Date: September 01 2016 5:06 PM Title: Out of Options
Knew it. That whole nice act from the mother and daughter were suspicious from the beginning. The fact that Nick's father is with this type of woman is a total mis match.
Author's Response:
Is it? Or has she herself a pet that suits her needs? Love is blind my friend
Date: August 30 2016 4:29 PM Title: In the Nick of Time
Clarissa and Hester could trade pussy pals.
And the three could get her recipe (once Hester figures it out), and then they could team up. Or fight over shrunken men.
Also, that still leave a question open: what was Asha doing scrabbling around the floor, if they can't shrink people themselves?
Author's Response:
For every question answered, another posed. All in good time... :)
[Report This]Date: August 30 2016 9:37 AM Title: In the Nick of Time
Something tells me Tom has already been promoted to "prototype." Which would make Nick "sloppy seconds." Especially, if TJ and Carissa take him, despite his adamant refusal to volunteer!*
*And, I like the fact that he did. It's refreshing to see a shrunken male protagonist who's NOT an automatic horndog.
Author's Response:
There are onbe or two out there...
[Report This]Date: August 29 2016 6:32 PM Title: In the Nick of Time
Yo Duggernaut, Tj and Carrissa are experts at this teasing stuff. You need to have Miss Harwood do something like this. I would melt if she said that. However, I don't know much about these girls and its doesn't feel as sexy when they say it. Only Asha and her mom can make me tremble like Tom did.
These girls are super horny. I mean, they went straight for the pussy and now they will get even more excited that Asha has got Tom inside hers.
Basically, Nick is going to get fucked next chapter, literally. I wish most girls were into this stuff. They just straight up asked Nick if he wanted to be in their panties. I would have to pinch myself becuase that's how I would have directed this scene. It's a dream come true!
So Tj is after Scott. Asha has Tom. I guess Carrisa gets Nick? What about Asha's mom? You hinted at her being similar to Asha and I'm excited for when she shows up!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
What if Miss Harwood tranfered to this school? Whoa.
[Report This]Date: August 25 2016 7:28 PM Title: Truth Be Told
Tom! You traitorous Asha-kisser.
[Report This]Date: August 25 2016 5:59 PM Title: Truth Be Told
This is every guy's dream come true. This chapter gets an A+. Tom has been that guy who has fallen in love but has no real chance at getting intimate with this girl. Then, somehow, he winds up in her hands and she wants to have some fun with him. Tom just entered heaven and I wish I was in his spot. Nothing better than the girl of your dreams asking you to pleasure her. I'm just cheering, because this is awesome.
Well, Nick is fucked. His secret doesn't even seem so bad, he didn't trust Asha and her friends as giantesses. That's fine. It's in his nature. He likes doing things alone. I don't think Asha should be too surprised about it anyway.
I do love how Asha is seducing Tom to the point that he will do absolutely anything for her. Tom got his wish, now Asha should take advantage and get the most pleasure from it. Use Tom as she likes, nonstop to the point sure he will dedicate his body to be part of her. It's a win-win situation.
Tom's getting laid! Woooooooo! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: August 19 2016 12:20 AM Title: Into the Light
@Carycomic. They are still way to accepting about this situation and TJ mentioned Scott immediately after hearing Nicks short sentence reason. Spoiled girls who get everything they want is the last thing he needs. But let see where this goes. Let's hope Nick's father didn't made a mistake with his new wife and stepdaughter.
The interaction between Hester and Scott seems more interesting for now. Hester can do creative experiments on him like a labrat.
[Report This]Date: August 18 2016 6:22 PM Title: Into the Light
Even if Nick was telling her the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth, I still don't think Asha would believe him. Unfortunately, he's only been telling her three-fourths of the truth, at most.
Which is still 25% of a lie.
[Report This]Date: August 18 2016 5:11 PM Title: Into the Light
Obviously we should have the girls question Tom when he wakes up. The girls might catch some different stories from Nick and Tom and might catch them lying.
Then of course, they can play. They can go about their daily business. You can describe how it's weird for Nick, but awesome for Tom.
Also, Calista still needs to show up. I'm waiting for her to find Tom, if that's what you had in mind.
Well, Asha wanted her friends to help seduce Nick. Well, it looks like that playtime is coming up.
If it's the weekdays, then the girls can take them to school and more fun can happen. (Teacher fun.)
You could also describe Nick's last in here. Perhaps this life changing experience will open him up and he will say something.
I know you are debating where to go from here, but hopefully you find some of these ideas useful.
Interesting to see Nick just reveal himself. I guess he had no choice. The girls would've found him anyway.
Yay! Tom is waking up. More fun!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: August 15 2016 8:43 PM Title: Strange Bedfellows
OK! So, my initial suspicion--that Asha, Carissa, and TJ were already veteran man-shrinkers--has been proven wrong. Which raises the question; were Asha and TJ just doing some kind of role-playing fantasy that first night Nick arrived at his step-relatives' home? That, in turn, raises another question; where did Scott the Snot get that orange goop if not from Asha?*
*Whom I first suspected of having developed it, for man-shrinking, in the first place.
[Report This]Date: August 15 2016 6:27 PM Title: Strange Bedfellows
It's fun to see the excitement in Asha when she concluded Nick was also shrunk and almost certain he was right there, hidden, hearing them.
[Report This]Date: August 15 2016 5:23 PM Title: Strange Bedfellows
Wow! This is amazing! Just like that, they are searching for Nick.
Glad Tom is alive and the injury just looked worse than it actually is. I'm also glad that they felt concerned for his well being. Funny that Asha just cared why was he on her bed.
As soon as they believe that Nick is there, they forget about Tom. Haha! These girls prefer Nick so much that they forgot that there is a little guy next to them.
Now, what will Nick do? Will he be courageous like always and reveal himself, or will he use strategy and watch what they do with Tom. If I were him, either way works. He either gets played with, or he gets to watch them play with Tom. (Maybe not since Tom is injured.)
Asha is quick to understand stuff. Maybe, she can conclude how Tom got into the bed and track down where Nick is by where Tom came from.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: August 11 2016 10:02 PM Title: Alone in the Dark
Ah! But, is Teeny Tom really unconscious? Or, is he positively, absolutely, undeniably, and reliably dead?*
*Sorry! This relatively new size category of "munchkin" made me think of THE WIZARD OF OZ. ;-)
Author's Response:
Time or me will tell...
Date: August 11 2016 9:05 PM Title: Alone in the Dark
Awwww. Didn't want him to die just yet :'(
Author's Response:
Still clinging to life, for now
[Report This]Date: August 11 2016 8:34 PM Title: Alone in the Dark
First off, I like how you didn't title to chapter so you couldn't spoil it.
Second. Wtf. I thought it was clear that choice B was the favorite but instead you combined the two choices and made Tom get crushed, but also live to use more fun.
I hope it's a small patch of blood. Otherwise, Tom is going to miss out on all the fun. Hopefully Hester shows up with some medication that helps Tom recover quickly.
What is it with Tom being injured in your stories? Lol. First Jessica drops him, and now this. I hope Tom can still hear and see all of this, especially Asha crouching over him. It would be quite the view.
If Tom wakes up to the sight of Asha, I bet he will feel better. His dream will come true and he will think that he is in heaven.
You did surprise me Duggernaut. Once, again. I couldn't predict this.
Hopefully Tom is ok.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Wouldn't want Tom to miss out, ;)
[Report This]Date: August 09 2016 7:00 PM Title: The Long Night
B)
I'm not against him dying. But for now, I'd prefer for him to be alive. I like how there are three types of tinies to explore: Scott, the aggressive, dominant and untamable; Nick, the realistic, crafty and mysterious; and Tom, the inexperienced, naive, submissive and romantic (the one I believe wouldn't mind spending the rest of his life tiny, if this meant being with Asha and the girls).
Unless you really don't feel like having him, I believe you may be losing fun opportunities to explore this type of personality with the girls if you dispose of him now.
Author's Response:
I was contemplating the demise as a story development vehicle to justify some future behaviors. I certainly appreciate you writing a review to share your thoughts. As I mentioned in a few other responses the seeds of where I want this to go are beginning to germinate. :)
Date: August 09 2016 8:54 AM Title: The Long Night
It is of my opinion that Tom should not die yet you have very few tinies in this story which means to me you need to be a bit more choosy when it comes to death also the chapter before when you had one of the girls talking about Tom that seems like a good foreshadowing point on something I find that it might be a little wasteful to just drop it like that but that's just me
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for taking the time to share your opinion it is certainly helping me find a direction. The next couple of chapters will see what becomes of our lovestruck tiny. :)
Date: August 08 2016 10:30 PM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
If I were Tom, I would charge straight to Asha's panties. He declared his love for her and since Tom is already about to be found anyway, he might as well just go all out and live out his fantasy.
He should find her panties, climb inside and just drift off to sleep. Let his dreams be filled with sex and desire. If he wakes up, the dream becomes a reality.
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 8:59 PM Title: The Long Night
I've never really been a fan of the unaware genre, doesn't really do much for me. I like knowing, conscious interaction between characters. But it'd be a waste for Tom to die at this juncture. He and Nick play off each other pretty well and are good foils to one another. Nick being brooding, clear headed, and a thinker. Tom being a heart on his sleeve sorta guy, impulsive, and not having the best of judgement. There's more avenues to be explored as far as the extent of Tom's infatuation with Asha and how far he'd be willing to go to please her
Author's Response:
Thanks for sharing your feelings. After reading the reviews here it has helped me to decide on a course of direction. You correctly point out how Nick and Tom are complimentary and work well in tandem. There are a host of possibilities yet to be explored...