[Report This]Date: January 07 2016 9:16 PM Title: 911
I don't think Jessica has Tom, becuase that seems way too predictable. The fact that she was with Janine when she woke up, and also goes to the restroom before meeting with Dad.
Then again, she just nonchalantly says Tom as if she doesn't have him. However, when Lina told her that Tom is a boy from school, I bet Jessica connected the dots and went to the restroom with an unknown little boy she found. Despite all these clues, Duggernaut likes surprises and I think he wants us to pick Jessica.
When Lina showed up, I was going to claim it was her, but then she started thinking about Tom's whereabouts and that eliminated her from these choices.
My guess would be some nurse who put the catheter inside Janine. She probably put it inside and felt something tug it, therefore finding Tom.
I don't think Tom is dying by the car remains. That would seem unlikely and the main characters would probably not find him.
I almost forgot, but where did Jessica come from? I thought Janine was an only child but you actually did a great job hiding her. I wouldn't mind Jessica taking Tom, but I still prefer Lina above all.
Now Tess is coming too? It's going to be a mass character party soon. Every single person will be at this hospital and it feels like something big is about to happen.
I might do a later review becuase there is much to speculate. Either way, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I know you are a big Lina fan, and yes everyone who knows seems to be gathering to try and find our wayward little protagonist before something awful happens. Funny, no one yet has suggested he might snuck out of Janine's bed on his own and is hiding in the room somewhere, could be, secretly spying on all the Lindholm women all at once. Tom is a sneaky little rascal after all, :)
Date: January 07 2016 8:49 PM Title: 911
Tom has been getting tossed around like a rag doll in this story hasn't he? I'm wondering if it's possible a nurse found him in Janine's panties or something and snatched him away. I guess the posibilities of where he could be at this point are limitless! But I hope this guy catches a break, really ANYONE that he ends up with who's a semi-decent person will be better than Janine. Despite being a beauty and all, she treated him horribly (probably the worse of anyone so far), of that theres no arguing...
Author's Response:
Tom has been the author of a fair portion of his misfortune, getting in over his head, literally and proverbially. We shall see what direction his fortunes take very shortly. Janine is a force of nature, much like a cyclone, awe inspiring to look at, but suck the wind right out of your lungs if you get too close!
[Report This]Date: January 07 2016 8:16 PM Title: 911
Hmm, was hoping there was no accident even know I knew there would be. Its always sad when Janine loses control of Tom :)
I was going to suspect a nurse may have Tom, and perhaps one does but not sure if you can keep introducing new people who want nothing more to kidnap Tom for themselves.
Likewise, dont think Jessica has him or if she does, I dont see you having her whisking him away to her dorm, to close to Michaels story being passed around as a plaything. Of course, would not complain, can never have too much of that!
So perhaps Tom is still in the car? Dangerous predicament if true.
Eagerly await the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Lol, you've made no secret you are in Janine's corner as she methodically goes after and gets what she wants. There are parallels between the two stories for sure, however the sibling relationship is WAY different. Tom has an ally, Michael, well, hmm, hopefully he has a happy place...
[Report This]Date: January 07 2016 7:34 PM Title: 911
Whoa! I'm 301st? Yay me!!
Seriously, though : This was a suitably dramatic cliff-hanger, in so many ways. Especially the plot twist of introducing a college-age older sister for Janine! This raises the possibility of Jessica finding Tom before anyone else. And, perhaps, keeping that discovery to herself until she gets back to her college with him!
Of course, I realize that high school-age shrunken man winding up with a nymphomaniacal sorority is kind of an over-used cliche' on this website. But, given your positive track record, so far, I've no doubt you'll be able to put a unique spin on such a gimmick.
I eagerly await the next chapter, as I get my booster shot of anti-Tomspeedyitis vaccine. ;-D
Author's Response:
Sooo many different options avaiable to try and redirect this story. I do think the sorority might be a little too cliche, but another beautiful woman can help get people looking in other places, maybe, or maybe not.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2016 9:26 PM Title: Tess
Haha, thats harsh after the cliff hanger you left us with :)
I understand why though and am most curious about Harrison, something doesn't sit right with him.
Seems Miss Addison will throw a wrench in Janines well laid plans. Crossing Janine does not seem like a good career move.
Speaking of Janine, hope she is as adept at driving that sports car as she is cunning.
Author's Response:
That's why I apologized in the preface. Bad career move? Bad all the way around to cross that girl. There will be more from Harrison but not for a few chapters. Next chapter will be a Janine chapter.
Date: January 05 2016 11:42 AM Title: Tess
Postscript: I'm not disappointed with the non-gts interlude. It merely (but delightfully) heightens the suspense!
Welcome home, btw. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you for the reception and the feedback.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2016 11:40 AM Title: Tess
It would seem Miss Addison is about to employ that old battlefield adage: "The enemy of my enemy is my friend."
[Contrary to popular belief, that phrase was NOT coined by the writers of "Aliens vs. Predator!"]
Author's Response:
Kautilya
[Report This]Date: January 04 2016 11:55 PM Title: Tess
First of all, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. It's feels good to say that again. Long time since you last posted.
Second, that authors note made me laugh. Not becuase I expected something like this to happen this chapter but becuase even you yourself knew that people might be dissapointed with this chapter.
Ok, this chapter wasn't that bad becuase the entry of Miss Addison definately makes it a worthwhile cliffhanger. Other than that, when I saw the paragraph title of Tess, I admit I was hoping for some hospital action instead. (Unless they didn't crash. Ugh! Ur cliffhangers are just too good!)
Man, Miss Addison feels so 2015, like that was a while ago since we saw her. I bet she is just going to flat out tell Tess that Janine has Tom. I don't think Miss Addison is like the other women who are curious about how Tom shrank and all that. I think Miss Addison learned her lesson of stealing Tom and may even apololigize for it.
I think this whole "search for the cure/grandpa" thing is getting pointless, becuase I don't see where it can go after this. It might be better to just accept the fact that Tom is shrunk and what's done is done. That way, the giantess stuff can keep on rolling.
While part of me wants to know why Miss Addison is visiting Tess, I still prefer reading about Janine driving over 100 mph in her sports car with Tom igniting her from the inside of her underwear.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom yeah I figured after the break of a couple weeks people would want to know about Janine but I needed to establish interaction between miss Addison and Tess for the chapter that will follow this one. Probably in another day or two.l then we see what if anything happened to Janine. Harrison Kinsley's name appears in another story of mine, but we'll get back to that later. Cheers
[Report This]Date: December 23 2015 3:13 PM Title: That Awkward Father Daughter Conversation
Hmmm, if they crash this might be the best chance Tom has to get away. This opens up a world of possibilities, can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
It certainly does allow for a multitude of possibilites, who knows?
[Report This]Date: December 22 2015 7:36 AM Title: That Awkward Father Daughter Conversation
Will Janine have an accident? Will Tom be miraculously thrown clear? Or will they both wind up in the hospital? With Tom being confiscated by some sex-starved nurse? Or, even worse (for certain other readers): will he be found among Janine's personal effects by the Lindholm's housekeeper?
All these questions (among others) to be answered, by the author, after the start of the New Year. Until then?
Merry Xmas to all, and to all a good day. :-)
Author's Response:
Hey Carycomic, there exists a plethora of possible directions to take this story, and you are absolutely right, there does seem to be a dividing liune for those who have invested in this tale, should be interesting. Happy holidays!
[Report This]Date: December 21 2015 9:42 PM Title: That Awkward Father Daughter Conversation
Haha, this conversation is only awkward with Janine using all these giantess references.
"Guys ur age wanna get in ur pants". Janine must have been laughing inside her head.
I don't think this loss of control will make her crash. Nah, I think it's just a scare.
Or.... Janine gets injured, goes to the hospital. Nurses then strip her clothes and when an X-ray goes thru, they find Tom. That would be interesting to see. Janine probably wakes up thinking about Tom instead of her own well being. Lol.
Or...Janine gets injured. Lina gets a call to arrive at the hospital, then when the nurses leave, Lina sticks her hand in the unconscious Janine and finds Tom.
So many possibilities!
This cliffhanger seems like it can go in multiple directions. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
So many possible things could happen. What if they don't crash? What if they do and there is a female paramedic, so many ways to go...
[Report This]Date: December 19 2015 1:56 PM Title: Lazarus
excellent!
Tom should die ingested and digested by someone, showing every part of digestion.
Author's Response:
Janine thought about it, and in the end, maybe thats the way he'll go, not sure yet, this story is still unfolding for me as well.
Date: December 17 2015 8:05 PM Title: Tom's Story
Never mind my previous post. I envisioned digestion to be a much faster process.
[Report This]Date: December 17 2015 7:58 PM Title: Lazarus
Awesome, I figured she swalowed him but did not know what reaction she would have, panic or calm and casual and I must say I love how she reacted!
The amount of time Tom spent in her stomach was minscule, way to short to cause any damage, it takes 45 minutes for stomach acids to reach the ph level necessary to start breaking down food.
I suspect Lina will now be suspicious about Janines behavior so it wasnt a total victory for Janine, she will need to be very careful going forward.
One thing she shouldnt have to worry about anymore is Tom acting out, I think her swallowing him triggered an even darker side to Janine, she is the true badass here.
Well done, Duggernaut!
Author's Response:
Thanks Maximus, I think this chapter has certainly taken the smirk off Tom's face and redefined his situation. Janine's swallowing of him did open her mind to new possibilities.
[Report This]Date: December 17 2015 12:13 AM Title: Lazarus
Whaaaat? He was in her esophagus and then her stomach for the entire time when she went to the bathroom?
She had time to respond to Lina, show her a hand full of spit, and go "hastily" to the bathroom all while Tom is inside her?
Seems a bit superficial. Either Tom immediately went into her stomach and something acidic may have affected him. It wouldn't dissolve him right away, but he should have at least a somewhat major injury. Or, he puts up a struggle in her esophagus that she chokes up and couldn't even speak to her mother. Seemed like he went straight down immediately. And in that case, it's like a good 15 seconds in her stomach which is a lot.
Sure, I guess I'm a bit after these minor details, but I envisioned a totally different scenario. I thought that Janine would've been forced to vomit him up right there by the front door and have no time to go to that bathroom to cough him up. By looking at the last chapter, it seemed like Janine would either reveal Tom in her mouth, or keep him in her stomach for good. I found this vomiting him up later in the bathroom sequence some bs.
Also, remember when Tom pleasured Lina to a point where she was moaning in front of Janine? Well, couldn't Tom do that again right before they hugged? I feel like he could've made Janine expose her captive by some stimulation on his part.
Well, it was still an entertaining chapter no doubt. Janine showing no signs of a weakness and Tom is running out of options.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 8:26 PM Title: Lazarus
Well I can safely say that Janine is the most dangerous girl that Tom has encountered so far. She's a complete sociopath, devoid of any empathy or care for anyone else but herself and her own fun...Dangerous to the nth degree, Tom would be better off with anyone else at this point! I'm still wondering how this guy is sane after all he's been through!
Author's Response:
Tom is pretty resilient, but this latest round has certainly make him take the situation more seriously.
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 7:31 PM Title: Lazarus
As my parents (the Foxwoods gambling addicts) might say: "Long shots almost never pay off. And this was definitely WAY outside the 'almost' category."
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 7:09 PM Title: Lazarus
My goodness, Tom is really on thin ice now. He better focus on pleasing Janine to the best of his ability for the immediate future. The dark turn this story has taken is great, very well written. You can feel Tom's fear right now.
[Report This]Date: December 12 2015 5:15 PM Title: Janine
I really really like where this is going. Tom is a freaking badass.
This twitch that we all witness is a sign that he was faking the whole damn time. I bet after all that time with giantesses has given him time to learn some new skills.
Like two chapters ago, Tom was already making a plan to escape. We never knew how, but this time, he is using Janine to get out. It looks like he is going to make Janine choke right there on the stairs and only her mother will see this becuase Francis is in the car.
Janine will probably say that she is choking on something and won't give Lina a hint that it's Tom. Or Janine immediately coughs up Tom, and Lina sees a slobbered Tom get spit out. Lina takes Tom, Janine goes with Francis and Janine's whole plan backfires with Francine taking Janine out of the house instead of Lina. Freaking perfect idea Tom!
I doubt Janine will let Tom go all the way down to her stomach. She wants Tom more than anyone else. She sacrificed so much to get him. Now is she going to let him die, heck no. She would rather embarras herself by vomiting in front of her mother than let Tom die inside her.
I can picture it. Tom twitches, she swallows, Janine's eyes light up like deer in headlights. Lina is thinking "wtf up with her now." Then Tom pops out of Janine's mouth. Lina is shocked. Then awkward silence. Janine decides if she should put Tom back in her panties. Lina then demands for Tom and threatens for almost killing him.
Then we have 3 endings, I believe. Then either Janine runs away to the car with Tom, and Lina chases her. Or Lina gets the best of Janine and convinces Janine to hand Tom over. Or, some deal happens where they schedule times to have their own fun with Tom.
It's a cliffhanger, but we know something big is going to happen next chapter. Let's see what happens. I really, really, really can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: December 12 2015 4:51 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Duggernaut,
I think I was too early becuase I saw you updated "Michaels story" and the "Nefarious Nine". I reviewed those probably like minutes after you posted them. Then I went offline becuase "Tom's Story" wasn't posted yet, so I didn't check again last night.
Now I see that you did post Tom's Story yesterday and I was too quick to recheck the most recent page. Well, now I know.
@Carycomic,
I enjoy reviewing first becuase that way others can reply to my review after they read the story since I tend to break down the chapter. Part of me just doesn't want to be late to the party.
Author's Response:
And I added another chapter (5) to the nefarious nine after you reviewed chapter 4 :)