Date: October 11 2015 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 11
Would have liked for it to be a bit longer and have more story progression but it was a good chapter nonetheless.
Author's Response:
Next chapter will see more significant story development, i just wanted to paint a clearer picture of Silke, is she or isn't she involved?
[Report This]Date: October 11 2015 1:27 PM Title: Chapter 11
I have a feeling that it's not the last time he looked at her crotch.
We saw another clue that Silke could be a Grace. Alright, I think that's enough evidence to conclude that she is a Grace. In fact, all those pretty women are Graces, or Graces in disguise.
If the Graces were a school club, Ms. Mackenzie would be in charge of it, Kimber, Elisha, and Sussanah are the top memebers, and Silke is like a runner up or something. That's how I see it.
Do people talk about crotches that casually? I mean, although it may have been awkward, Silke made it unawkward by continuing to talk and answer Mo's questions. In fact, it wasn't really that awkward at all. If Silke just sat there silent after each thing, then it would be truly awkward. Silke kinda encouraged him to talk about her crotch, like she had to shame of discussing it. Perhaps it's a clue that she also has no shame of using it. :0
Well Tom got kidnapped at his house, so perhaps this is when Mo gets kidnapped. Kidnapping never sounded so sexy. (Weird huh?)
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Pretty girls everywhere, not all are involved, or maybe it's just an aesthetic conspiracy, :)
Date: October 07 2015 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 10
Funny you should mention that about paranoia. With one of my current stories {Jack In Her Ass} I have two ways to take it. One way, everyone will comment I'm a, well let's just say a jerk. The other way, more conventional for this site I guess.
Perhaps I could write both and let readers decide the ending they prefer. Be interesting to twist the two, let me think on this one.
Oh, glad you took my attention to your story as the compliment it's intended.
As far as Silke being one of the Graces like I mentioned, that would be awkward to have her brother a victim; that is of course if he were actually a victim and simply didn't find out about the Graces powers and beg to belong to one of them. In which case it's an act of mercy. All this even assuming Silke could be one of them or Mo's not paranoid.
I really like how you kept so many alleyways open and the suspence building.
Author's Response:
If I can keep people guessing then it helps build suspense and sustain interest. I think in many ways a forum like this allows people to engage one another and help refine storytelling skills. Still waiting on yours btw :)
[Report This]Date: October 07 2015 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 10
This story seems very promising! Great detail and characters. I look forward to future chapters!
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking the time to share a review, hope i can keep you coming back for more, :)
[Report This]Date: October 06 2015 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 10
The hand on the shoulder was probably the only thing of suspense that I have guessed correctly. Then again, it was kind of obvious.
So Ms. Mackenzie knows the Graces. The way she looked at them tells me that they are like business partners. I think all 3 of them are actually holding a tiny man on or inside them. Perhaps they are going to play with them or possibly exchange them.
Holy shit. Since I'm Tom and if I'm really in Kimber's breast, that's awesome. However, if I get exchanged to Ms. Mackenzie, then that's heaven in my book. I hope that happens!
Why did Ms. Mackenzie say to "join" her? This means that she was already doing something and these girls are going to get involved with it as well. It's probably a giantess threesome or a group giantess sex party. That's the only solution that I can think of. These girls could not possibly be in detention. Nah, it has to be some sort of event. Girls only. In addition, Elisha smiled upon entering the room. It's gotta be true.
"Why don't you run along". I love your wording! The way she said that hints that she is telling Morris to run! Well, that's what Mo understands. To us readers, it seems more playful, and shows her control of her students. She told Mo to run, while she told the Graces to join. Controlling, but suggestive! Excellent!
Haha! Mo thinks the graces will shrink Ms. Mackenzie! Yeah right! If there is one thing I learned from your stories is that every sexy woman in a story becomes the giantess. I found it interesting that I didn't even think Ms. Mackenzie was in any danger, but Mo thought of it. Good awareness of what Mo must be feeling. If I wrote this chapter, I would've never thought of it. Mo had a thought about becoming the hero. Well, he doesn't even know what he's up against. Smart move that he ran away.
Let's take a detour and envision the position of Tom. He shrinks, Kim, sexy girl, picks him up and puts him in her shirt. Now he is snug in her boob. Now she takes him in a room with her sexy friend Elisha and the sexy teacher of Ms. Mackenzie. Imagine the conversations! Imagine the feelings that Tom is experiencing. He might get laid in there. Perhaps it will be the best thing that happened in his life. (This is all speculation, but just imagine!)
Hey, look. I haven't seen someone talk about the "fight or flight" response in a while. I agree, if I was in Mo's position, I would probably run too. However, since I have my fantasies, I might just go back to Ms. Mackenzie's room and sneak a peak in the door's window. I may get to see something amazing. Or they spot me and bring me in. Then they punish me. Wow, this is exciting.
Silks is a messenger. She's the Grace's scout, letting them know about Tom, sly and Mo. Look at her excuses about where Sly was. Doctor's appointment? Pfft. She made that shit up. She doesn't know about Tom, yeah right. I bet she knows that Kimber is basically using forced breast feeding on Tom or something like that.
How does Silke say "I haven't seen Tom all day" and then smile? That seems sketchy. Mo needs to figure this thing out before things get out of hand.
Uh oh. Silke trying to connect Mo with Elisha. And now she makes him get in her car! It's a trap! Don't do it! (He's probably going to do it.)
So, is Mo about to tell Silke about everything? That's not good because then Silke will tell Elisha about it. After all, we know Elisha and Silke hang out together.
Are they going to Silke's house? What if the Grafes show up? Mo would find himself in a pickle real fast.
We got hints of giantess action thanks to Kimber. Perhaps it's time for the big reveal!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Sthanks for the review tom, as always great to hear from you. this story is fast approaching the point of the reveal, the Graces will only toy with him for so long. Yeah who knows what going on with silke, right? Or Ms. Mackenzie? is she, isn't she? Oh wait, I know ;)
Date: October 05 2015 7:22 PM Title: Chapter 10
"Mo a captive in Kimber's top,..." - "Mo"????? Hmmm, "Tom..."!!! ; )
Please don't consider that me being critical; rather consider that I acknowledge I'm following your story with rapt attention.
Seems all of a sudden Silke may be a closet Grace, making excusses about Sly and touching Mo. Coincidence? Which reminds me, I'm working on a story. Actually a few; but not sure if I should post any if I finish one.
So they're might be having a pow-wow about what to do with Mo, or perhaps who gets to keep him. Once agin, interesting possibilities.
Author's Response:
Nope, not being overly critical at all, in fact i appreciate it because otherwise the story doesn't seem cohesive, thanks for noticing it and bringing it to my attention! When you finish your story, throw it out there, you have got to share, you've got some great ideas and i would love to check it out!
who knows about Silke, or any of them for that matter? Maybe Mo has just become overly paranoid and jumping at shadows...
Date: October 05 2015 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 10
This is REALLY getting good, I can't wait for more! I'm really glad Ms.Mackenzie is okay, I'd really like her to get her hands on Morris when he's tiny, but if she is shrunken or gets eaten or crushed, that idea goes down the toilet...
Author's Response:
It is definitely starting to heat up, I don't think we've seen the last of Ms. Mackenzie, ;)
[Report This]Date: October 05 2015 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 10
A good game of cat and mouse, like an old school horrow anthology show.
Author's Response:
Thanks, great analogy, but the noose is starting to tighten....
Date: October 01 2015 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 9
Great chapter, and it looks like things only get better from here! I gotta say that your stories are some of the rare few on this site that can keep my attention for long with little to no gts content so kudos to you.
Author's Response:
Thanks, once the floodgates open and the GTS content flows, it is what it is, but if i can continue to heighten the emotion and feeling of the character as he knows whats coming, I think it helps strengthen the overall story. there is a good teaser next chapter, :)
[Report This]Date: October 01 2015 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 9
Another Aedin fan? Can someone just fuck him already? Please Daphne. Just do it.
I'm getting a bit tired of all these Aedin Stary references. I like the connections, but not when one connection gets used over and over again.
Love how you skim over the boring classes and write out details on the awesome class. (Ms. Mackenzie.)
When you describe the outfit of some woman, I always get butterflies in my stomach because she is a possible giantess candidate. I would love her to be my giantess.
Whoa, whoa whoa! "Hint of something floral lingering"?!!! That's the dream! That's it! Ms. Mackenzie was in Mo's room! I don't know why, but Mo is smelling the same thing he smelled this morning!
Did Ms. Mackenzie just call Mo handsome? Wtf. I wish hot teachers actually say that in real life. Let alone finding a hot teacher is difficult enough.
(At this point, I just read that Mo connected the dots about Ms. Mackenzie and his dream. Now my review looks a bit stupid. I review as I'm reading which usually makes my review long, but now it just looks bad. But at least you can see I connected the dots before Mo did.)
Years worth of detention? You know what? If Ms. Mackenzie is as hot as you describe, then that 1 year of detention would actually be a great thing.
When Kimber and Elisha were in the hall, I would've gone back into Ms. Mackenzie's room. Just as I thought that, a hand went in his shoulder. Obviously, it has to be Ms. Mackenzie's hand.
This now begs the question. Is Ms. Mackenzie working with these lovely ladies? I hope so, it would make an interesting group. It also reminds us that the sexy ones are smart and cunning.
You know Duggernaut, I really like Mo's position in this story so much that it has taken my priority to this story over Tom's story. (Gasp!). Mo, is in a state of heaven. Sexy cliffhanger. Tom on the other hand is going to Janine, who is sexy, don't get me wrong, but the thrill of these Graces and Ms. Mackenzie is too much. This is now my favorite story at the moment. Good job.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Ooooh, got you hooked. I think this one is appealing to you because of recent developments in Tom's Story (but not to worry, all is unfolding properly). Ok no more Injustice cheap shots and Aedin Stray, I almost promise, More suspense this chapter, but we are getting closer and closer to that big reveal, *rubs his hands together evilly*
[Report This]Date: October 01 2015 9:38 PM Title: Chapter 9
Great stuff, looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Itsa coming! Thanks for the read and review!
Date: October 01 2015 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 9
I think this is a chapter meant for your story "Botched" {ha ha, kinda ironic, sorry, had to kid ya about it}
Author's Response:
CRAP!!! I don't know that happened, i'm going to have to be more conscientious when I'm loading updates, or stagger the stories to make sure there is no overlap. *shakes his fist in frustration at the screen*
Thanks for pointing it out, :)
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 11:31 PM Title: Chapter 8
The suspense is unreal!
We know they both got shrunk! If there's a chance, it happened!
Since Tom is my guy, I hope he's not dead yet. Would be interesting if that teacher played with him. Ah what am I talking about, he's probably already swallowed down. Lol.
Last man standing. Morris, what are you going to do.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Lol, there will definitely be more about Sly and Tom, but not yet, :)
Date: September 28 2015 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 8
Both Tom and Sly gone, NICE! These girls remind me of seals and dolphines playing with their live prey.
When he dreamed of a brunette, I was curious if it was Elisha. Not that we know if it was yet; but a quick reference to last night {e.g. "Did you like exploring my body?" or pointing to her crotch and whispering "Lightning Bolt"} or will Mo notice her fragrance is the same as his room was last night?
So have Tom and Sly been shrunk or transformed? Will the Graces play more mind games, perhaps catching his attention when no one else is looking, pulling out a shrunken person and playing with them or sitting where he can see them in the lunch room as they swallow more.
Will Mo get stoned and drift off in a haze onlt to see and feel where/what Tom and Sly are?
Great as always.
Author's Response:
Exactly like seals, savoring the play almost as much as the take down, heightening the experience. More revealed next chapter, starts twisting and opening other scenarios. We'll see how the Graces take their torment to the next level
Date: September 28 2015 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 1
@ TomSpeedy I tried copy and paste each time, it won't let me do it. Thank you for mentioning it though. On a side note, I just noticed you have a story posted. I'll have to check it out.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 8
you know, thinking about it many would assume that chapters containing roughly 1000 words per chapter would be hardly worth reading and less engaging. But going over all your works, you've somehow managed to produce a very effective style out if it. Every chapter is brief yet still well detailed. If anything its clever as the brief paragraphs of action and content always lead off on a quick and effective cliff-hanger leaving the reader hungry for more. And luckily since the word count isn't too demanding for you, you're able to update it so frequently that it becomes a rewarding series to keep following. It's brilliant. You are an impressive writer sir xD
as for this chapter and the one prior, excellent! Tom's perdicament totally called it but wasn't let down at all. Hell I found it clever how you introduced his situation via dream-sequence. Coincidental or do these girls have some magical genes in their blood there :D
I'm also loving the mounting tension now as the impending victim is slowly becoming more aware of the slowly tightening noose around his neck
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment about my writing! Tension is certainly beginning to mount and there aqre many different possibilities to consider. We'll see how these girls are able to do what they do fairly soon. Hope i can keep your interest piqued!
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 8
These chicks are sociopaths! They just murdered a guy and are going about their business like nothing happened and are even threatening this poor guy who just happened to witness it all. I can't say I don't fear for Morris, I get the feeling he's not far off from ending on the chopping block himself! Great chapter, I especially liked the scene when Elisha pressed herself up against him while lewdly threatening him.
Author's Response:
Vain creatures with access to a lot of power. Brutal combination! Elisha, sassy little minx isn't she?
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 8
The plot thickens...
Author's Response:
Muwahaha, the chain is getting shorter
[Report This]Date: September 26 2015 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 7
Either it was a dream and there were flowers in Mo's room the enhance the dream. Or, it was one of the Graces who snuck into Mo's room, shrunk him and played with him and left before he woke up.
I think this is the best "mystery" of all your stories, because most of my reviews and thoughts are based on simple clues or assumptions. Very little evidence to make a good guess and guarantee it. Then one chapter you spill the truth at once. That's how it goes and I like it. The fun part is guessing which chapter that may be, because it could be any chapter.
Might even be the next one.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Maybe...
Date: September 26 2015 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
@Dark Writer, I have had similar issues and usually when it says "I am not allowed to perform this function", I would scroll down and copy my review. If it's not there, then I click the back button and it should show up for you to copy it. Then I re-login to the site and paste my review that I copied and then I submit it. (I submit reviews through my phone. Not sure how it works on a computer. Might be the same.)
Author's Response:
Thanks for popinting out how to get around it tom!