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Reviewer: tweaky Signed [Report This]
Date: November 14 2008 2:48 PM Title: Chapter 3: Laurel's Tears

Great story.  Ch.4 confusing and gets off track unless it leads to a justifiable fetish finish.  Best part was her sitting on him in car since it used the giant ass fetish in a non-crude manner.  The reader feels cheated, because it's so well-written and we look forward to a sophisticated giant ass or pussy finish.  Keep writing!!

Reviewer: Vord Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 06 2007 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 1: Hope for the Future

Pretty damn good, I like how it's developing.

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