[Report This]Date: July 16 2016 11:58 AM Title: Brave New World
Very nice chapter!
The whole experience felt authentic and I loved how realistic they were in trying to resolve what happened.
Yeah, you keep bringing up the scars on Nick. I'm still wondering if that will be of some importance in the rest of the story.
I wonder which room is closest to Nick. We know is not Asha's becuase her room is above Nick's. Maybe it would be one of the parents or they find the family room where someone is already there.
I would just as scared as Tom was if I found myself shrunk. I would panic and think that I coould be killed by anything. Also, I would think about my original life and how it's all gone.
On the other end, Nick is like "yeah, I shrink all the time, now stop crying and let's explore." He sounds like a veteran as if shrinking is nothing compared to what he did in Minnesota.
These two will be fun to follow. I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 14 2016 8:36 PM Title: Hester Primrose
I had to quickly re-check the mandatory descriptors on the title page to see what you meant by "...amidst his clothes." Because that phrase would be pretty ambiguous, by itself! Making me wonder whether or not his clothes had shrunken with Scott.*
*This time, poetry NOT intended. :-)
[Report This]Date: July 14 2016 8:24 PM Title: Afterschool Special
And now the "fun" begins. ;-)
[Report This]Date: July 14 2016 6:18 PM Title: Hester Primrose
Alright! Let's get this show on the road! 1,2,3 guys down. So it look like instead of TJ being a giantess, it will be Hester becuase she has Scott now.
At first I thought she kept the chemical to throw at Scott in the locker room. I guess not, he was already shrinking.
I think Hester will realize that Tom and Nick had been infected and will arrive quickly at the house searching for them. Then Asha and Clarrissa see Hester on the ground searching and Hester let's them know what happened. They all exchange looks and then all search the ground for Nick and Tom.
That's my prediction.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: July 14 2016 5:51 PM Title: Hester Primrose
So Hester, you've kept a sample and you're going to find out just what that stuff is. How's your entrepreneurial spirit? Can you capitalize on an invention?
[Report This]Date: July 13 2016 5:17 PM Title: Afterschool Special
Yeeeeeeaaahhhhhh!
You know what? I think 15 chapters is a good balance of story to setup the shrinking. It's enough time to setup the character and create a way for people to shrink.
Man, I have been waiting for this for months! I can't believe it's finally happening! They are finally shrinking!
I was right that Tom would shrink in Nick's house too. Now I just wonder where will Scott show up.
One prediction that I got wrong was that I thought Nick's dad was going to shrink too. Well, since he is still around, I guess there will be a giant around.
There are still plenty of girls to find these tiny guys. I'm guessing TJ gets Scott, Clarrissa gets Tom and Asha gets Nick. I think those match ups make the most sense.
I wonder who is going to find them? I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 11 2016 6:04 PM Title: Friday Morning - Round 2
Man, I thought this chapter was great! I didn't expect the experiment to happen this chapter, but hey, the sooner the better.
I was right that it was one of Hester's experiments, I just thought Hester was going to use it on all 3 of them when they all were fighting. Haha!
Lol! Prank! Does Scott even know what the heck he put in there? Orange liquid seems to be some scary stuff. Well, now I know how they get infected. Question is, how long until all 3 of them shrink.
I can see Nick and Tom staying at Nick's house after school. How will Scott get there when he is shrunk? Will he stalk Nick to prank him again? Perhaps, TJ picks him up and takes him to Asha or Hester.
The pieces are all falling together. I like it. I can't wait for the focus to be on Asha's house. I bet that's where this story is head and I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 11 2016 5:00 PM Title: Friday Morning - Round 2
The only good thing about Scott the Snot's impractical joke is that he'll most likely wind up in the same condition as Tom and Nick.
Date: July 08 2016 9:02 PM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
When I said Faith, I meant Asha. Both girls from both stories are like the same. Sexy and confident.
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 9:00 PM Title: Nick at Night
Alright more teasing. The good news is that Clarrissa is into it too. She gets what she wants too and that's what makes me excited. Did I say Nick was lucky? Heck yeah, he is. Tom has to arrive her soon. I can't for the look on his face when he meets everyone!
Next chapter could be the "the meeting". Tom wants to visit. Scott tries to spy on Asha. Scott gets caught by TJ. Asha let's out a small scream and Hester's experiment explodes causing all the guys to shrink. The girls wonder what happened and realized that the guys shrunk. Asha is first to decide to have some fun. The guys scatter and the women scatter to get them. Tiny Scott finds Marty and pushes him into the path of TJ's shoe. Marty dies. TJ all furious, snatches Scott and takes him upstairs. Clarrissa catches Tom who faints. Clarrissa takes him with her to her room. Faith gets Nick and Hester has no one. Hester wants a tiny, but Faith tells her that her experiment has resulted in the death of Marty and that she should be punished by not having one. Hester leaves and Faith then plays with Nick. Yipee!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 8:46 PM Title: Asha
Part of me is really jealous of Nick. This girl who is adored by many is trying to get at you and you are playing hard to get which makes her try even more ridiculously sexy things to get you.
The more attractive you are, the more success you will have in life. That's just how life is and when a person knows they are attractive, they can accomplish anything.
These giantess references are killing me! I love it!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 8:36 PM Title: Standing Out
3 chapters! Amazing! I would love to see this on "shoebox" as well. I love these surprise updates!
Wtf Duggernaut! How did you know I have Boom beach on my phone? I thought barely anyone plays it anymore so this gave me memories.
This Tom guy is just like me. He loves Asha and her teasing, treats hotties like they are out of his league and best of all, he is a gamer! For me, it's pc and Xbox, but wow, this is strangly accurate. Lol!
Yes! Tom has Nick's address! I can't wait for him to meet Clarrissa.
Yeah, Hester would be the crazy giantes. TJ seems like the nice one and Asha is the wild and sexy one.
I can't wait for the next chapter! Oh wait, it's already here!!!
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 7:25 PM Title: Nick at Night
Uh-oh! He forgot to _dry_ the rest of the dishes. I wonder if that will be one of the pretenses Asha will use for when she and the other three girls shrink him?
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 7:20 PM Title: Asha
Shades of Fort Sumter! The opening salvo, in this little battle of the sexes, has just been fired.
[Report This]Date: July 08 2016 7:16 PM Title: Standing Out
I love the way you keep the suspense growing. Little bit by little bit. If I had to coin a pompous-sounding phrase to describe it, I'd probably go with...
...delightfully sadistic foreshadowing!
Date: July 08 2016 6:00 PM Title: Nick at Night
You have a marvellous opportunity for a red herring. You've been setting up Asha as the one who will shrink him, but Hester's the one with the science smarts and a crush...
[Report This]Date: July 06 2016 9:46 PM Title: Developing Chemistry and Biology
I'm with Nick. Unfortunately, b-----ds like Scott never fight fair. As soon as it looks like the challenger is starting to win, the loyal boot-lickers perform some kind of major cheat (similar to Abigail's soccer mirror).
Author's Response:
So true! We shall how it all works out in hte end...muwahaha
[Report This]Date: July 06 2016 4:56 PM Title: Developing Chemistry and Biology
Yeahheahh! The trio of guys have been found! I think Hester is another girl going to be a main character was well.
Tom Clady. Hmm. Reminds me of Tom Brady since it rhymes too. Tall and lanky. Interesting. Personally, I don't care much for the appearance of any of the guys, haha!
I'm trying to picture how all these students will get together. Perhaps, Nick challenges Scott to a fight. Nick wins. Nick and Asha go home with Tom, TJ and Hester cheering him. Scott then shows up at Asha and Nick's house and demands a rematch. They file out on the street with everyone watching. Scott pulls out a test tube with stuff in it. Everyone but Nick knows what it is and Tom jumps on Scott to prevent him from throwing it at Nick. Nick, then jumps in the fight and soon the tube breaks, its contents spilling out and the 3 boys inhale the gas. The girls gasp and run inside before they inhale it. The guys start shrinking and the girls return wondering where did they go. The boys each hitch rides on the girl's shoes and get carried into the house where the adventure begins!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hmm, we shall see where this little journey takes us....
[Report This]Date: July 05 2016 11:03 AM Title: Making Friends, The Hard Way
Hoo-boy! I'll bet this is where Asha and TJ shrink him. The former, out of over-protective concern for her new stepbrother. And the latter, out of misguided loyalty to Scottie the Not-so-hottie.
In any case, I hope you had a Happy 4th, Dug. :-)
Author's Response:
Interesting premise. Happy 4th to you Cary! (We had our day up here in Canada July 1)
[Report This]Date: July 04 2016 4:51 PM Title: Making Friends, The Hard Way
Not bad trash talking. Some dick jokes, fists clenched, the "hold me back" to intervene.
I never even knew that Nick was even a little bit muscular. You definately sprung that out of nowhere.
Asha just seems to enjoy everything. People, fighting, classes. She seems always happy. TJ though, we can see her expression change. Little interesting that she feels for Nick. I guess she can't stop "her boy".
So is Scott, TJ's boyfriend? Or are they just close?
Hmm. I'm not sure if this counts as making friends. Still interesting to know that these friends are rivals, and who knows, maybe they respect each other's toughness.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I tried to point out nick's athleticism playing hockey. TJ and Scott may or may not be, you know one of those kind of relationships. Things are heating up!