Date: November 17 2015 8:59 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Maximus,
When Giantesslover said that Janine always wins, he meant that Janine kinda outplays everyone. No one has really outplayed Janine except Karolina one time.
Date: November 17 2015 8:58 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Maximus
Hey I never said the story was badly written, in fact it's one of my favorites on this site now that I've caught up on it. And I'm not saying EVERY character is lacking personality, just the main character, he feels a bit like a perverted dude camera to me, who sometimes goes entire chapters without uttering a word. Every other character though has a distinct personality. And you're right this story IS leaning more towards erotica than a simple story, again, nothing wrong with that. In fact my main story is mostly erotic and nothing else to be honest.
Date: November 17 2015 8:51 PM Title: Tom's Story
I saw it, Cary, but didn't think anyone was still lame enough to point out typos ;)
And I've seen quite a few boring authors make them. Most readers probably fall asleep during the snooze fest and miss them, though.
Date: November 17 2015 7:27 PM Title: Tom's Story
@ Maximus: At least even the boring authors can spell "twist" properly. ;-)
"Twits and turns?" Still lmao.
[Report This]Date: November 17 2015 2:16 PM Title: Alpha
Back where he belongs! She is a cunning little minx, phew, now Toms in trouble, he may never get out of her panties again. Of course, he may actually iike that unless he finds himself a little further south *weg*
Couple of rebuttals to some other reviews. First, not sure how Janine ALWAYS wins, she went 21 chapters without her little prize.
Second, disregard everything wombo said, the characters are great, each with distinctive personalities. And while this story has plenty of eroticism in it, its not an over abundance, its not like every chapter every scene there is sex. I wonder why some of you even come to a fetish site, too many stories around here bore me to tears, you have a great balance in yours, Duggernaught.
Hands down, one of the best contributors here. Stories are well written, have action, twits and turns and you give both gentle and violent fans something to enjoy, very well done.
Author's Response:
I did say have some patience. Thank you for the lofty praise regarding my contributions to this site, and for addressing Giantesslover122's question of why Janine seems to come out on top.
Date: November 17 2015 1:28 PM Title: Alpha
Decent story, this one kind of reminds me of some of wildcatman's works, particularly "The Decrement of Tom", I guess "Tom" being the same name in both stories is just because Tom referes to ThomThumb which is a popular shrunken man character. But anyway you're writing really reminds me of his works, in fact some of the criticisms I have of this story are the SAME I gave to him on many occasions. Namely, that your protagonist feels more like a camera that goes from woman to woman, set-piece to set-piece, rather than an actual character. But then again this story is more towards the side of pure erotica than a story with some sexyness in it, not that this is a bad thing mind you. Anyway, I'll be keeping up with this one, keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
ThanK you for the feedback, I appreciate your input and will keep it in mind when continuing this or others stories. :)
[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 10:34 PM Title: Alpha
@ Giantesslover122
Because "it's her birthday, and she'll win if she wants to. Win if she wants to; win if she wants to! If you were shrunken, too, she'd win over you."
"Doot-doot-doot-doot! DOOT!"
Date: November 16 2015 10:29 PM Title: Tom's Story
Now that was a twist I did not expect at all.
Author's Response:
Well that's good then, :)
[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 7:03 PM Title: Alpha
Why does Janine always have to fucking win?
Author's Response:
Janine is amoral and ruthless which gives her a certain advantage because she is willing to do things that might gives others pause. The story is not done yet. :)
[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 6:29 PM Title: Alpha
Hey, first of all, glad you are back. I got worried for some time. Nonetheless, you are back.
First of all, I'm not quite sure if that's a showdown. I mean, sure it was two people having a verbal showdown, but I kinda expected it to be bigger. Then again, it would be probably more difficult to have a multi person showdown with multiple women.
Janine said a lot of cruel stuff. Always one step ahead she is. Of her mother, of Tess, and now Miss Addison.
I have no idea about half the things that Janine said, but it sounded scary, the way it sounded official.
So Tom is back with Janine. Miss Addison's adventure with Tom was short timed just like Tess and Sam.
Perhaps this is a good time to catch up on the Lindholm residence. Is the father still there? How long will he be there? Has Lina figured it out? What did Janine say that made Francis arrive? So many questions about that phone call earlier that I want to know!
Then we have Tess. She thinks it's Miss Addison too. Is this going to be a cat and mouse game? Will Tess ask Miss Addison about Tom too. Lol. Miss Addison will be freaked about how many girls know she had Tom.
Last of all, Miss Addison. What will she do? Will she kidnap another boy from school? (Ok, that won't happen, but I had to suggest it.) Will she report Janine of kidnapping? Or even better, will she call Lina? Now that could be interesting.
Next chapter could be anything and I am ready for it. I can't wait!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom, life sometimes gets in the way of writing and that causes some delay in providing updates. Janine is like Ilsa, She-Wolf of the SS and there was no way Miss Addison was prepared for her. I have moved Tom around a lot and fairly quickly to try and keep it interesting, but he may be in some trouble now she has her talons on him again, we'll see...
[Report This]Date: November 16 2015 5:59 PM Title: Alpha
Miss Addison has met her match...and that match will now give Tom an unbearably hot time in the old town, tonight.
Date: November 12 2015 8:36 PM Title: Tom's Story
"You should never doubt what no one is sure of." ---Willy Wonka (Gene Wilder).
Date: November 12 2015 4:38 PM Title: Tom's Story
Well in that case, it would be a showdown. But I doubt all of them would be in the same bathroom at once.
[Report This]Date: November 12 2015 1:39 PM Title: Tom's Story
Not unless Sam, Tessa, and Jasmine have that showdown in the bathroom with Miss Addison. What could better climax could there be than a four-way free-for-all on the white tile floor of a girl's lav?
:-|
Wait! Let me rephrase that...
Date: November 10 2015 6:12 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Carycomic, Haha! Yeah, right.
A showdown has got to be much bigger than that. I suspect more action than a simple bathroom break.
[Report This]Date: November 10 2015 10:53 AM Title: All Day Detention
@ Tom Speedy:
And I predict that the showdown will involve Our Little Hero falling off his "perch" during some bathroom break. Only to be found by Tatiana and/or Astrid!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 9:16 PM Title: All Day Detention
So Mrs Adison huh, did not see that coming. I mean I knew Janine didnt swallow him but dang it, now you got me wanting her to have a snack.
I like how Adison is putting Tom in his place and how you added some descriptions of Toms discomfort. I noted that in the beginning of this story on how its more realistic to show Tom being a little worse for wear after what would be some uncomfortable situations. Good job!
Date: November 09 2015 8:29 PM Title: All Day Detention
Tom or Michael should be tapped to the toilet seat or toilet bowl (just above the water) of the girl's/women's washroom. At school or at home. Best author I've ever read!
Author's Response:
Thaks for the review, we'll see which direction this story takes. As for Michael, he too is in over his head and who knows whether or not he's going to spend some time in the bowl. Thanks for the praise considering there are some wickedly talented authors sharing their tales on the site. Hope you continue to enjoy!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 1:36 PM Title: All Day Detention
This chapter seems like a setup for the next one.
Obviously, you mentioned "Next chapter-Showdown!" So I'm hyped about it.
My prediction: Jane, Tess, Sam, (Lina shows up, or even Miss Harwood shows up) all confront Miss Addison. Janine will feel her up becuase she is that desperate. Miss Addison mentions suspension but Janine brings up some blackmail. Tess is going "wtf no, he's mine". Janine fires back that Tom is her present and then all of a sudden the principal walks in. She orders them all to her office and after a bunch of the principal keeps Tom. Every woman disagrees, but the principal demands that everyone leaves. The principal looks at Tom and talks about how if she was younger, she would love to go out with him. Miss Harwood shows up with some good news for the principal and the principal decides to go out and celebrate tonight. She thanks Miss Harwood and decides to reward her with Tom. Miss Harwood gladly accepts and mixed emotions go through him. (Fear, arousal). Miss Harwood then seduces Tom and gets him to cum. Miss Harwood then asks for him to make her cum and puts him in her panties. Tom reluctantly accepts but claims that it is better than Miss Addison.
That is my version of the showdown.
Hope it happens! I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: November 09 2015 1:01 PM Title: All Day Detention
Even more ironic than Tom's unintended pun? "Pandora" translates as "all-gift." So, it could be said that he's trapped in a gift box!*
*Similar to how Janine deliberately misinterpreted his presence, at her birthday party, as wanting to be one of her presents! ;-D