Reviewer: gtstory Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2018 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 15

Hi! Since you asked, I tried to send you some of my thoughts via the contact system here a couple days ago, but just realized my account here is set up not to notify or forward, so not sure if you ever got it. Honestly, no worries if you decided not to read it or feel it's better not to comment on it (didn't expect you to), but if you you could, just let me know if you got it or not. If not, I'll try sending it again. (You can just reply here... though if for some reason you wanted to comment on it, probably best to reply to the yahoo email I included in the message).

And to keep this as a review as well... I just read Chapter 15 again (for a great book-like story like this, I make sure to print out the chapters and have them in my hand) and wow, I'll say it again... what a great chapter! This is such an amazing story!

Author's Response:

unfortunately I didn't get your thoughts. I guess the contact system on this site leaves much to be desired. I still really want to hear them, especially now that I've released the newest chapter! Please, send me your thoughts from before and after reading it, I'm curious. Here's an email you can contact me with: fawkes7347@gmail.com

I definitely want to hear your thoughts, though don't expect me to tell you whether or not any of them are right or not, I wouldn't dare spoil anything for you by confirming or denying anything. Thank you again for commenting and complimenting my work gtstory, and enjoy Chapter 16

Reviewer: 280077s Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06 2018 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 1

Welcome, no prob ^^

Reviewer: gtstory Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05 2018 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 15

Wow, I don't know what else to say, except what a chapter! I couldn't even wait until I read it a 2nd time, I just had to post here right away. It was perfect, all the way around. I'm not sure what you wanted to re-do, but one couldn't have asked for a better chapter. As I'm sure you know, every creative work evolves as part of the process. No symphony, song or story is ever what its creator's first scribbles were. And the fact that you're writing it chapter-by-chapter (instead of being able to do it as a block, and go back and change things if needed) makes it even more impressive. (And yes, I definitely caught some hints and foreshadowing that you left throughout the story here and there, in case you chose to expand on them). While most authors don't have to work chapter-by-chapter, some really good books have actually been written that way, including the original "101 Dalmations" (the wonderful original novel by Dodie Smith, not the Disney movie adaptations). It was originally written in serial form in a British magazine, one chapter a month.

You asked if people reading this story felt as if they were reading a book. I ABSOLUTELY do feel that way with this. A really good story will stay with the reader long after one has finished reading it, as this has definitely done with me. It's a testament to how well you've written it, as well as the characters you've created, that I can't help myself but want to read it again, and think about this story even after setting it down.

This brings up another point (you mentioned you didn't mind long posts) :) Normally with something this good, I'd very much be posting my thoughts on things such as what might happen next, comment on any foreshadowing I've noticed, offer some possible outcomes I've thought of, etc. It's a story very much worthy of that. But I haven't done so for one very important reason: the creator of the work (who is still creating it) is reading this forum. I don't know how you work as a writer, but I know if it were myself writing the story, as much as one part of me might want to see others actively participate and take an interest with posts like that, I would (if I was honest to myself) in the end not really want to see such thoughts and suggestions from others while still writing the story. If someone out there were to think of something I hadn't thought of that I liked, I'd feel weird about using it, and bad if I didn't. And even if all they did was guess exactly what I had already planned to do anyway, having someone else mention it publically first would make it like a spoiler to others, and I'd almost feel pressured to go another route, instead.

I'm writing all this to let you know that, if you were, say, a TV writer who I knew would never see these comments (at least while the work was still being created), I'd be commenting much more on this story, with thoughts, ideas, possible outcomes, etc  -- because it is very much that good of a story. But the reason why I won't do so, is precisely because I want to let you write the story your way. If you are actually curious and feel sure that hearing such things won't affect you (I don't know if I could ever feel that way) I'd be happy to send you my thoughts in private email, even to a disposable email address somewhere, but will not post those kind of comments publically -- not because I don't want to, but because I like this story too much, and don't want to influence it or spoil it for others.

I guess what I'm saying is, it can seem strange seeing comments every chapter that say only "great chapter!" but I'm limiting my comments to reviews only, exactly because I love this story too much. Please remember that, if all you see in a future review from me is simply "another great chapter!" :)

This was indeed a really good chapter, with way too many good parts to mention, as the entire chapter was amazing. With Annallya's mom showing up at the end, the next chapter(s) are going to be very crucial. As much as I enjoyed this whole chapter from start to finish, for some reason, one line that stood out was when Annallya said: "When Titans are little girls, we are taught of our unique ability to change our size, though we understand almost nothing about it. Despite our gift, we rarely use it." That line tells a lot more than at just first glance -- that being able to grow small can indeed be a gift, even if others of her kind don't see it that way.

Anyway, keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Wow. I told you I don't mind long comments, even enjoy how well informative they are, and you delivered. Where do I begin? *cracks knuckles*

For starters thank you for saying how much you enjoyed the chapter, I enjoyed writing it and seeing how it evolved as the direction of it changed. And thank you for appreciating how I'm doing this chapter by chapter. Although I have a solid idea of how the plot's going to develop, it is a bitch to keep things consistant when they've pretty much already been set in stone. But that isn't a big issue. And you've noticed the foreshadowing? Nice! All I can say is that some things hinted at before are going to have some relavence in these next few chapters. The only hint I'll give you is in chapter 10. And I'm only giving hints because it's a bit of a break between chapters so I don't expect you to remember everything all the time.

I am so relieved that my story has come out feeling like a book. All I've wanted is to write a legit fantasy story with the whole nine yards. Swords, bows, heroes, fun characters, adventures, danger, and of course giant women. So this has been a big accomplishment for me, and the fact that readers like you are enjoying it so much is just a ton of icing on the cake.

Now you bring up an interesting topic that I have experienced before in my other stories, when readers discuss what they think will happen next. Most of the time I enjoy hearing their thoughts, especially when I've already got my mind set on what is yet to come. My favorite part is when everyone is convinced that a chapter will go one direction and then suddenly they get hit with a twist (kind of like the last few lines of this chapter). Some times I've received some good ideas from comments that I sort of worked off of. I didn't exactly use the entire idea, but took it, changed it a little, and then adapted it into what I had already had in mind so that it almost becomes a separate idea, just not an entirely original idea, which does sometimes feel weird, like I'm plagerizing or something. On some occasions someone has guessed something correctly and I was concerned that it would no longer feel as surprising or suspensful. That hasn't happened yet with this story, but know that I greatly GREATLY appreciate your consideration for this issue. Forfeiting all of your guesses just so that you don't accidentally spoil the story is an incredibly gracious thing to do.

If you want to share your ideas with me though, I would love to hear them. Just go to my profile page and hit Contact next to my Penname.

I agree with you. These next few chapters are going to be crucial, and I can't wait to get started on them. So until the next chapter comes out gtstory, thank you for everything you've said.

Reviewer: HABERZphantom Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2018 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

I have to admit that this is one of the few stories on this site that has made me care about these characters, really looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Well then you're going to like the next chapter, when we learn more about them. Thank you for caring

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21 2018 4:46 AM Title: Chapter 14

It's nice to see more updates for this story, and the quality of this chapter is definetly up to par!

I also know why Annallya is sort of proud: she basically crushed a professional spy like any other grunt. She gave the impression of the entire city being under attack, while barely being taken seriously by her peers. Good work Annallya!

I also wanted to say that a new chapter in this story always lights up my day, thank you for that.

 

Author's Response:

Glad to see that the increased pace for pumping out chapters hasn't diminished the quality of my writing.

And I agree, I'm proud of her myself for how far she's come.

I've already started on the next chapter, so look for updates throughout the week. I'm setting a goal for myself to have it finished at least by the time the week is done. Thanks for reading and commenting

Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2018 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 14

Incredible story! I do adore the formal dialect the Titans use when speaking which I feel makes them lovely despite the way they treat the humans. It really makes it look like their some form of angels or something that are "guiding" the humans. 

 

Annallya working with Gaelin to free Andrill and the others was both an amazing and touching scene at the end of the chapter. We also got to see a bit more of Gaelin's remarkable skills at work. I do feel like Annallya basically saying if there were male Titans, the world would be doomed because of their egos was a bit harsh and hypocritical of her seeing as she as well as a good deal of Titans have egos that matches their full sizes plus, their here fighting wars with each other seemingly constantly and enslaving humans. Maybe it would be worse if there was male Titan but she wouldn't know that. Not every man has a large ego or are brutes who think of violence, afterall.

 

Hope to see more. You've definitely got me enraptured in this tale with your outstanding writing and colorful characters. 

 

Author's Response:

Hey, thank you for the compliments, and especially in noting the difference in how Titan's speak. I added that little detail to give the Titan's an extra quality that would make them appear superior to humans. I was actually trying to model them after greek/roman style goddesses so that, in all outward appearances they would look and act superior to humans. Inwards, however, you'll find the opposite to be true.

 

I'm also glad you liked their teamwork in helping the humans escape. As far as Annallya's remarks go, don't worry, she didn't actually mean any of that. She was just ranting and raving out of distress because she was worried for our little protagonists, Gaelin in particular. It's my little way of showing how much she actually cares about him, while staying consistent with her personality. I'll continue to develop that throughout the rest of the story.

Hope to have the next chapter out soon. Till then, thank you so much for reading and commenting

Reviewer: HABERZphantom Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2018 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really good chapter. I'm excited to see where you are going with this

Author's Response:

Then I'll have to make sure not to take too long with the next one. Till then, thanks

Reviewer: Sir Purple Wolf Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2018 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 13

Very well done:)

Obviously it will be nice to see more chapters more frequently but if this is the price for such a great story it's worth it.

This is definitely one of the best active stories (if not the best) in the site right now, keep up the awesome work :D

Author's Response:

Thank you Sir Purple Wolf (sick name by the way). Now that the semester's over, I'm hoping to pump out chapters much more frequently, while still keeping the quality as up to par as all of the other chapters. I've already gotten to work on the next chapter. I'm planning on having it finished within the next week or two. I'm still taking my time because I need to plan out the action segments. Make sure that they come out somewhat believable. Till then, thanks again for reading, and commenting.

Reviewer: Scarlett Signed [Report This]
Date: May 09 2018 8:24 AM Title: Chapter 13

Lovely story! I read the whole thing in a single sitting. Please keep going and don't lose your motivation!

Author's Response:

Well with readers like you cheering me on, how can I?

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2018 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 12

This chapter is a very good addition to the story!

Really nice to see that Annallya is starting to change her opionions on humans 
through this story. I really didn't expect her to sorta fall in love with Gaelin,
but it was a nice surprise.

I hope she is able to repair the relations between Titans and humans a bit, but
she is only one girl, so I won't expect miracles out of her.

I really want to thank you for writing. I'm already looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much. I agree, she's only one girl, so I wouldn't expect miracles from her. At least, not the one's you may have had in mind. And nothing concrete has happened between her and Gaelin yet. Just one kiss. Whatever else happens, will have to be saved for future chapters. And you don't have to thank me for writing (although I am touched), I have to thank you for reading, and complimenting. I'll try and have the next chapter out as soon as possible, however it's going to take some time. I need to make sure I do it right.