[Report This]Date: June 16 2016 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 55
@TomSpeedy. I can't help it. This is a story with lot of interesting subtle themes that need to be addressed. I don't precisely know why Madison bugs me so much. Something triggers in me not to like her. She is not evil, has self reflection, does care about others and I think she didn't plan this against Michael and her father. Mirielle and Adelina didn't annoy me at all.
I'm now reading 'Anna's Awakening' from the beginning. Need to re-read the first chapters to give a long review again. ;)
Date: June 13 2016 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
These long reviews, my goodness!
[Report This]Date: June 13 2016 5:35 AM Title: Chapter 55
@biokogy22.
Madison didn't got off easy at all. First, Madison's, Mirielle's and Michael's world were rocked that shrinking existed. Madison knew nothing about being related or that the crucial parts about the Hearst and the gypsy clan's history. When Michael and Mirielle were shrunken in Madisons room, you could already hear some remorse in her voice, but she tried to hide it. She wanted to act though infront of Mirielle and Michael. She is lucky Mirielle went along, because if Mirielle would have screamed in panic, she would have also raped a woman she was friendly with and never done anything to her. That would haunt her. But even in that someone consent form, she feels bad about it. You already hear how she tries to rationalize to Mirielle why she did it and how quickly she wants Adelina to restore her. It was never her will to shrink Mirielle in the first place.
Madison is letting Adelina, who she trust very much, to decides what happens. When she couldn't find Michael after having sex with Mirielle, she was in panic. When Adelina turned into her mother and start taunthing Michael to come out an explosion of emotions of pleasure and guilt came out and q quick relfection about everything that happened. The already little feelings of guilt, turned into remorse and shame. She didn't come with Adelina, because if she saw a releaved Michael with cries of happiness running to what he thinks was his mother, only to be broken by that it was Adelina. Seeing that happiness first and than pain in his eyes, would have hurt her, that she couldn't keep up her act in front of Michael anymore.
At that moment she hoped it stopped and Adelina would bring back Michael and was shocked that Adelina for the first time said NO to her and was somewhat strict and that she turned in her mother to teach her a lesson. Adelina probably never acted that way before with Madison. You can than see she is more quit with only short answers when Mirielle explains why she wanted the power.
After that she couldn't wait and wanted answers from Adelina about her plans and what she meant about Mortimer.
Adelina in her last breaths reveals many shocking things to her, in Madison's already very emotional state of guilty and panic feelings, that her father is removed and at the mercy of Mirielle and that she is related with her and than dies. Adelina was somewhat a mother figure for her.
Do you think she would care of getting the company after all this? Something she would have got regardless, only a little later maybe. There lives are dramatically changed and hers not for the better in my eyes. She and Michael don't seem like the type who would really care about the company, only Mirielle seems interested in it.
What is in that chest. Only lessons or the whole diary about the history too? She can only get comfort with Lucie who shares in the pain of loosing Adelina. What will she tell when Michael wakes up. Does she dare tell the whole story? She is now in a super awkward position and need a rest, but she has to work harder then ever now with those responsibilities. Will she come home in a Hearst house, where Michael fears her and tries to avoid her and a disappointed father who is now a slave or will both of them not even be there anymore. Michael being with Lucie and Mortimer being with Mirielle. In both cases, it will be painfull and painfull memories there. In the Hearst building it won't be much better. Seeing Mirielle everyday and asking if she can see her father and Mirielle always uncomfortable about Madison with the fear of being shrunk, even if Madison doesn't have that power. The whole situation is painfull, with distrust and fear. Madison will break from that stress. Her life was so much easier and without pain before all this than at present and the coming years.
The best Madison can do is make amands with everyone involved and trying to mend the Hearst family bonds so that she can look Michael, Mirielle and Mortimer normal in the eye without feeling extremely guilty and have allies around you, instead of enemies.
Michael's happiness with Lucie and the fact that Lucie will protect him from harm and without the stress of running that company what would be just as awkward for him with Mirielle and her father around, is a blessing in disguise. Money isn't everything and certainly not in thise case. Michael will get enough to never have financial worries. Adelina gave Lucie the means(Just like Madison, I don't think she has the power to shrink people on her own, and that is good. To strong characters that are young, makes them unrelatable where you can't feel sympathie for) to shrink Michael. Michael can have size changing sex fun with Lucie whenever they want. In the end, he won a lot. Mental strength, wisdom, one of the best type of women(Lucie) who complement you and makes you stronger, no stress of to run a company and thus can flee from it without consequences and can try to come in contact with his mother.
That upperhand, that victory over his sister you want, he already has. Madison is the one in danger of being unhappy for the rest of her life.
I think Adelina felt some remorse after having that talk with Lucie, but was determined to finish what she started. Those remarks of Mortimer about Michael in the presence of Adelina in Madison form must have contribute too to decide to restore him. She would not admit it, but she felt sorry for somewhat she had put him through. She tried to constantly force a label on Michael to make it easy, but in the end, Michael didn't turn out to be that evil and turned out to be the opposite.
I hope you continue this sometime, Duggernaut. This has a lot of potential to go many funny ways with all those conflicting feelings of most of the characters. The way you can write in a very subtle way how the characters are feeling, is top notch.
Date: June 11 2016 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 55
It was a very good journey and I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for the praise. Picking up on those details, nuances and interpretation makes it so much more enjoyable. This story was excellent, can't wait for part 2. I'm going to try one of your other stories. But this one had al the interesting ingredients. You capture the emotions and feelings perfectly.
Michael probably doesn't care that Madison gets the company. Having his freedom and enjoy life without stress seems more important to him.
The new story is set up, that Madison will be in a lot of stress and guilt and an empty Hearts home with no Adelina, no father and no brother who probably wants to live with Lucie and certainly not Madison will constantly remind her.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2016 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 55
For starters, I liked most of this story except the end, I feel it was way too nice to Madison and Mirielle.
For Madison this can be broken off into points (for organization):
- Yes, Madison had childhood trauma, Yes, her family was horrible to her, but in the end, it was just too easy for her here. There was no struggle for her to get the company, and she pretty much got what she wanted, despite the horrible things she and Adelina did to get it.
-Madison was punishing Michael then eventually took it too far by bringing their mother into it or rather, letting Adelina do so. To me, that's a bit much especially since she was implying using Michael for pleasure acting as his mother. She also ended up, when she was aware of his prescence, of making him think she planned to kill him.
-Madison allowed her father to basically be tortured by Mirielle. He was horrible and mean to her yes, and he is a Nazi follower, but as odd as it sounds, I think what is about to happen to him is probably far more punishment than he deserves as he generally did nothing in this story other than work until the end.
At this point I would say Madison now is worse than Michael at the beginning. I would also say the Michael, for all he's been through, deserves a big win over his now incredibly rich and powerful sister. Sure she's now fully alone in the world with no one to confide into but, she I feel that's not really a big thing for her, like maybe being more rich and powerful than her somehow, owning something she desperately wants, or even not forgiving her or acknowledging her existance even if she begs for it unless she does something to make it up to him. Basically, I think Michael deserves to get the upper hand over her in some fields.
For all she's done, all thats happened to her, yes she deserves something, but she's gotten so much in such a horrible fashion that I feel she deserves a punishment like Michael to be taken down a few pegs. Again, I also think Michael deserves something as a large victory over his sister.
Overall I did like the story, it was well written, the pace was fine, just the ending was way too easy on Madison and Mirielle (although I didn't mention Mirielle at all because, well, she's kinda just an evil parasite that uses other's success as their own).
Author's Response:
Thanks for taking not only the time to read this story but also for sharing a review. I agree there definitely appears to be an inequality of punishments for both Madison and Mirielle but so too is there little justice for Adelina and the tragedies in her life. The old adage of good things happen to bad people and bad to good seems appropriate. We know Madison resemblance to Nadia blinded the old woman and meddled with her judgement. It might be very entertaining to pen part 2 now that Teodora is awakened because she has no clue she and Madison are related only that she is a Hearst and must be made to pay. The just desserts may be dispensed there. I thank you again for your comments and invite you to peruse the wealth of other stories here, mine included.
[Report This]Date: June 10 2016 1:54 AM Title: Chapter 55
There are almost no winners in this story. The only winner in this whole thing is Mirielle. She got everything she wanted with no suffering.
Adelina had it the hardest of all, with all her loved ones brutally killed and than finally to have to curse your own granddaughter and than to find out that Madison, Mortimer and Michael are related by blood.
Madison gets the company, but will that make up what she has been through with her parents and brother and make her happy? She lost her father now to Mirielle and will maybe find out the history behind all this and seeing Mirielle on a regular bases humiliate her father or at least knowing he is a slave and tolerate it. That will eat away at you. But now she can maybe make contact with her mother. Adelina left her a gift but also more danger and grief. The little functioning that was left of the Hearst family is now gone.
Lucie has the pain the deaths her mother caused and that she had to be put under a curse. The most responsible, strongest and kindest person who knows what is most important in life.
Michael, the main character. Lucie is the price that makes this al worthwhile. His suffering is different from that of Adelina and Madison. What ever he's done, giving him multiple hard torture that exhaust him to the brink of insanity, multiple near death experiences, really put fear in him, let him remember his mother was overkill. You did it very describtive and it makes those shrinking stories exciting. What forces me to root for Michael, inspite some dumb inconsiderate things over the years and he had to learn the hard way to see the light, is that there is constantly hate directed towards him from all sides, constantly being reminded by others tha he is no good, that his life is not worth much and he is to be spit upon for the rest of his life or be accidently killed in the process of being tortured. He got a far more harder punishment than he deserved. Luckely he got out stronger and with one person he can always turn too for help. Not being the heir is a blessing in disguise. The sooner he can disconnect from it, the better off he will be.
Again. Good story with lot of clues, interesting interactions with the shrunken person and good believable characters.
Author's Response:
From the outset this was not light fare, it was a story predicated by revenge - Madison over Michael. As the story evolved the depth of the vengeance went to a new scale with the introduction of Adelina's back story. Truly there were no winners just survivors. One of the overlooked indignities is the fact Michael was set aside in favor of his younger sister to continue the 'mission' at the helm of Hearst.
I am well pleased to have had you along for this journey. Your attention to detail and interpretation of nuance were astute and usually very near the mark (sometimes eerily close making me think you are far too clever) During a lengthy tale it is always an asset to have people examine the viability and credibility of story. I think if I were to rework this one I would change the front end some and insert more subtle clues but what's done is done.
Again I thank you for your participation and hope I am able to put proverbial pen to paper and create another story that captures your interest. :)
[Report This]Date: June 09 2016 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 55
Interesting. You wanted to move quickly to part 2. Madison took some of those mindgames from Adelina ok. Here is someone who basically said that your brother's fate isn't for her to decide and someone who is planning to hurt your father. These aren't things to take lightly.
Adelina took her revenge and can rest, but other more dangerous things are set in motion.
The situation is now more volatile. The relationship Madison-Mirielle-Mortimer seems like a powder keg.
Michael is lucky to have found someone like Lucie. What is refreshing about Lucie, that she can act rational and with clarity. Where others see somebody shrunk against their will as fun and harmless, she really sees it for what it his, a very hard punishment where a person can break out of fear or die when handled too ruff. She is the only one who tries to imagine how frigthening it can be and what it can do to a person if they stay shrunken for long period of time. Unlike Madison, Mirielle and those other girls, she isn't as easely corrupted by power and therefor a stronger person. It is Michael's only safe haven. Lucie is the big plus he got out of this. The situation just got more potentially dangerous for him with Theodora on the loose and the situation in the Hearst company.
The best option for him is to be as far away as possible from that wasp's nest with Lucie before all hell breaks loose. Away from people corrupted by money, power, corperate way of thinking, etc. before they use you as toy and tool in their power games. Theodora-Mirielle-Madison-Mortimer is a dangerous cocktail. ;)
Liked this story and the set up for another story.
Author's Response:
It's not that I wanted to get to the next story per se just that the depth of Adelina's past co-opted this story making everything else almost irrelevant. It went from Michael's Story to the tragic tale of Adelina so I decided I would try and end it there. Another interesting follow up to this could revolve around the relationship between Lucie and Michael definitelyaway from all the elements of this story. A continuation with Teodora will not be a sweet little romp especially knowing her family history.
[Report This]Date: June 09 2016 6:30 PM Title: Chapter 55
Ok, this was an awesome ending. I don't know how you did it in only 3 chapters but you concluded what I thought was a puzzle.
It's a shame that Teodora didn't get to have some fun, but it sure invites the solution of a sequel.
So Mirielle gets Mortimer, Lucie gets Michael and Madison gets the company.
Haha! That's funny. Lucie is related to Michael. I didn't think of that. Now Lucie will feel weird while playing with Michael, but at least it's distant.
Well, I can't wait for your next story!
Author's Response:
Glad you approve. Following Teodora would make an intriguing follow up...
[Report This]Date: June 08 2016 4:22 AM Title: Chapter 52
Nice chapter. You can feel the calm before the storm. Good that Michael enjoyed his time with Lucie.
That whole clan seems cursed with very bad luck. They all suffered a horrible fate.
Author's Response:
Another author reviewing one of my other stories pointed our a lack of compassionate interactions between the protagonist and any of the giantesses he encountered and from the get go in this story I wanted Lucie to be safe and caring. There is a painful and turbulent history with this family and it is time to provide some closure though Adelina is in a very difficult spot. It seems no matter how she chooses she cannot win...
[Report This]Date: June 07 2016 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 52
Please, can we get a flashback of Lucie's mom playing with tinies. If not, then I think she should wake up and use Michael, but before things get out of hand, Lucie stops her.
I still think the sound of a giantess using people for pleasure nonstop is awesome.
You teased me so good when you mentioned the sewing chest and then she had a fabric and then told him to put his arms up. My heart was racing a bit.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I thought you might like Teodora. Her awakening might make for an interesting story all on its own.
Date: June 07 2016 10:31 AM Title: Chapter 51
The chapter with Madison and Mirielle in one room would be interesting, very curious to that conversation and their plans. The continuation with Lucie and Michael too.
Another twist? Hope that doesn't involve poor Mortimer Hearst.
Author's Response:
I have been contemplating just such a conversation but I'm not sure it can inhabit an entire chapter. We'll see...
Date: June 06 2016 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 51
Revealing Adelina's backstory gave this a big boost in quality. It went from good fetish flick to fine literature.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the compliment. It was my hope to try and provide reason and purpose to the actions of adelina.
Date: June 04 2016 10:14 PM Title: Chapter 51
Never saw Game of Thrones. Is it worth a watch?
If Helena is Nadia. That would be to messed up, very unlikely. It says Nadia is the grandmother of Mortimer Hearts. Helena's break with Mortimer feels to coincidental, Adelina could had a hand in that. And is Nadia still alive or not?
You can only feel bad for Adelina and have a feeling she will suffer another devestating blow if Nadia turned out to be alive. Whatever Adelina has planned, you just can't get angry about her actions. She now has to destroy the grandchild and great grandchildren of her beloved daugther. How can you punish the Hearst, without damaging your own family. Have a feeling there is a compromise and why she plays this complicated game. But this is for the writer to decide what Adelina finds the correct actions for this situation. It must be hard to write a character with much more life experience than yourself, Duggernaut. But she is totally believable, good job.
I like the set up. Rich Michael with not a care(maybe an act) in the world, now left with almost nothing and super vunerable and powerful people working against you. That is not an easy adjusment to make.
Can't wait for the next chapter. Want to know how much Madison exactly knows about this whole situation and why it is so important to Adelina for Lucie to experience that feeling with a shrunken person. Have a feeling she hopes that Lucie will mistreat Michael.
Author's Response:
I don't know yet whether to have adelina responsible for the break. The situation is certainlyly wrenching for adelina because of the mingled blood. She sees Klaus in Michael and Nadia in Madison and her heart is torn. More will be revealed in upcoming chapters of course and like my response to Tom it has taken a while to get to this point. I appreciate your continued support and feedback. I am pleased adelina is believable and not just crazy old bat. I can only imagine the horrors some of that generation experienced and have tried to give her history in a way that allows readers to empathize with her. The blood bond is sufficently distant that there is no taboo for Michael and lucie which begs the question how much does lucie know? We know Teodora pounced on the Hearst name. I am going to throw a twist in the next few chapter well, just because...
[Report This]Date: June 04 2016 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 51
Another game of thrones reference at the end. Well done.
That was one awesome history lesson. It made sense and actually "connected the dots". I was going "ooohhhhhh" like 3 times this chapter. I mean, I was mind blown!
Just to clarify, is Helena, Nadia??
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Helena and Nadia are not the same. Klaus sired a child off Nadia who turned out to be Mortimer’s father making Nadia Michael and Madison great grandmother. It has taken a while to get to this point but I hope it all makes sense
[Report This]Date: June 04 2016 11:54 AM Title: Chapter 51
As expected. Nadia is mixed into the Hearst bloodline. Lucky for Michael, Lucie is a distant relative, so their fun can continue for now.
The Hearst family must know something about that clan of Adelina from the attempt by Sofia and co failed. I wonder of Nicolas passed that knowledge on to his son and from there to Mortimer.
It is al about what Adelina wants to do now. Must the whole Hearst family suffer or will Madison be spared. Clearly Madison doesn't know Adelina's intentions. Mirielle can be an interesting character in this. Have a feeling Theodora comes out of her curse to do some extra damage. ;)
Adelina is really in a difficult spot here, and her motives are so unclear. What has a woman who has been through al of this at that age have planned for a famliy that has her and her daughter's blood mixed into it and her mortal enemy's blood. Feelings of revenge will be stronger. What a hard life this woman had and still has.
This wasp's nest is a very dangerous place for a 3 inch Michael. ;)
Author's Response:
More Teodora shortly...
[Report This]Date: June 02 2016 12:47 AM Title: Chapter 50
Well, that escalated quickly. It went from "Can I kiss you" to "Can I fuck you" really fast.
Michael reminds me of Tom so much. You just love writing about cocky guys pleasing women, huh? :)
I bet Addelina is smiling and masturbating to this, thinking, "I remember when I did this to my entire male class. Then all my male coworkers." I mean, she can basically sense Lucie and feel what she is feeling. It's like between sexy/creepy, but who cares, it's interesting.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: June 01 2016 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 50
Beautiful passion chapter. They climaxed very good at somewhat the same time. Lucie was propably kept virgin for this moment. Let's see what round 2 will bring.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2016 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 49
Interesting. I wonder why her plan was so complicated and took so long. Must have been quite a few bumps on the road. Wonder if the families got mixed or that there are more offspring from Adelina or her child(ren) or grandchildren. You can really feel the urgency and that this plan must succeed NOW no matter what. Wonder if the plan is only motivated out of revenge.
There can be all sorts of combinations for Adelina's motives to what's happening now. The short happy moment for Michael with Lucie feels like the calm before the storm.
Date: May 28 2016 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 49
Well then I like that revelation.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2016 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 49
Well, now that was a mind bender. It's starting to make more sense. Or is it....
I can't wait for the next chapter!