This story is amazing...it reads more like a real novel than an erotica. I'm mostly here for action but I think anyone can see that this story is something special.

I loved a couple of the kinks you touched on,

Kai is best girl.

Oh good thing. I finally find the chapter way before I'm about to sleep, contrary to usual.

What to say, throughout the whole chapter Lily's train of thoughts as well as her actions, they felt really stressing. Since her first doubts at the beginning of the chapter, her practice in the limited time and her final struggle, it all made me feel a bit of the pain she should be feeling everyday. Having to do all those kind of things everyday while not being at a clompletely mental balance, the frustration of not being able to have a time with her father which she seems to have long for for quite some time now, and not really being able to let out her emotions since it might be worse than what happened to the butler here. I can only describe that as painful and stressful.

For Claire's side it seems that the fear didn't contain her and she was able to speak her mind, faithful to her personality. Whatever this leads to, I'll have to wait to know. Also, I found the comparison with Kat interesting, being that Lily is the one closest to her in the percentage that the twins gave them. I also have to say that I was surprised with Claire's statement , specifically her calling Lily a monster, not that I don't undertand where that's coming from, just I didn't expect her to say it like that.

Oh, and calling Claire a pervert is going to be some kinf of trend at this rate.

As for mistakes, I could spot some typos here and there, like 'your' instead of 'you're' and the like. Other than that I think this chapter is great and as always I'm eager for the next one.

By the way, I was really tempted to just write "..." after reading the end notes.

Damn.....

(That's really all I have to say here, but I think it says a lot......)

Author's Response:

Yeah... thats what i felt as well when i finished...

Wah, so fast another chapter! Amazing. Thank you!

More of my thoughts, theories, silly thoughts and maybes.

Kai's gift was more than it seemed in the end. She really wanted to make something special for Claire, giving her a way to be more intimate with the twins. So lovely. She found the sister she was so in need in her life. Both for friendship, love as for to annoy each other. Hah

One of the things I found so adorable, and arousing was the way of smell and scents were used. Especially at how enthralled and amazed Claire acted as she felt this whole new world. You really made me feel that this was something breathtaking and new. The pheromones part was both surprisingly sexy and cute, how deeply attracted Claire felt.

Since the twins, at first, didn't count Lily afraid of what she might do to Claire; after Kai had given her vote they only needed the most important one. Claire itself accept her and accept the twins's love. To not be afraid of her feelings anymore, and to keep running. It was sad and heartwarming how desperately both tried to comfort and help Claire, to let her open herself for them. How they simply gave her love and comfort desiring nothing in return. Because real love is like this, not selfish, simply give and give, while the other side also give without expecting anything in return. To let them come into her heart and life. I believe would be much 'easier' but wrong and dangerous to simply 'fix' Claire's fear and trauma. Because even if they went inside her mind and heart, they still would be 'intruders'. She needed to accept their help, to take that leap of faith, and even if the mind unconsciously tried to resist it would be in vain because Claire already had opened the doors for them to help her.  Which would be impossible if they had simply forced their way in. Claire's trauma was so sad, it's something so sad and it hurts so much when your sincere love is turned into a disgusting thing that the other doesn't accept or acknowledge. It hurts in so many ways possible... no wonder she was afraid to let her love come out again for the twins. Made me so incredibly happy to see they managed to help her. And I'm certainly they will make wonderful new memories. From now on, between the three of them, will be only good ones thankfully I believe. They already did quite sexy ones in this little time they got after the help. Hah~ Claire will start to discover the real pleasure of giving herself fully on her feelings and love, without anything holding her back anymore. And this will be amazing.

It's sad to see how they see and are scared of what Lily may become, or almost is. Maybe the twins are afraid to do even another mistake trying to help Lily further. Especially at how much feelings Lily seems to carry towards them or the others. She probably knows how everyone thinks about her. And this only emphasizes her view of herself taking the role of 'outcast'. Which may fuel even further her hate.  And it's so sad to think about this, how others see her like this. I'm really happy Claire did that. I really don't know what to expect in her past or what will happen. However must be something hurt Lily so deeply, and the moment the twins helped her at first, maybe she could be fully aware of how her life was at that moment. And this might have been something far far horrible. Maybe hating life for being like this. Usually a form of hate and suffering comes from 'not accepting things as they are'. Lily just hates all the bugs do deeply, she seems to be 200% sure they are all useless, arrogant, greedy, evil.

I wonder if she is even curious now with Claire, since she got past even through Kai. Claire might be something like, a needle poking her beliefs of the bugs, that doesn't fit. Wonder if she might think that Claire is just way more crafty than all bugs, a real danger. Or perhaps, deep there, she craves for Claire to be that different. To help her. It's interesting to see Lily's reaction  when Claire acted sincerely and warmly, like the first time she greeted her. Or now when the twins were begging for her to not harm Claire. Maybe Lily struggled with both views, the one that urged her to crush Claire right away for being what she 'was'; and the other reality where little by little all her friends were starting to feel deeply attached to this one they should be hating instead. It's something for her to feel curious. Or scared... scared to 'take the leap of faith' too. Being this deep in hate, I believe Lily may try to force Claire to show her true 'nature' of a bug through truly extreme means. Like she said once before, how the bugs act in a certain way and will do anything afraid of dying. And I'm sure she will have no second thoughts in killing Claire. Maybe the only choice for help Lily might need something truly drastic to pass through all this thick shell, maybe even sacrificing something to help Lily... or sacrifice herself. If this meant Lily's happiness, I believe Claire may do anything. Maybe even giving her life. Which is scary.

Speaking of scary. It gave goosebumps to discover just how powerful and perfect Lily is. Enough for even the twins to acknowledge this. Wonder if it's because of this that Lily might have feel herself superior, like a deity or something like this compared to the bugs. To have this amount of perfect control of both sides at her young age. Truly frightening.

I'm incredibly anxious, nervous, frightened and hoping for Claire's apparently 'big battle' in the next chapter. I hope so much she helps Lily. And to finally discover the grand plan.

Will be quite a ride! Gladly will take a while, lots of time to recover and prepare my heart...

Oh crap! This chapter was great!
I can't wait for the next one, I'm sure you'll throw in lots of hurdles for Claire to jump! Keep up the awesome work!

Author's Response:

Thanks Dante123113, i appreciate that :)

Finished reading the other chapters. If I had read each one separately, I'd probably put one review for each, in this case then, a very BIG review for you! HO HO HO Take a deep breath...


Made me feel so happy to see you replied to my review. About hoping the emotions from here on out aren't to much for me; I expect quite the contrary - break me! Hah I'll stay until the end, and probably will be trembling and sobbing through the way.

Anyway. As also a non-english native, I know the struggle, and through the reading I found very few errors that caught my eye. Overall it was quite comfortable and great to read for me.

About the length. Personally, I adore the length you choose to use on each chapter, it feels like a real novel with chapters that have beginning > middle > end; I have nothing against short chapters, however long ones are much more impactful and stick much deeper into my mind and feelings. Especially writing that have more serious plot and dialogues together with kinks, like yours, can fit every part into the chapter with plenty of room for every one to be good. Usually start slowly, nice, you build up tension, a lot of tension or trade the tension for affection and love, with also grows the same; until the climax. This makes the chapters much more amazing and stick in the mind to think and ponder more later. I really like how you use the affection/love, corruption, lewd kinks and dark themes together with the plot, not sounding like simply 'fanservice' (there will be a beach episode/chapter with all the girls and Claire?) Hah~ Also, a nice detail, you use _ _ _ _ to separate scenes, which I found wonderful for the reading.

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Was quite a ride until now, I had time to breath and calm myself already~ :~

One of the things I feel that affects more, when one of the girls speaks or acts, is that we know they don't lie. They aren't like adults that hide their feelings or try to please other Egos so they won't feel bad, they are simply sincere and pure, in their own special way. And this, causes a very potent blow whenever they are sad, loving, angry or happy, because we truly know these are what they are feeling right now, no if or buts. Making the scenes way more frightening when one of them believes Claire is a 'mean lady', or heartwarming when they say they want her with them forever.

Some thoughts.

Deaths, dark themes, killing - Amazing, you really have a corrupted mind for this. Hah Many times when the 'monsters' are killed causes goosebumps and shivers, I try my best to not put myself in their places, thankfully is easier as I identify myself with Claire that is my safe beacon (usually, because she goes through quite a lot!!). I love this kind of horror/dark reading, it's scary, frightening, causes cold and shivering; but somehow we can't turn our eyes away from it, there is that fascination to keep looking at and continue to see the end. And after it ends, you know that it may had changed you in a bit. Claire may had not realized this yet, or did, who knows... but I have the impression she doesn't look that absurdly horrified like the first time she saw them killing a monster. 'Monsters', she is starting to see and feel what this word mean, if it's truly means those adults, how evil, mean and horrible they are and all their crimes; Claire is even starting to feel anger towards them, like the one with May and at the last ones with Kai. Wonder how long it will take for her to not feel sorry for them, to not think they are innocent. The twins know how naive and 'pure' Claire is in some way, how she believes in everyone and how she thinks everyone is good in some way, or just that she is so kind hearted that she wasn't fully tainted by the society and morals. Something like this... my thoughts tend to get confuse whenever I think too much like this Hah.

Kat - Until now, she is my fave. Especially because I always have these motherly feelings; when she unconsciously said 'Mommy' and ran away crying I thought my heart would stop. As I was discovering her sad past, how it deeply affected her whenever the subject of her parents were brought up, I was getting the hint deeply there in her heart she may desperately crave for a motherly figure in her life, to take care of her and love her. The twins even said she liked receiving 'orders'. As much as heartwarming and loving, she seems also extremely protective, it's even scary whenever she gets this serious to say nothing will hurt Claire; at same time so heartwarming. Also frightening the collection of toys she had there, wonder if that man she held so furiously was actually her father, or just another random 'monster'. I can only imagine one thing about tying losing ends though, scary! Hope she continues living in Claire's home, and both get even more together.

May - I found adorable and happy, and at same time so sad and depressing, not to mention scary that she can be so damn dangerous by simply forgetting where Claire was... It was reading full with constant mixed feelings, high and low, happy/laugh/love, fear/sadness. How she is unaware of everything in the bigger picture, too young to understand - and at same time aware of bad things and lies happening all around her. Though I believe it indeed would be much worse for her if the twins didn't had give her this power. This caused even more tension, because you knew that every word Claire said needed to be sincere, her feelings and thoughts pure otherwise May would see through everything. It was interesting to see the part with the sick pervert, especially thinking before how Claire felt sad/guilty/dirt and Alexis told her to not ever compare herself with them; how Claire could had the chance to/or not to realize the difference in her sincere feelings and those selfish ones full with lies which unfortunately May couldn't see because it was his 'truth' (if she asked he liked, he would honestly say he liked). Even the 'commanding voice' later, which I think is absurdly powerful, even frightening to think about how much control she can have on others (what if she says 'you want to kill yourself'). But this fear is at same level with the sense of safety and love when you see how kind hearted and pure she is, she just want hugs and friends that don't think she is a monster and won't leave~ I'm sure Claire will never leave her.

Kai and Lily were the ones I thought more dangerous.
Kai - This one caught me by surprise. I was kinda sure this wouldn't be so sad and more of a 'battle' to show Claire was sincere and prove worthy. But at the end I ended up crying with the final hug! Thing that didn't happened before. I'm too emotive, I feel silly. Hah Anyway Surprised me even further, because, personally I never truly read anything or sought stories/kinks/RP involving smells. And all this humiliation, torture and dark use of it was really interesting and scary, especially how Kai could manipulate other bodies in this way. I don't even want to imagine what that man down there felt... It was interesting to see she had a family, though so depressing and made feel so angry. Indeed, there are plenty of ways to have a sad childhood, unfortunately... And thankfully there are people like Claire that sincerely cares about Kai. I'm really glad she believes in her now. Glad because now she can be happy.

Lily - This one causes me shivers... I really have no idea what to expect. Neither her powers, which just the fact of nobody desiring to share, and how few say she is real mean and 'evil' makes even more scary and curious. All I can think is I have to wait for one hell of a ride... At the intro with her using her foot I have this feeling will be focused on this kind of kink, maybe, or others, or many others. You are using so many! Amazing. Anyway. Lily seems just so, deeply and honestly angry, extremely angry with all the adults (bugs). I keep wondering what may had happened to her, to hurt her trust and feelings in this way. And if it is this scar is that deep far, almost enough to not be healed, I tremble and shiver more with the thought of how difficult may be for Claire to prove she is different. But also deeply wants Claire to find what happened, and try to help Lily, Hope she manages to! Don't to this with meee! :O If it happens, I can't help but to have this image of all of the girls holding and hugging Claire lovingly~ I'm going to faint...

Alexis and Sophia - I have no more doubt about their feelings for Claire, I can see and feel how they are so attached to her now; It's so adorable and loving, the way they hold her, how they pet and caress her, how they handle her as if she were precious. Compared with the start, where they weren't that attached. It's cute to see how they were nervous waiting for Kat to arrive with Claire, they were so restless, even said they were in the night. And all the affection they give to Claire is really heartwarming and adorable. It seems so much, much easier for them to see through Claire feelings and heart, though for Claire she still has to do it in a humanly way but it's so adorable they actually are trying to 'corrupt' her and 'helping' her to understand more and more her feelings. 'Even if they have to do it every single day~' 'She will belong to them~'. About their powers, it's just so... powerful, but at same time they are so in control of both mind and body that I can't feel scared for Claire -- unless -- at the beginning when she needed to be sincere about her feelings, becuase the twins don't seem very merciful for those they can see aren't good hearted for the 'monsters', after I saw how kind and good hearted Claire was, I stopped fearing the twins because I somehow knew that they wouldn't do anything to Claire, other than adore her more and more. The problem now lies in Claire starting to believe in this, that 'gift' they gave her even implies this. Also It's so difficult to understand their intentions many times, especially in the big picture of the plot, you are very good in just giving the hints to get more curious, and not hints to outright give the plot and spoil things. Make us think, make us create theories, this is good to keep the reader waiting for more. For me, I... don't know; why Claire is special in their plan, other than being one of the few adults that truly cares about them and not see them as monsters. Maybe they want to prove there is a chance for few adults in the future they want to make, like their Mother, to give them this chance to change their beliefs and morals that may cause such suffering for the children. Which makes me remember about their past, what could had happened with them, their birth and their Dad which they seem to hate. Who knows. The plot thickens...

And Claire - Usually I'm 99% of the time in her character when I read, then most of the feelings I feel are caused because of her reactions. I really identify myself with her, so maybe this is why I'm so fascinated with the story maybe. Anyway, what got me more curious is about her past, I can't help but to keep wondering, since that even the twins are so curious to know more and more about her, and even Alexis struggled a bit to delve deeper into some trauma apparently. Even more curious was to see that Claire seemed to not be able to remember certain things about her past, is this because of her own mind locking things she don't want to remember or maybe something the twins did... I have this uneasy feeling Claire may be the one with the most tragic past. Hope this is just a guess! And if if this is true, and the story delves into this, hope for her to have the help of all the girl as much as she loved and helped them.

Again, thank you for replying and writing, as you can see, I kinda really liked the reading. Hah~ Can't wait for the next ride, hope my heart can take it.

From the bottom of my heart and soul, thank you so much for writing this story.

I thought I'd never find this fantasy of mine written; and casually before going to sleep I happen to find this one that is so well written and I can see and feel that truly has a lot of effort put on it. Ended up spending quite some hours reading. Still at the part after Kat and have more chapters, and even if you won't finish the whole story someday, I'll still be more than happy to had find it and be able to keep in my memories.

Love so much these ideas, discussions, thoughts and kinks that mess with beliefs, morals and dark themes. Lately been discovering about corruption kink (maybe I was corrupted, anyway). But, especially, that doesn't treat affection and love as something exclusive to '100% naive gentleness' as I like to say, because even 'Precious Little Demons' can have these feelings.

And by far, the biggest and most special thing for me, that I probably wouldn't keep reading if this wasn't present was Claire being a 'special one', loved and protected by all the impossibly powerful and superior girls. This isn't just a simple kink for me, more like truly mess with my feelings whenever I see or find something involving this. I love this feeling of helplessness and protection/safety/love at same time. How the twins and Kat say they won't hurt Claire, and she will be always safe, while still witnessing them treating others they believe that deserves, 'cruelly'. Might not believe me, but I am sincerely happy reading this. Also love this slowly corruption, that they can see what truly lies beneath the traumas, beliefs and morals; helping her to be sincerely happy together with them, and not against them because part of her unconscious mind and thoughts try to promptly lead her 'wrongly' at the first sight of every 'unacceptable' or 'cruel' act.

I loved this sense of utter fear, helplessness of all the things the twins and the others that received the gifts causes while reading; like Kat when 'snapped' and showed her little toys, when controlled Claire's body and actions. Brought plenty of fear and anxiety wishing for Claire to find a way to help her, to change her mind; not just selfishly trying to find a way to save herself. But to help Kat. Drama and tragedy is also keeps me so deeply fascinated and always ending up putting myself in the characters place, which sometimes make the reading quite overwhelming for me. Forcing me to take a rest. Poor Kat...

Thank you again, and wonderful work, you are very good in the dialogues and description.

Great chapter.

I wasn't expecting a new chapter so soon, nice!

Now is time for my favorite girl, Kai. It seems the power that the twins gave her isn't useful only for defending againts strangers but also for "contributing to the twins". I'm intrigued by her behavior and hope to know soon the reason for it, also curious about her scent.

There's now the thing with Lily, it seems only the twin see her as a friend and maybe Kai, though I'm not really sure about the last. Also the twin's plan which is still a mistery is popping up more in the dialogue recently.

And it seems the twins had a "talk" with May about the ways shen handles the tinies, kind of amusing to see them flustered, even if just a bit.

Anyway, good chapter, really looking forward to the next one.

Dang! Beautiful chapter!
Lots of foreshadowing, and tension, in this one. I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response:

Thank you Dante :D