[Report This]Date: December 12 2015 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
So there is this powerful woman, who is also sexy. Her dominance of the situation is also sexy.
The guys like her body, but hate her ideas.
These collars are extreme. If she can sense vitals, can she sense things like arousal? Now that would be interesting.
Are there any other women like this? She is perfect. Like a hot teacher in class. Except this class is in this Lindholm Global facility.
I read Dante's Inferno, and I don't remember that stuff. It's been a while. At least it was a text that I am familiar with.
Those two rules sound like something a stupid or unreasonable person would came up with. Like when your toddler says they want a candy but they can't understand how prices work.
"You have no rights". "I am god here". Wow. I don't know why, but these rules sound silly. Part of me wants to pull a government handbook and show why these statements make no sense.
I love this woman though. i don't like her name though. She needs a nickname like how you renamed Karolina to Lina. Karolina kinda sucked, but I really like Lina.
Good chapter, I can't wait for the next one!
[Report This]Date: December 11 2015 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 4
And there we have it. All nine bad guys in one room. I feel like a brawl is about to happen.
They seem so badass that I'm curious how some giantess's will have an effect on them.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
These are some pretty serious guys that should take a lot to crack under pressure. We'll see
[Report This]Date: December 11 2015 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 3
Where da heck did this story come from? It seems so random from your other works.
Glad to see you are writing another story, this one reminds me of the contract/botched because those characters were robbers and now we look at the next step which is in this jail.
Lindholm Company? Really? Hahah.
I will follow this for sure, but I feel like you got too many stories going on right now. Not that's it's bad or anything, it's just it felt like you started Michael's story like a week ago.
Looking forward to this. More development is always good so I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I started this one around the same time as the Contract, originally Jack Dalton was going to be one of the twelve, but his fate lie in a different direction. (Same with Sam Haynes from Botched)
Lindolm Global - CEO FRancis Lindholm, hmm, coincidence?