[Report This]Date: April 28 2016 3:36 PM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall
I really like how you wrote path 1 you really ilustrated the hoplessnes of their situation. However I'm going to have to agree with everyone else and say I lerfer path 2 it seems more in keeping with the adventure that this character is going on. I think it works to keep him going through various environments and dangers and seeing different sized giantesses. The prison setting was well done i just would perfer for the story to keep moving if that makes sense.
Date: April 26 2016 8:01 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
On the subject of the latest chapter well done! Can't wait for the next insert.
Your storytelling really shines through. I'll have to insert better writer notes at a later date but right now just personal critiques.
Love Part 2 the best! I love the descent into apocalyptic nature and the return of the black painted toes! Those are my favorite! Black better than red!
My vote's for you to continue part 2! It's the greatest and we have too few truly grand apoclyptic GTS stories. This one really shines, both in GTS material and personal interaction.
Also it's not very often, at this scale, to get a first person view from a smaller character. Usually you just get third perspective GTS at this size so bold and very well done choice! Love first person giga!
Also, if she is dead I will miss Amy. Sad to see the characters go. Really great character work. Poor girl.... D:
All in all good work! Love what you've done so far! :)
[Report This]Date: April 26 2016 4:12 PM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall
Neither path is bad, but I vote Path 2.
Date: April 26 2016 3:04 PM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall
Both paths seem kind of rushed. You can feel the indecisiveness. As to which path I prefer, it's hard to say. I'd like to think that Amy is still alive, so maybe you can give readers that hope which they can cling to? Even if it's a false sense of hope. I don't want her to die. I felt sad when she died.
I wonder about the toes too. Does that giantess give birth to the others? Does she even have any special powers besides being big? What can she do, if anything, that an ordinary giantess, or even human, if her size cannot do? And, surely, she can't stay in the same position forever, can she?
I am sure that you'll explain this all in more detail later. I like the story and I want to see it succeed. Keep at it!
Date: April 26 2016 5:14 AM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall
I'm more inclined to Part 1. Seems like Part 2 was meant for a later part of the story. I want to see the Sacrifice camp for a little while longer.
Also, how come the Toes don't move? It's got to be uncomfortable to stand there for days on end.
Date: April 24 2016 9:19 AM Title: Captive
This sounds like nice twist. Unexpected certainly. Your story is getting better. By the way, I created a giantess which I think is perfectly evolved to hunt for humans (your story spurred me to do this). You might find some inspiration in it. You can let me know your thoughts on here or on Deviantart since I created a Journal entry. I wonder if this is now you imagined the giantess in Surviving with the Giants (minus the boots of course): https://mega.co.nz/#!Hd8zQQjY!6lvOrj08tFAQvp4FVbDwEs-sGAYSrQjdWq84ug0W-Ko
Date: April 22 2016 9:24 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I am so stoked for the next few chapters, I love the addition of this group of people. The aliens have established their own little settlements and now rule as gods over the little people. If someone is getting sacrificed then there will be interaction with the giantesses, which I am looking forward to.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hate to burst your bubble but it seems like there is a bit of a misunderstanding. The base is not set up by the aliens but rather the people. My idea was that they tried to rebuild civilization but then this alien came along, and after some sort of events, now they have to make a sacrifice to her in order to stay aloe and keep their base intact. Also, if you'd like, you can leave a suggestion for the next chapter or few, since I had a very different idea for the future than what it seems like I'm getting from some reviews.
[Report This]Date: April 22 2016 9:20 PM Title: Captive
You should tag this as new world order. I really like the post apocalyptic survival type giantess stories. Personally i would like to see them invading the giantesses living spaces so they can hide in shoes and panties and shit. I like where the sacrifice story is going though.
Author's Response: I would have tagged it new world order but I can't. I do all my work on mobile and I've tried adding tags, but whenever I do, it just refreshes the page and I can never add the tags. I'm glad you're like the story so far. For the invasion thing, I think that's a pretty cool idea, but if I did it, it'd have to be later in thr story, maybe after they get a lot more weapons and an "army" of sorts or something.
Date: April 22 2016 8:00 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I was wondering if you were planning on updating any of your other story's
Date: April 21 2016 6:06 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
Wow, is he really working for the giantess ? If he is then it means they have found a way to communicate and perhaps build to something.
Author's Response: Sorry to say but he is not working for the giants. The attackers are, in a way, but not really "working" for them. Hopefully it will be cleared up in the next chapter.
Date: April 19 2016 12:12 AM Title: Shadows and Music
That chapter was confusing. I enjoyed it, but it was confusing. My instinct given there will be "giantess content" in the next chapter is he serves/works for a giantess.
Those horror moves with child sound so boring and full of cliché. This laughter is batter I guess? Was the laughter still female? It was hard for me decide how loud it was. Or maybe it's purposefully confusing?
Author's Response: Yes, the chapter was intentionally confusing. None of the three know what is going on, and since it is from Joe's point of view, the reader wouldn't really know, either. As for the clichés, I kind of put them there on purpose. I know they're cliché and even the characters know they are. My idea was that the attackers had watched these movies in the past and used the ideas from the horror movies on their victims. For the laughter, my intention was not female, but it's up to the reader. I was just imagining some sort of maniacal laughter and wasn't too concerned with who it was coming from.
[Report This]Date: April 18 2016 10:49 PM Title: Shadows and Music
Never EVER appologize for content and character development over smut. The two are not mutually exclusive!
Date: April 13 2016 12:14 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
In addition to my previous review, I wanted to let you know that I've added a guide on how to add images to Giantess World stories and summaries. You can find it in the "Journal" section of my Deviantart page.
Date: April 12 2016 4:24 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
Instead of giantesses seeing more types of light than humans can, having them have a vastly superior sense of smell than humans have may be easier for you. Either way, what I'm trying to get at is it will damage the giantess if she's constantly got to have her head facing the ground (in particular if she's next to a building or looking through rubble). If she doesn't want to deform her spine then she'll need to rely on other senses, whatever they may be, and not sight.
My HTML guide for Giantess World should be ready by tomorrow., and a link to download it will be added to Deviantart in a Journal post. I'm currently also doing a series renders to create an image called "The Perfect Man Hunter", because my reviews to your story got me thinking. The image, I will detail all of the features that would come together to create the ultimate predatory giantess (because people don't often consider how evolution would affect giantesses). I'll have a front view and a side view and I'll be zooming in to various body parts to explain why they are designed in that way. Maybe I'll write my own inspired by this one and based on the ultimate man hunter – but first I have to finish Gems of the Sky (which you can find by visiting my profile).
Date: April 12 2016 12:19 AM Title: Survival of the Fittest
That was a scary chapter. The decription of the giantess was nice. I guess they don't cut their hair. That put an image in my head: Of this giantess just barely able to see through a thick, long, fringe. Perhaps they have other sense? Breasts could be a second set of eyes for a giantess, perhsp. After all, they are no truly human.
Nipples could be the 'irs' and inside the breast there is the capacity to see parts of the EM specturm that humans cannot see, even if not very well. The layers of rubble may distort the image or they have to conciously make the switch between 'visible lighjt' and, say, infared light. If they survive by destroying cities and eating 'lesser beings' perhaps they should have evovled such a capability because it would help them hunt.
Some real world animals can see more of the light spectrum than humans can. For a giantess, the infared specturm would be an more effective way of viewing the world given all the destruction because they'd detect the hear signature of humans. So it would make sense that they wouldn't care how much hair go in the way of their eyes.
Here:
"Me, too," she replied. She wouldn't really look at me.
Maybe a better wording is:
"Me, too," she replied, not really looking at me.
And here:
If she came win me
You mean: With
Here: Stacy lie on the ground on her stomach
I think you mean: lay
Here: Brown hair covered most of her fave
You mean face
(also this "brown hair covered most of her face", put an image in my head and I'll probably do another render because I like the chapter). I'll also be creating a guide on Deviantart on how to post image linkes to Giantess World. Because people can do better than simply copying and pasting the web link,
Author's Response: The other sense is a pretty cool ode. I don't know much about light, so I'm not sure how well I could write about it if I did. Thanks for spotting out the typos as well. As for the link, I've tried to get it to work since I know a little code but it isn't working. It's the a href tag, right? I looked in the list of allowed tags but I didn't see it. That guide could be helpful as I thought the was the link tag but I guess it's not.
Author's Response: The other sense is a pretty cool ode. I don't know much about light, so I'm not sure how well I could write about it if I did. Thanks for spotting out the typos as well. As for the link, I've tried to get it to work since I know a little code but it isn't working. It's the a href tag, right? I looked in the list of allowed tags but I didn't see it. That guide could be helpful as I thought the was the link tag but I guess it's not.
Date: April 05 2016 9:42 AM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I wonder if he will fight the giantesses at some point? I am torn between wanting him to go from person to person and actually interacting with the giantesses at this point.
[Report This]Date: April 05 2016 4:04 AM Title: Search for Supplies
Great new chapter. Maybe he can become friends with the toes later on lol. Keep up the great work.
Date: April 04 2016 4:37 PM Title: Search for Supplies
And thanks for the feedback on the render. Matbe I'll make more in the future. You can link to image by using image links. Giantess World accepts image link and you put it as HTML into a chapter. Not too difficult. But if you are unable to I'll show you how.
Date: April 04 2016 4:33 PM Title: Toe-tal Annihilation
I thought about your reply. Maybe you can say something along the lines of "after such and such an event I fell asleep. After I woke up again this happened. (Or in the morning this happened.)" It maybe "I was go tried so I tried to sleep. Then when I woke up..."Creative writing is an art form and I can see your driver to create a masterpiece.
Date: April 04 2016 3:59 PM Title: Search for Supplies
I appreciate the update. It was exciting. Scary, but exciting. I'm not sure I agree with the time skip though: You could have had a paragraph to quickly link the tow distinct scenes together.
I eagerly await more? I know you can do it! It's nice waking up in the morning to a new chapter of a story I'm enjoying.
Author's Response: Thanks! I understand your point about the paragraphs but I'm not sure how to do it, as the main character would be asleep at the time and this could not experience any events. Great job on the render, by the way.