Date: September 24 2015 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 1
Thanks. I've enjoyed the exchange with you, and look forward to further contact when I next review one of your storie.
T
Author's Response:
Me as well, thank you for taking the time, :)
Date: September 23 2015 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 6
UUUUUUGH!!!!! Why does this keep happening? I wrote out a long review {great story by the way} and go to submit it, only to be told I can't perform this function. SON OF A B_TCH!!! This has happened several times now at this site.
Author's Response:
Glad the story is still holding you. There is another reviewer who has expressed issue with difficulty providing lengthy reviews. I am an infrequent reviewer and have as of yet encountered the issue. Next update will include some ideas gleaned from your reviews to help further meddle with Mo's mind. Hopefully the difficulty you've encountered does not dissuade you from providing your great feedback and input.
Date: September 22 2015 6:33 AM Title: Chapter 1
My preferences are in the area of the Gentle Giantess nature, furry stories involving non-human characters, Tolkien-world races, etc. Whether Science-Fiction or Fantasy, is unimportant to me: a good read, whether it involves sex or not, but without cruelty for its own sake, holds me fascinated right to the end. I'm not really into evil characters, or evil for its own sake, since I've seen my share of such to a greater degree than I ever care to experience again.
Anything that reeks of adventure, new experiences that can be educational, or life-building, are welcome. I find stories that involve interaction, on at least a neutral basis, are fascinating, especially since different writers have different views on how such things would play out. I no longer care for 'hack & slash', 'full speed ahead and damn the torpedoes', 'foot-kissing', 'ass-kissing', and other self-destructive acts in the same degree as I might have in my distant youth.
Since that leaves a whole world of options to be seen & experienced, I'm still pretty wide open to what's available. Does that help to define my interests?...
Author's Response:
Yes, thank you very much for taking the time to share your preferences. I agree with your notion of cruelty for cruelty sake is typically vulgar and unappealing. As a literary device to create a thoroughly repugnant antagonist deserving of whatever fate befalls that character it can be useful. Self destructive acts while not limited to the folly and frivolity of youth appear quite frequently in many tales here and I myself have employed such to push characters down certain story threads. Again please allow me to thank you for sharing and I hope to be able to craft stories that provide enough substance to be worthy of being read. D
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 8:37 PM Title: Chapter 6
Basically, we learn that Mo and his mother aren't exactly on the best of terms. It also sounds like Mo is a guy that gets out of the house a lot and his mother doesn't mind if he's gone. What he's gone permanently? She probably won't be concerned. Haha!
Mo is lazy, super lazy. Not eating on time, no cleaning his room, disobeying his mom's rules, grumbling at simple chores. That sounds like normal things to take care of, yet Morris has the easy life. Perhaps not so lucky soon.
Ok, we all know the frog smelly hand thing is a hoax. There's no reason to involve that in this story unless it has something to do with the shrinking, or to emphasize the Tom is weird which is what I think is the case here. (This Tom is even worse than the other Tom. Lol.)
Why not send a text? Why make a call about that? These guys have smart phones, right? Not the old flip phones that have multiple letters on each button and you had to click it multiple times just to type 1 freakin letter. In that case, it may seem better to call.
When Morris was thinking about telling his mom about the swallowing incident, I thought his mom said that. What if his mom said, "you know, my coworker told me that she swallowed a few guys real good last night. I almost felt jealous. She's beautiful and she gets guys. She's living the life. Hey Morris, have you had any activities with girls lately, I can give you some tips."
That would make Morris freak out. He would be wondering if there were more than the 3 Graces shrinking people. His whole perspective will change.
Well, I think that's the last of Tom after that phone call. My bet is that he goes missing at school next time.
Loving the suspense, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom seems Mo is the stereotypical pothead uninspired to achieve. The dynamic between mother and teenage son is loose giving me some freedom to use Mo's home life to do with as I choose within the context of the story. There will some twists and turns ahead. :)
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 6
A nice chapter this one :)
Pretty short but still nicely laid out and it did good to mildly lay out Morris' normal home-life. The writen mother and son dialoge there felt very natural to read so good job there ^_^
But more importantly, Tom getting a mysterious visitor in the middle of his phone-call?
'Gee.... I wonder who that could be?' ;)
Don't get my emote and quote-text wrong, I am absolutely loving this build-up here. I can't wait for the final trap to be sprung, for Morris to finally learn if what he saw was a dream or not :D
Author's Response:
I've been trying to get at 1000 words per chapter across most of the stories I'm working on in order to provide speedy updates though some are longer depending on the story. Thanks for the dialog props reminiscent of my own adolescence. We'll see if alls well with Tom chapter after next, maybe not sure yet
Date: September 21 2015 7:05 AM Title: Chapter 1
I thought it was very good. It is not my usually preferred type of story, but I enjoy almost every well-written story, and this was quite enjoyable.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I too have come across stories not necessarily my taste but with superior writing that elevates the quality of the read. Thank for taking the time to share you thoughts. I'm curious what type of stories do you tend to gravitate toward?
Date: September 19 2015 2:21 PM Title: Chapter 5
Just finished reading this story. Quite original to me. I've never read one here that was based upon the theme of drug-induced reality.
Coming from British Columbia, I'm familiar with the names of several varieties of the green stuff, and was even once subjected to partial effects. But I'm allergic to the effects, and therefore know little else about the weed. That brings me to this question: What is 'Purple Kush"?
Author's Response:
As a fellow British Columbian Purple Kush was a variety that was popular in the Fraser Valley a few years back Hope you are enjoying the tale :)
Date: September 19 2015 10:13 AM Title: Chapter 5
Tension building!!! I like how you are laying so much ground work, so that when anything happens it's been well foreshadowed.
It took me awhile; but I think I figured out the odor on Tom's hand. In the interest of not being a spoiler, I'll keep my guess to myself. Let's just say Optimus comes to mind.
Nine missing students, a principle and teacher missing, sounds like a lot of playthings. Two teachers mysteriously "retiring"; or were they "happily volunteering" { I sure would; but for whom and in what way??? }. Will Morris ever get a full accounting of all thirteen?
Not sure who may or may not experience Silke's butt close up and personal; or in what way {e.g. shrunken, transformed (ha hum) } or for that matter if she'd go about completely unaware, living her life and never knowing of any constant companion.
Your stories have so much to build on and directions to go. Once again, great work.
Author's Response:
Thanks you for your generous praise and support I really appreciate your commentary it helps me consider perspective as I try to keep the story fresh.
[Report This]Date: September 19 2015 2:04 AM Title: Chapter 5
Really nice to see some pot smoking done right in a story on here and the fact that the story is good is a bonus lol.
Really liking these characters and this plot.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thanks the story is starting to unfold
[Report This]Date: September 18 2015 7:51 PM Title: Chapter 5
You know how killers/assassins always want to know their target and try to make a clean execution? Well, that's exactly what is going on.
These girls are going to corner Morris, lure him into a trap, and deny him of all resources as they make him beg for mercy.
Let's play this out. The Graces send Morris's family to some other country or business trip, vacation thing for month. Before they leave, the girls wipe their memory of Morris. Then the girls go to school and wipe the memory of Morris from everyone. Then they kidnap Morris, take him to their house and try to make love to him. Morris then let's his walls come down as he can't resist the hotness and when he is vulnerable, the Graces strike: they pin him down. One girl on each arm, the last one hovers over his mouth and shoves something down his throat. Morris gags, trying to get it out, but the girl puts her boobs on his face forcing him to suffocate and eventually he stops trying to cough it up. Morris becomes too tired to fight back, and the Graces tie him up. They force him to pleasure each one of them before finally they shrink him. They each take turns playing with Morris, before eventually one of them swallows them. As Morris goes down her throat, he hears them plan their next target; Tom.
Please leave a comment on my chapter, all reviews will be accepted! Thanks!
Man, writing that was fun. But basically, Morris is fucked.
Also, what up with Tom's hand? Since that's my character, I'm concerned. Is that some sort of tracking device from the girls, did they spray something on him.
Also, Tom is becoming stupid. (In both this story and Tom's story.) I just want to smack them in the face. Some giantess has to teach him some manners!
Very good chapter. It was funny, interesting, and adds more fuel to the fire that is Morris's "vision".
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: September 13 2015 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 4
The build up is getting pretty intense, like an avalanche about to go over a cliff. I notice all the "Midas touches" Morris is getting from the girls and one of his teachers. Kimber touching him on the cheek. Ms. Mackenzie putting her hand on his shoulder. Susannah grabing his arm. Has he been stung by them all and not know it yet?
Is Ms. Mackenzie one of the shrinkers? Does she keep a "teacher's pet(s)" on {in???} her person? That sure would explain any missing people reports over the years.
I have to admit, this story line has SO MANY possibilities that it's humbling to read such great work.
[Report This]Date: September 12 2015 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great stuff my good man
[Report This]Date: September 12 2015 12:50 PM Title: Chapter 4
Forget the Graces, I just fell in love with Ms. Mackenzie. Wow, your description of her is so attractive.
She has the same gentleness and control of Karolina and I wouldn't mind spending detention with her. I would mind if she was my giantess owner, I mean wow, she sounds beautiful.
Did I mention that I had a thing for sexy teachers? I just love stories with sexy teachers that 'teach' young boys. Detention, after school chores, tutoring, private lessons in her home. Man, I haven't seen a hot teacher in a story in a long time.
My only story that I wrote on this site was based off a sexy teacher. This chapter gave me some good memories and ideas.
While the Graces seem to be portrayed as goddesses in human form, I would rather be with Ms. Mackenzie. (Unless these girls become even sexier to change my mind.)
Since we saw a character die, does this mean that Morris, Tom and Sly will all die to these women? If the Tom character dies to a Grace that's ok. If Tom dies to a bird that thought he was a snack, then that's not ok. Lol. But if Tom dies to Ms. Mackenzie then that's the way to go. (That's assuming these characters will eventually die. If not, then ignore the death part I mentioned.)
If they don't die, then you know who I want to see end up with Tom. (Tom has Ms. Mackenzie as a teacher too, right?)
I have a feeling that each Grace will get a guy, so I don't think it will happen my way, but it won't be that bad, because these girls are Janine sexy.
Wait a minute. The Graces are Janine, and Ms. Mackenzie is Karolina! This story is the opposite of Tom's story. Morris's story deals more with the girls, while Tom deals with the adult woman. Both stories also start in a classroom setting. We got teens flirting with each other and while Tom in Tom's story willingly goes to Janine, Morris on the other hand will be hunted by the girls and these girls are going to come for him. Things are starting to make sense now.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: September 10 2015 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 3
Yep as I thought, more are getting obliviously roped into this unbelievable tale. The more folks Tom tells I'm sure the worse it'll finally be when the trap is sprung.
Len was shrunk for spreading false-tales, so what'll happen to Tom for spreading true-tales?
Whatever the case, the girls are doing a great job of setting up an eerie goosebumps kinda vibe around the protagonist :D
I'm curious as to whether Tom'll be saved for last but throughout the day, the people he shared his unbelievable story with will start disappearing xD
Author's Response:
Trying to heighten the suspense for poor Mo as he tries to find a rational explanation for an irrational situation, he may be inadvertantly drawing more flies to the spider's web, we'll see :)
[Report This]Date: September 09 2015 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 3
Just as I predicted! Tom and Sly didn't believe a word!
When Sly said that he wished to be swallowed, Tom also said that he wants to be swallowed. Is this a foreshadowing of some vore?
Wow, I love how these super sexy girls are stalking and preying on this kid Morris. I bet these girls do know Morris saw them. Why? Because most guys would just melt if they came in contact with them. Morris however retreats in fear. Checkmate. The girls know.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: September 05 2015 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 2
Yes! A character with the name "Tom" again! I wonder what ride I will be on in this story.
Kimber is the super sexy girl that shrunk Len. Just remember that. And she did it by touch. I was getting nervous when she touched Morriss's cheek, like "is he going to shrink?" I guess not.
However, I bet Morris did have to change his underwear after that, not because he came into it, but probably because he pissed his pants after that. He thought he was going to shrink too! I bet he was scared. And my character, Tom, was in awe of the whole spectacle. Just watching my friend got touched by Kimber oblivious to Morris's fear.
Remember how a rumor spread of that one girl who gave a bj to Len? Well, I think Morris about to start a new rumor about Kimber shrinking people and soon he will be their next target.
For the next chapter, we know my boy Tom will not believe a word that Morris says. First, he believes that Morris's mental state has changed when he died his thing under the bleachers and also is still mesmerized from Kimber's presence just now. We know Morris has to get it off his chest, but I don't think now is the best time to tell Tom.
If Morris really wanted to convince Tom, then he should contact his other friend Tom who is sleeping in Lina's panties. :)
Or Morris and Tom should check out the site giantessworld and find this story and look at chapter 1 for proof. Lol. Does that make sense?
Well, either way, I don't think Tom will believe Morris next chapter. Then Morris will try to spy on the girls to check if it wasn't the effects of his drug thing. Then Morris sees it again, but this time(that's right) he gets caught. Yep, I think that's when Morris will shrink and soon Tom afterward.
Tom shrinking in another story? Hmmm. And he could be captured by a hot teen? Hmm. This sounds familiar. I hope one of their moms gets Tom, but if not, that's ok. We already have a Tom/MILF relationship in another story. This time, it's about Morris.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Figured you'd approve of the inclusion of another Tom. In Morris’s mind what real and what's imagined are clouded by his altered state.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2015 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 2
Gotta say I'm plesantly surprised and intrigued to see that you didn't go with the insta-shrink result which the first chapter may have implied for Garfield to suffer.
Instead you're giving him time to possibly rope Tom and others into this story before the furies spring their trap through mounting suspense?
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading I'm trying to build the suspense. I think I'll make the shrink personal and up close requiring physical contact. But didn't Len get shrunk for telling tales?
Date: September 05 2015 11:18 AM Title: Chapter 2
What a cliff hanger; but nice story and character development. One has to wonder, where did the Graces acquire such power and why did Mrs. Pembry not ask Morris WHY he was late {does she know something just happened, sorta teacher - disciple psychic connection}?
Hmmm, psychic connection, imagine someone(s) lighting up only to channel Len in Susannah's stomach throughout the slow digestion process, feeling the experience from Len's mind, even hearing Susannah giggle and talk going about her day. Imagining waking in your own bed the next moring having "dreamt" that the entire time. {Not being sure how you got to your own bed making you doubt it really happened}
Does Len even get digested? Digested or not, does Len die in the process? Does Len's body, or at least his consciousness even come out, or remain in Susannah's bowels.
It would be a heck of a high if everytime Morris and Tom light up they are channeled to experience Len's existance; or if they exist the perspective of another of the Graces' shrunken - even transformed people.
You're story is full of possibilities. Great job in coming up with such a wonderful scenario.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the wealth of input. I think chapter 4 may include some dream sequencing as per some of your suggestions I haven't figured out all the details yet. :)
Date: September 05 2015 9:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love how head cheerleader Susannah just tips her head back and swallows Len then pats her stomach. Having Morris see Susannah's throat actually passing Len along is great. Makes one wonder if after school games Susannah ever swallows cheerleading squads or entire sports teams {perhaps both} from rival schools to have gulped Len down so easily. Will Morris get to hear Susannah digest Len throughout the school day {possibly as her belly button jewel / ring}
Are Elisha and Kimber also into swallowing their playthings, or do they prefer using them for other purposes considering their large breasts and shapely butts? Do the girls have different interests at all? Even though Susannah swallowed her tiny snack, do any of the girls prefer slaves, worshippers, bra or panty prisoners, living toe rings, trained pets?
If any of the school nerds were to find out these girls can shrink people, would they have the courage to ask, even beg to be shrunk for use by the girls? For that matter, would Morris? It makes one wonder.
Please keep up the great work. Whatever direction you take this story, I'm sure from what you have already it will be terrific. Thanks for writing this!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for following this story too Dark Writter. Again you bring some very interesting possibilities to the story and you've given me some ideas to play with. We'll see the proclivities of each of the girls before this story reaches it's end.
[Report This]Date: September 04 2015 12:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
Whoa! Whoa! Another story?!! Not that it's a bad thing, I just feel surprised, like you all ready got enough on your plate.
I'm curious. How did you get the title "Bang your head?"
What a first chapter! Defiantly an attention grabber and it's bound to be popular! I just have that feeling.
The funny part is that I clicked on this story because of the interesting summary. I never even knew it was you writing it! Now that I know, I can be sure it's going to be a good story!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom yup another story and you may be right, finish one start three more might be a bit much especially with school starting back up so updates will probably not be as frequent.
Bang Your Head is in reference to a 1983 song by Quiet Riot called Metal Health but alternatively called bang your head. Seeing as Mo is a pot/metal head I just thought it was a cool play. I have altered the title to include Mo's Story.
Hopefully this story will be received as you anticipate but we'll see. Enjoy!