, he shrink to 1 inch. He lives in mom's room. And then that's it. Then mom and Mike meet in his room. So the meeting was just announcing where he lives? I agree with Mike, he is right there, he should decide.
Did Olivia really think that her mom would let her keep Mike in her room? Especially after her little stunt? I was shocked that she was surprised with Colleen's decision. I thought it was obvious.
Colleen expects Mike to shrink because he is living with all females, a teenage boy, and that the women have big breasts? First off, there are only 2 females living in the house. Second, a teen is living with his family. I bet he is kinda used to his his hormones. Lastly, he doesn't have to be attracted to big breasts. For me, it's just the shapely figure.
I bet Colleen just wants to shrink Mike so she can see him at an 1nch tall. I think she is still doubting that he can shrink that small so she wants to test it. Pretty easy to do that when now he can watch her strip every day.
I guess it's Colleen time soon. I can't wait for her and the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. Olivia has a fetish for tiny boys, so having him in her room would be ideal... so far it's not happening. I love a shapely figure, plenty of curves and athleticism. Thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2016 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 13 ... 7-29-16
Good luck with that Mike! When I was a high school freshman, one of the first things I noticed about girls was the great legs on the cheerleaders and baton twirlers.
Eng. translation: there are plenty of non-Olivias and non-Rebeccas that are bound to arouse you.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comments. Great legs can be quite arousing. It's one of the things a guy looks up at when shrunk. Good luck is right.
[Report This]Date: July 22 2016 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 12 ... 7-22-16
Am I the only one who thought this was the start of a porno where the stepmom joins the step daughter and her friend to play with the guy?
Well, instead the opposite happens and Colleen breaks down the party. But that last sequence gave me a hint, that perhaps Colleen wants all the fun to herself.
Relationship viewed from a different perspective....hmm. Step mom-step mom, to stepmom, step toy?
I agree with some other comments. Colleen seems like she has something special for Mike and I'm excited to see what is it.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. I appreciate your thoughtful insights. I want the story to develop so that it has nuance and depth, whatever is enjoyable to read.
[Report This]Date: July 22 2016 9:56 AM Title: Chapter 12 ... 7-22-16
Thanks for updating. I this story a great deal. Always hoped that Colleen would get in on this shrinking fun. Can't wait to see what happens next.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. I've always enjoyed your thoughts on this story, which have influenced the direction of it.
Date: July 22 2016 9:15 AM Title: Chapter 12 ... 7-22-16
I really like where this seems to be going
Author's Response:
Thanks for commenting. It could get interesting.
[Report This]Date: July 22 2016 9:08 AM Title: Chapter 12 ... 7-22-16
Mike really should've LOCKED his bedroom door. The fact that he didn't means there just might be something to Olivia's Freudian analysis of her stepbrother.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. Yes, he really should have locked his door. I imagined that he didn't have a lock at all, unlike the rest of his family. Though Mike never requested his stepmom install a lock for his bedroom -- despite the many and often intrusions from his stepsister. So Olivia's Freudian analysis could be true on some level.
[Report This]Date: July 22 2016 9:02 AM Title: Chapter 12 ... 7-22-16
super glad your back. I love the direction your going with the story. How does Colleen handle this situation?
Author's Response:
Thanks for your nice comments. You'll see how Colleen handles the situation soon. Thanks for reading.
Date: July 15 2016 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 11 ... 7-15-16
Yay!!! You're back!
Author's Response:
I appreciate the enthusiasm. Thanks for leaving a comment.
Date: July 15 2016 1:58 PM Title: Chapters 1-10 (from 2015)
I hope it won't be long until his stepmother finds him.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. The stepmother will be getting more 'screen time'.
[Report This]Date: July 15 2016 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 11 ... 7-15-16
Wow, this is a great story! I can't believe that I have never read it before.
The step sister seems way too good to be true. She has perfect everything and double D boobs? And she's only 17? Do these girls even exist in real life? Haha!
Speaking of the step sister, I love her attitude and control over the situation behind her mother's back. She keeps reminding him of her presence and never lets him forget it.
I love the dialogue in the story. Lots of talking, teasing, but I think you need to support that with a bit more action. But, please continue the awesome teasing, it's great. I would just love to have some action with that teasing.
The stepmother seems like a glimmer of hope to Mike, but we don't even know what she is like. It's been all stepsister so far, hence the title, but you would think that after all this time, that Mike would have figured out how to get to his stepmom.
I think he should've used some reverse psychology on Olivia and say "No, please don't take me to mom, please Olivia, don't let her see me like this!" Then Olivia who delights in Mike's suffering, may actually just take him to mom so she can see him suffer. But then her plan backfires as mom takes Mike from her. Mike would then be happy that she fooled Olivia. (I'm sure Olivia is too smart for this, but it's worth a shot.)
If I was Mike, I would just go to his stepmom's room, climb on the sink or something, and then arouse himself on it, so he shrinks on the sink counter and he can hide there until, let's say his step mom brushes her teeth and then he pops out.
Or...when is a giant, just call his step mom, tell her to make sure she is alone, and then tell her all the details.
Maybe, Mike just wants to be with Olivia, becuase he has so many opportunities to go to mom, but he just doesn't want to do it.
I'm also, kinda rooting for his stepmom to find him. I can't wait to see her reaction and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Wow. Thanks for the long review. I appreciate it.
I'm glad you like the stepsister's attitude and the teasing. Thanks for your ideas. I liked your hypothetical scenario where Mike would have used reverse psychology... and shrinking in the sink is interesting as well. Thanks for reading.