Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13 2016 5:53 AM Title: Breezy Park

Nice start. Well done.
Later,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Inwiththebooks Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12 2016 3:25 PM Title: Breezy Park

Howdy, long time viewer of yours. I've been meaning to comment on one of your stories for a while now. I have to say theres pretty much no one on this site who does short stories quite as well as you do. At least in my opinion. I've enjoyed quite a number of them, though I'll admit "A Rough Night With Daphne" is probably my favorite of yours. 

As to this one, comes with what I've come to expect from you. Flowing dialogue and believable interaction with the world around them. Your descriptions frankly have me a little jealous as mine typically come off as dragging on and a bit long winded. Yours are concise and still manage to paint an excellent picture. 

I like seeing the 'shrinking' or 'shrunken' aspect used moreso than straight up macro so your stuff is typically right up my alley you might say.

I will say to whomever is thinking about reading you should most certainly give it a go. Can't recommend Black Neptune and his works highly enough. 

Author's Response:

Oh wow. Thank you for the kind words and recommendation!
My writing has definitely improved since I started writing macro fiction, but I still have a ways to go, especially when I read other stories that are much better-written than what I'm currently capable of.
But I'm happy that you enjoyed this story and my other ones. I'll strive to make future stories I come up with equally if not more enjoyable. :)