[Report This]Date: September 18 2016 9:24 PM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
Limp arm? Hopefully this doesn't mean R.I.P. Tom, does it? Dun dun da, the suspension continues! Rooting for ya Nick! Nice to find one male tiny who isn't as horny af. Great story buildup I'm on the edge of my seat for the next chapter!! :)
Author's Response:
Hi SoinaGirl thanks for the read and taking the time to share a review. Nick has decision to make. The lady or the tiger?
Date: September 14 2016 11:44 PM Title: TJ, Carissa, and Tom
Interesting chapter. Indeed LJin and TomSpeedy. But there is more going on here.
Author's Response:
Hmm...subterfuge? Me? ;)
[Report This]Date: September 13 2016 9:49 PM Title: TJ, Carissa, and Tom
Wonder if Tom still would say 'heaven' again, knowing this beforehand.
Author's Response:
One person's heaven... eye opening to say the least for our little friend
[Report This]Date: September 13 2016 6:19 PM Title: TJ, Carissa, and Tom
To be fair, this is a very accurate description of what would happen if I was in this position.
I would dream of Tom's adventure inside Carrisa but as soon as I actually am inside, I would panic. I would fear for myself becuase of the loss of direction, everything is set and I can't hold anything.
However, I keep telling myself that it's just like a roller coaster ride. Once you are in, you just got with it and let the ride take you all the way to orgasm and the ride is over.
I'm glad it's not over. Part 2 with TJ is coming up. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
The ldealized notion as opposed to the practical reality. Either go with it or get swallowed up by it, wait in this case that could be the same thing
[Report This]Date: September 13 2016 5:18 PM Title: TJ, Carissa, and Tom
In a strange way, this chapter reminds me of the old Hawaiian fable about how Death first came into the world.
Date: September 11 2016 2:40 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
Thanks edexdexx, you get it. Asha won't be satisfied, even if Nick goes willingly now thanks to weird chemicals, in her mind she doesn't believe it. What Tom told her was really a blow to her ego. Someone called her out for what she really is or has been acting like. That will linger in her mind. Wonder if this is Asha's true character.
Author's Response:
The dynamic between Nick and Asha may be shifting under the light of unflinching truth and who knows for sure how this will manifest...well me maybe :)
Date: September 11 2016 2:17 AM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
@edexdexx,
That is such a great point. I should have seen it myself. Well said.
Author's Response:
Yep!
Date: September 10 2016 8:03 PM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
@TomSpeedy Sure she could forcibly have her with him with ease right now, but that'd give her little satisfaction. Every other guy has always done whatever she wanted at a moments notice, but not him. Victory in her mind would be Nick willingly submit to her charms
Author's Response:
Exactly right. :)
[Report This]Date: September 10 2016 4:34 PM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
That was intense. While I admire Nick trying to resist Asha, why doesn't Asha use force to take Nick and use him. Does she follow some code of sexual honor?
What I like is how seductive Asha is trying to be and how resistant Nick is trying to be. In the end, I hope Asha wins, becuase we know that's when the fun starts.
What I'm excited for is next chapter with Tom. While Asha is the queen of this, I wonder what Carrissa and TJ have in store for Tom.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Asha is a confident young woman flexing her seductive muscles and trying to bend Nick. She could very well just do what she wants, but the victory as others have noted would be hollow.
Date: September 10 2016 11:04 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
Wanted to reply to the comments and than I see a new chapter. ;)
I expected this type of conversation. Nick reacted good with honesty, I hope he has a smart follow up and acts calmer. If his conviction is strong and if he has taste for good character women, than it doesn't matter if he gets forced or just do it willingly to get it over with. It is just sex. Just keep your mind sharp for the days to come. Look if there is a way to grow back or to get transfered to a more mature person/woman or that at least the important people know about it, so that you can't be killed off without consequences. Hope he is a smart character and can see through Asha's mental weaknesses.
The problem is that stuff what Hester was working on. It probably does more than shrinking alone.
Author's Response:
True enough. There are layers of complexity to this situation and its entertaining to try and navigate down this path without sacrificing character defining traits. Not yet sure what I'm going to do with Hester. Her stunted emotions may lead her down a dark path...
[Report This]Date: September 10 2016 10:43 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
You know, I was just talking with someone about science fiction (from the 1931 FRANKENSTEIN w/Colin Clive and Boris Karloff, to STAR TREK: TOS) being the medium for controversially serious messages. And, here you are, demonstrating just that!
Talk about uncanny coincidences.
Anyway, in this chapter, you've brilliantly used the arguement between Asha and Nick to outline the pros and cons of gts-fanfiction, in general. Even if that hadn't been your intention! In most shrunken man stories, the guy shrinks instantly and mysteriously. And, almost immediately, he's found either by a domineering nymphomaniacal stranger; or the object of his unrequited crush...who then becomes a domineering nymphomaniac. And, if they're both teenagers, the male almost always gives up way too quickly. With the side-effects (namely, the parents of the missing young man) never shown to any extent!
Yet, you wisely chose to ignore that stereotype by having Nick explain his reluctance in very clear detail. Including the strong implication what Nick's sudden and inexplicable absence would do to his father (whom he doesn't hold a grudge against)!
Whew! Didn't mean to get so long-winded. It's just that it's so rare to find such an in-depth chapter in one of these stories that there's no other word to describe it except...refreshing. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you i appreciate your astute observation in relation to generalized archetypes in this style of work and thought it would be interesting to adopt an alternative approach for this character. :)
[Report This]Date: September 07 2016 7:15 PM Title: Scott and Hester
Typical Lothario move: mix bits of truth with the self-serving bullcrap.
Author's Response:
Oh yeah, you nailed the type
[Report This]Date: September 07 2016 5:02 PM Title: Scott and Hester
This is funny. Hester can't decide if what Scott is saying is tru or bs. She countered him, but he recountered her back.
Let me guess. Hester gets horny being called beautiful and thinks that she should play with Scott and he wouldn't mind since he thinks that she is pretty. Right? That's what Hester is thinking, right?
I can't wait for Asha and Nick next chapter. Scott wants her, I want her, Tom wants her. We all want Asha and she is coming up next chapter. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
You have to remember Hester's social awkwardness which might make her more malleable to Scott's manipulation if he plays it right. If...
Date: September 04 2016 2:59 AM Title: Out of Options
@edexdexx. I read the story again. It is hard to find out. It is such an important factor. It would make a complete different story from the othe possibility. There are hints that she could have that power and how does that talent work if she has. Without effort or with some incantation or posion and/or preperation needed?
When I read from the moment they are shrunken in the house to the last chapter. Almost everything indicates that Asha doesn't have that power or her friends. But the way they act and are quickly comfortable with it can make you think otherwise because of the earlier chapters. It is layed on to thick with the hints that she/they have the power to shrink people. They could just be into rollplaying GTS/shrinking games and that's why there were such noices in night in Asha's room. And they already wanted to break him and with this opportunity and short time window and Tom the blabbermouth revealing everthing, giving Nick a real disadvantage, could result in this kind of behaviour/lie of Asha to trick Nick into doing something before moms comes home.
Nick could ask her to prove that she can grow him back.
Author's Response:
Hey Barrowman,
Yeah i tried to weave enough doubt into the story to make the reader wonder, can she, or can't she? We'll find out in the chapters to come, :)
[Report This]Date: September 03 2016 9:01 PM Title: Out of Options
Like Barrowman I'm also suspicious of Asha trying to deceive Nick into believing she has the powers to shrink things. If she can do that, then naturally her leverage would increase since she could make him do what he wants with him under the impression that complying to her whims would make her return him to normal.
Author's Response:
True enough, but the question remains whether or not she's capable of following through or not or if she's lying to instill false hope or enticement for him to yeild to her. Time will tell.
Date: September 02 2016 1:08 AM Title: The Tribulations of a Broken Marriage
@LJin. I like the way you're thinking. Good character. Even if you have to be humiliated, don't give in. Be defianed and if there is no possible way to avoid be stuffed into something, than let it happen without emotion or something that doensn't satisfy them. Judging by there reactions and actions afterwards you can find out with what kind of people you are dealing with and adjust your plans how to deal with them.
Author's Response:
There is so much wreckage in Nick's life and so little he is in control of, this may be a defining moment in his life to try and retain some sense of personal power even in the face of such overwhelming adversity.
Date: September 01 2016 11:54 PM Title: Out of Options
Asha is now deceiving Nick. Telling him that story seems unnessecary. I smell deception.
I wonder if Nick is in more danger if Asha has those powers or not. Both of these possibilities can make an interesting survival story for freedom. I'm not so much interested in people getting stuffed in asses or being eaten. It is useful as a means to vilify the women who do that or for revenge. Just so long as the characters feel like human beings and the story is good. Their must always be balance.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2016 9:01 PM Title: Out of Options
Still cheering for Nick. Show them your will remains the same even at this size! Don't give up!
Author's Response:
we'll see how nick deals with the situation, though he's kind of behind the eight ball given the extreme size and access disadvantage.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2016 7:08 PM Title: Out of Options
"You can't tell me you're not curious."
My dear Asha. The word "can't" implies inability. NOT unwillingness! Although, in this case, he truly was unable to tell her that he definitely wasn't curious. Still stunned, as he was, by the seeming unreality of his situation!
So, now, the only way I see left for him to convince her of his unwillingness is to be a literal pain-in-the-Asha.
[Report This]Date: September 01 2016 6:27 PM Title: Out of Options
Asha, your teasing,....so good! I'm so jealous of Tom! He is in heaven! I love how Asha just keeps him there.
Nick doesn't stand a chance. He will wind up in their clutches. I just don't think that Asha will want to let Tom out.
I totoly forgot about Asha's mom! I can't wait for her to make another appearance. I hope she snatches Tom too.
This chapter brings a lot of new possibilities. I can't wait for the next one!