I've noticed that you seem to have a problem with differentiating between 'passed' and 'past'. Perhaps I can help:

passed: to go by someone or thing; an active verb

past: to go or look beyond someone or something; to refer to what is done, or behind one; an adverb

Ex: "The blonde girl looked passed him and up, still smilling."

Should be: "The blonde girl looked past him and up, still smiling."

I can see why you would be running into the wall with this. You probably wanted to do something special/new and very entertaining, but every sentence and word have to be in perfect order to pull it of so that all the characters behaviour patterns up to this point feel logical/believable.

The 3 characters are to amazed by the shrinking, that it would seem unlikely that they have that power, but at the same time some actions suggest that they have shrunk people before.

I can't imagine why Asha would lie about it in the last chapter. If she didn't had that power, it would undermine her credibility and Nick would never believe any word of her again.

I got a feeling that someone is toying with Asha to make her think she has the ability to shrink people. Or that she is trapped somehow and has to be freed by someone. That shrinking cloud is a little to convenient that she can't make him grow again. This is done on purpose by someone else.

Asha herself doesn't seem evil/shallow. It looks like she is wearing a mask. Her words are menacing, but her actions throughout the story are of someone with empathy. She acts different from how TJ and Carissa are acting. But they too seem very surprised by the idea of shrinking. But the feeling that at least one of them is pulling a scam here, doesn't go away. That sarcastic response by Carissa to Asha's reveal that she has a talent to shrink people, seems suspicious. Asha is not in the same room with Carissa or TJ anymore and now her powers doesn't work. It would be fun if one of them has been fooling Asha in believing she has that power. ;)

If they have shrunk people before other then each other, than people start to get missing or would talk about it. They probably did it only to each other.

Hope you can evade that wall and implement the idea/twist you wanted to do in a fun and believable way. I enjoyed Michael's Story and Anna's Awakening very much(alas both ended to soon when there was so much potential for even more interesting interactions). Let's see if Nick can be fun. You put a lot of build up into it.

I think you've got something good here. Some things to talk about:

1) Hester and Scott's growing relationship

2) Hester still needs to figure out what Scott made. Will she shrink more people? Will she make a growth potion?

3) What will Asha do now that she knows that Hester's thing blocks her powers? Will she go to Hester and try to figure out what's going on?

4) Could we have some flashbacks showing Asha using her powers?

So, let's see what we've learned so far after thirty-six chapters. Asha and the other two are gifted with a sort of telekinesis that can alter another person's size and mass. A gift that they Gothically regard as "magic" (note the sarcastic quotes, all you Bible-thumping lurkers). But, Scott's little chem-lab concoction somehow interferes with the re-enlargement portion of the tk.

This makes me wonder if Scott might have whipped that stuff up using some old text on alchemy. If so, this raises the question: how did he latch on to it, in the first place? An estate sale managed by one or both of his parents at some recently deceased antiquarian's house?*

*Just spit-balling, Dug.

@Carycomic,

All Toms make giantess women orgasm powerfully. So powerful that it can make people drown. This was no exception. :)

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Lol

Lmao! A cyst! Oh Tom! How little does he know. (To be honest, I probably would think the same thing if I saw that in person.)

It's like when u r in a spa and it's just so hot that you start sweating. The descriptions were phenomenal.

Half hour? Geez! No wonder his skin was messed up. I never knew one can stay inside a vagina that long. Perhaps other giantesses get similar ideas. :)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks Tom!

Yeh, I have to agree with TomSpeedy.   I too, found this episode  to be, 'extremely' comical!  I think it's the fact that  little Scott is such a tool, and now that he's just a fraction of his former size, which completely erases any valuable  strength that he could possibly have, ...and on the other hand, Hester, ...has become this powerful, giant!  And, aside from her intellectual prowess, her new advantage in sheer size alone, could definitely bring things up that had obviously never occurred to her...until Now!

   ...and, he is about to find out, just how Big she actually IS!  ;`)  Great Stuff, Man!

Well mabey Scott will finally get through to Hester's "5 year old emotions" who knows? Mabey Scott will fall for Hester. Cliffhangers all around bro

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Hopefully there is enough curiosity to see what happens to keep readers engaged. :)

Great story!

I'd love to be Asha's pet! Scott charming Esther? I have to see this next chapter, LOL

Author's Response:

There would certainly be worse things to be other than Asha's pet...

Only time will tell for the little hero, Sir Duggernaut. That and your imagination bro lol

Author's Response:

true enough i suppose, :)