[Report This]Date: October 22 2015 4:52 AM Title: Check. Up.
Excellent story thus far! When did you find time to write 45 chapters?!
The strength increase does surprise me a bit. Given how easily she manipulated the high tensile steel, her hands can exert over 100,000 pounds per square inch. That's an enormous amount of pressure (for comparison, the human jaw is 120 PSI). It's also far greater than the pressure caused being hit by a bullet.
So I'm curious how they drew her blood with a needle. :)
Sure, this is fiction and we can make stuff up, but I can't help but think about these things, lol. Great story tho, and I'm so glad I found it!!
Author's Response:
I wrote Goddess Resort July-September 2011, so it took about three months to write and edit the 66,000 words. Though it could certainly use some more editing. I think I was on a break from work at the time.
The strength increase was to bring in a bit of 'superpower' ala Supergirl. I agree there is a bit of contradiction between their extreme strength and drawing blood. Might be better to have the labtech fail with bent needles.
Glad you're enjoying the story!
[Report This]Date: October 15 2015 1:40 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge
Got through the whole thing in less than a day. Definitely ranks as one of the very best on the site, IMO. Good differentiation of personalities, pretty good realism in character actions, not to heavy on exposition. Also appreciated the Mini, Gentle (mostly) themes, as they are uncommon on this site. Great work! I'll be coming back to this one in the future for sure.
However, I just had two relatively small nits: 1. There is a decent amount of inconsistency in the sizes of women's bodies/features as described in the text with respect to the stated heights. E.g. a 13' woman with 4' breasts, a 15' woman who is able to encircle a 6' man's chest with a single hand. Especially in the latter parts of the story, some of the descriptions of features relative to the size of the male protag seemed more appropriate for women in the 20'+ range.
2. Understanding that there is a follow on story (albeit one that doesn't appear to pick up where the first left off), the ending still felt abrupt.
Neither of these significantly distracted from the story though. This one is a true gem. Thanks for sharing it.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback!
1) I'll try to do a full read through looking for size-discrepancies... I try to catch this stuff, but it's hard to catch everything.
2) I think the ending feels abrupt because there wasn't enough conflict leading up to it.. It just feels like "chris going home" rather than something that had been brewing for a while. -- The follow-up story (Rashja Blossoms) does pick up right where Goddess Resort ends.... Chris goes home, and we get to see his life at home. However, there are only a few characters from Goddess Resort who appear in the sequel.
Date: October 15 2015 12:01 PM Title: Logistics
I continue to be amazed at how well this story is holding together. I still have difficulty trying to do grammar checks (so far I've only found one waste / waist confusion), but I hope that eventually I'll be able to take more note of things that need noting!
Author's Response:
I hope this means you're finding the quality of the writing quite good. I'm sure there are mistakes in there, but I do lots of proof-reading before publishing. Looking forward to how you like the ending, and also how you find the next installment (Rashja Blossoms), though it's not quite finished.
Date: October 15 2015 7:28 AM Title: Sun-bathing, level 1
Beautiful concept and well-done. I'm having difficulty in paying attention to the quality of writing. Keep up the good work!
[Report This]Date: October 14 2015 8:50 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge
Incredible. I've worked through ch 10 or so and it's one of the most thoroughly erotic tales on this site. Loving it. Thanks for sharing.
Date: October 12 2015 9:00 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge
Great, now I can read it and know where I left off!
Date: October 12 2015 5:40 PM Title: Getting out of Dodge
not bad!